Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct. Use clear sentences and avoid redundancy. For example, say "I really enjoy singing; it's my favorite hobby. I often do karaoke with my family on weekends. I've loved singing since I was a child."

예시: I really enjoy singing; it's my favorite hobby. I often do karaoke with my family on weekends. I've loved singing since I was a child.

제안: Improve sentence structure and clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, "I have never taken formal singing lessons; I taught myself. However, I am currently trying to find a teacher, but it's difficult to find one in Cambodia."

예시: I have never taken formal singing lessons; I taught myself. However, I am currently trying to find a teacher, but it's difficult to find one in Cambodia.

제안: Focus on clear and correct sentence structure. Avoid repetition and use linking words. For example, "Currently, I usually sing for my family. In the future, I hope to perform for a larger audience because I love sharing my voice and becoming famous."

예시: Currently, I usually sing for my family. In the future, I hope to perform for a larger audience because I love sharing my voice and becoming famous.

제안: Use more natural expressions and correct grammar. Connect ideas logically. For example, "I believe singing is a fun way to relieve boredom and stress. It allows people to express themselves and can make them happier, whether they are alone or celebrating with family and friends."

예시: I believe singing is a fun way to relieve boredom and stress. It allows people to express themselves and can make them happier, whether they are alone or celebrating with family and friends.

× I absolutely enjoyed singing is my hobby is my favorite hobby.

✓ I absolutely enjoy singing; it is my favorite hobby.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'enjoyed' (past tense) when the present tense 'enjoy' is appropriate to express a current hobby. Also, the sentence structure is awkward and needs to be split for clarity.

× I like to do karaoke every weekends with my family of course.

✓ I like to do karaoke every weekend with my family, of course.

The phrase 'every weekends' is incorrect because 'every' should be followed by a singular noun. The correct phrase is 'every weekend'.

× And I've always seen since little.

✓ And I've always loved it since I was little.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'Seen' is incorrect here; the intended meaning is likely 'loved' or 'enjoyed'. Also, 'since little' should be 'since I was little' for clarity.

× An I grew up loving it.

✓ And I grew up loving it.

The word 'An' is a typo and should be 'And' to connect the sentence properly.

× I've never learned how to sing really it just I learned to sing it on my own, never with a teacher or any professional singer.

✓ I've never learned how to sing formally; I just learned to sing on my own, never with a teacher or any professional singer.

The sentence is run-on and unclear. Adding 'formally' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'learned to sing it' is awkward; 'learned to sing' is sufficient.

× I also trying I'm also trying to find one right now but it's really hard to find a teacher right now in Cambodia.

✓ I'm also trying to find one right now, but it's really hard to find a teacher in Cambodia.

The phrase 'I also trying' is incorrect; it should be 'I'm also trying' to use the present continuous tense properly. Also, 'right now' is repeated unnecessarily.

× Right now I usually just sing for my family, but in the future I'm hoping that I can sing for many peoples an audience.

✓ Right now I usually just sing for my family, but in the future I'm hoping that I can sing for many people, an audience.

'Peoples' is incorrect; the plural of 'people' is 'people' when referring to multiple persons. 'An audience' is singular and should be separated by a comma.

× I love to share, to share my voice to the others.

✓ I love to share my voice with others.

The correct preposition after 'share' is 'with' not 'to'. Also, 'the others' is unnecessary; 'others' suffices.

× Enlist an be famous, you know.

✓ I want to enlist and be famous, you know.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'I want to' clarifies the intention. Also, 'an' should be 'and'.

× I think singing is an absolutely fun thing to do when you're bored and feeling stress.

✓ I think singing is an absolutely fun thing to do when you're bored and feeling stressed.

The word 'stress' is a noun; the adjective form 'stressed' is needed to describe the feeling.

× You need to share your voice, you need to sing and scream out your guts.

✓ You need to share your voice; you need to sing and scream out your guts.

The original sentence is a comma splice. It should be separated by a semicolon or split into two sentences.

× And it definitely make people more happier, not just wonder, sad, but also when they're partying with their families or friends.

✓ And it definitely makes people happier, not just when they're worried or sad, but also when they're partying with their families or friends.

'Make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'it'. 'More happier' is incorrect; 'happier' alone suffices. 'Wonder' is incorrect; likely intended 'worried'.