Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Please try to answer the question directly and clearly. Avoid confusing words like 'thinking' instead of 'singing'. Use simple and correct sentences to express your opinion naturally. For example, say 'I like singing when I am alone because it is fun, but I don't like singing in front of others because I don't like how my voice sounds.'

예시: I like singing when I am alone because it is fun and relaxing. However, I don't enjoy singing in front of others because I feel shy and don't like how my voice sounds.

제안: Your answer is mostly clear but needs better grammar and vocabulary. Use correct verb forms and avoid short, incomplete sentences. For example, say 'No, I have never learned how to sing, but I wish I had. It would be nice to sing songs gracefully.'

예시: No, I have never learned how to sing, but I wish I had. It would be nice to sing songs gracefully and confidently.

제안: Good attempt, but improve sentence structure and word choice. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, say 'I don't have a specific person in mind, but if I had to choose, I would like to sing for my friends because singing karaoke together is fun.'

예시: I don't have a specific person in mind, but if I had to choose, I would like to sing for my friends because singing karaoke together is fun and enjoyable.

제안: Be careful with word choice; 'thinking' should be 'singing'. Use complete sentences and linking words. For example, say 'Yes, singing can bring happiness to people because it helps them relax. I follow many singers, and listening to their songs makes me feel relieved.'

예시: Yes, singing can bring happiness to people because it helps them relax and feel joyful. I follow many singers, and listening to their songs makes me feel relieved and calm.

× To a certain extent, I do not like thinking because I don't like my. Voice the way sounds when I started thinking.

✓ To a certain extent, I do not like singing because I don't like the way my voice sounds when I start singing.

The original sentence has sentence structure errors and unclear phrasing. 'Thinking' should be 'singing' to match the question. 'My. Voice the way sounds' is incorrect; it should be 'the way my voice sounds'. Also, 'when I started thinking' should be 'when I start singing' to maintain present tense and clarity.

× But however I do like to see when I was alone, it was really really fun.

✓ However, I do like to sing when I am alone; it is really, really fun.

Using both 'But' and 'however' together is redundant. Also, 'like to see' is incorrect; it should be 'like to sing'. The tense should be consistent: 'when I was alone' should be 'when I am alone' to express a habitual action. The sentence structure is improved by separating clauses properly.

× No, I have never learned how to sing before, but I wish I have learned one.

✓ No, I have never learned how to sing before, but I wish I had learned.

The phrase 'I wish I have learned' is incorrect; the correct form is 'I wish I had learned' to express a past unreal condition. Also, 'learned one' is unclear and unnecessary.

× It would be nice to be able to sing a song. Very gracefully.

✓ It would be nice to be able to sing a song very gracefully.

The phrase 'Very gracefully' is a sentence fragment. It should be connected to the previous sentence to form a complete sentence.

× I would like to think to sing for my friends.

✓ I would like to sing for my friends.

The phrase 'like to think to sing' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'would like to sing' without 'think'.

× It would be fun to sing with my friends in the karaoke.

✓ It would be fun to sing with my friends at karaoke.

The article 'the' before 'karaoke' is unnecessary when referring to the activity. Also, 'at karaoke' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× Yes, of course, thinking always bring happiness to people, and I suppose that's why the thinkers exists.

✓ Yes, of course, singing always brings happiness to people, and I suppose that's why singers exist.

'Thinking' should be 'singing' to match the context. 'Bring' should be 'brings' to agree with singular subject 'singing'. 'Thinkers' should be 'singers' and 'exists' should be 'exist' to agree with plural subject.

× I do follow lots of singers because by listening to their songs.

✓ I do follow lots of singers because listening to their songs helps me feel relieved and relaxed.

The phrase 'because by listening to their songs' is incomplete and unclear. It should be connected properly to explain the reason.

× It helps me feel relieved and relax.

✓ It helps me feel relieved and relaxed.

'Relax' is a verb; the adjective 'relaxed' should be used to describe the feeling.