Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer has good ideas but some sentences are unclear and have grammatical errors. Try to speak more clearly and use correct sentence structures. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' properly to connect your ideas.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions. For example, when I feel stressed, singing my favorite songs lifts my mood. Additionally, I find singing a fun way to connect with others during social gatherings.

제안: Your answer is difficult to understand due to unclear phrases and grammar mistakes. Please try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use correct tenses and vocabulary related to singing, such as 'vocal training', 'pitch', and 'rhythm'.

예시: Yes, I learned how to sing when I was a child. I received basic vocal training and learned about pitch and rhythm. Singing has always been my passion, and this training helped me improve my confidence.

제안: Your answer has good content but contains grammar errors and unclear phrases. Try to use linking words like 'also' and 'moreover' correctly. Make sure your sentences are complete and clear. Avoid repetition and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

예시: I would like to sing for my family, friends, and myself. Singing for them feels personal and meaningful because they know me and appreciate my efforts. Moreover, their support motivates me to improve and enjoy singing more.

제안: Your answer is unclear and has many grammatical mistakes. Try to express your ideas clearly and use correct sentence structures. Use linking words like 'because' to explain your reasons. Avoid repeating words and keep your answer concise.

예시: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because when a person is sad, listening to music can refresh their mood. They can enjoy songs and feel motivated.

× For example, when I'm feeling stressed singing mine favorite song.

✓ For example, when I'm feeling stressed, I sing my favorite song.

The original sentence lacks a main verb in the second clause. 'Singing' should be replaced with 'I sing' to form a complete sentence. Also, 'mine' is incorrect; it should be 'my' to show possession.

× For example, when I'm feeling stressed singing mine favorite song.

✓ For example, when I'm feeling stressed, I sing my favorite song.

The pronoun 'mine' is incorrectly used here; the possessive adjective 'my' should be used before a noun to indicate possession.

× And Stanley lips, my mood.

✓ And Stanley lifts my mood.

The original sentence is unclear and likely contains a typo. 'Stanley lips' seems incorrect; assuming it means 'Stanley lifts' or 'singing lifts' the mood. The sentence needs a verb to make sense.

× Additionally, I find it a fun way to connect with other during social.

✓ Additionally, I find it a fun way to connect with others during social events.

The word 'other' should be plural 'others' to refer to people. Also, 'during social' is incomplete; it should be 'during social events' or 'during social gatherings'.

× Yes, I have learned how to sing when I was a child I receive basic vocal training an learned learned about Peach an rhythm singing was a.

✓ Yes, I learned how to sing when I was a child. I received basic vocal training and learned about pitch and rhythm. Singing was a passion of mine.

The sentence has multiple tense errors and typos. 'Have learned' is acceptable but inconsistent with 'when I was a child'; simple past 'learned' fits better. 'Receive' should be past tense 'received'. 'An learned learned' is a typo; should be 'and learned'. 'Peach an rhythm' should be 'pitch and rhythm'. The sentence is fragmented and needs to be split for clarity.

× Singing was a passion of mine so those listen really helped me improve my confidence and training.

✓ Singing was a passion of mine, so those lessons really helped me improve my confidence and training.

The conjunction 'so' should be preceded by a comma. 'Those listen' is incorrect; it should be 'those lessons' or 'that listening'. The sentence needs correction for clarity and grammar.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Who do you want to sing for?

No correction needed; the sentence is grammatically correct.

× Also, singing for myself an them feels more personal and meaningful because they know me will an appreciate my efforts.

✓ Also, singing for myself and them feels more personal and meaningful because they know me well and appreciate my efforts.

The pronoun 'an' is a typo and should be 'and'. 'Will an appreciate' is incorrect; it should be 'well and appreciate'. The sentence needs correction for clarity and proper pronoun use.

× Moreover, their support and encouragement motivate me in to improve and enjoy that explore.

✓ Moreover, their support and encouragement motivate me to improve and enjoy exploring that.

The phrase 'motivate me in to improve' is incorrect; it should be 'motivate me to improve'. 'Enjoy that explore' is incorrect; it should be 'enjoy exploring that'.

× Yes, I do think singing and bring happiness to people because when.

✓ Yes, I do think singing can bring happiness to people because when...

The phrase 'singing and bring' is incorrect; it should be 'singing can bring' to express ability or possibility. The sentence is incomplete but corrected for grammar.

× A person is said if they listen music, their mood will refresh and they can enjoy enjoy song.

✓ If a person is sad, listening to music will refresh their mood and they can enjoy songs.

The original sentence is fragmented and has word order issues. 'Is said' should be 'is sad'. 'Listen music' should be 'listening to music'. 'Enjoy enjoy song' is repetitive and should be 'enjoy songs'.

× And they they can. Be motivated.

✓ And they can be motivated.

The repetition 'they they' is a typo and should be corrected to a single 'they'. The sentence fragment should be combined properly.