Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: คำตอบของคุณควรชัดเจนและเป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น โดยเริ่มด้วยประโยคหลักที่ตอบคำถามโดยตรง จากนั้นเสริมรายละเอียดที่ชัดเจนและเชื่อมโยงกันอย่างมีเหตุผล เช่น อธิบายว่าทำไมการร้องเพลงถึงทำให้คุณรู้สึกผ่อนคลายและช่วยให้คุณแสดงออกได้ดีขึ้น

예시: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions. I have enjoyed singing since I was a child, and it always makes me feel happy and calm.

제안: คำตอบควรมีโครงสร้างที่ชัดเจนและใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อให้เนื้อหาดูสมเหตุสมผลมากขึ้น นอกจากนี้ควรใช้คำศัพท์ที่ถูกต้องและเหมาะสม เช่น ใช้ 'sing' แทน 'see' และอธิบายเพิ่มเติมเกี่ยวกับประสบการณ์การเรียนร้องเพลง

예시: Yes, I learned how to sing when I was in grade 5 or 6, but I stopped taking lessons later. However, I still enjoy singing by myself in my free time for fun and relaxation.

제안: คำตอบควรตอบคำถามโดยตรงและใช้ประโยคที่สมบูรณ์ พร้อมเชื่อมโยงความคิดอย่างชัดเจน ควรหลีกเลี่ยงคำพูดที่ไม่ชัดเจนและเพิ่มรายละเอียดที่ช่วยให้เข้าใจความรู้สึกของคุณมากขึ้น

예시: I usually sing for myself because it helps me express my emotions and feel more comfortable when I am alone.

제안: คำตอบควรมีความต่อเนื่องและใช้คำเชื่อมที่เหมาะสมเพื่อให้ประโยคสมบูรณ์และเข้าใจง่าย ควรใช้คำศัพท์ที่ถูกต้อง เช่น 'singing' แทน 'sinking' และอธิบายเหตุผลอย่างชัดเจน

예시: Yes, I absolutely think that singing brings happiness to people because music can connect people from different cultures and languages, and it always creates a fun and joyful atmosphere.

× Yes, I like singing because I have learned about singing when I was little and when I think it made me feel relaxed and I can express myself and I singing so.

✓ Yes, I like singing because I learned about singing when I was little and I think it made me feel relaxed and I can express myself, so I like it.

The sentence incorrectly mixes present perfect 'have learned' with a specific past time 'when I was little'. The past simple 'learned' is appropriate here. Also, 'I singing so' is incorrect; it should be 'so I like it' to complete the thought clearly.

× Yes, I have learned how to see when I was about grade 5 or 6 and after that I quit.

✓ Yes, I learned how to sing when I was about grade 5 or 6 and after that I quit.

The verb 'see' is a mistake; it should be 'sing'. Also, 'have learned' is less appropriate with a specific past time 'when I was about grade 5 or 6'; past simple 'learned' fits better.

× Learn about singing an I sing by myself in my free time too.

✓ I learned about singing and I sing by myself in my free time too.

The sentence lacks a subject and has a typo 'an' instead of 'and'. Adding the subject 'I' and correcting 'an' to 'and' fixes the sentence structure.

× For fun and relaxing.

✓ I do it for fun and relaxation.

The original is a sentence fragment without a subject or verb. Adding 'I do it' and changing 'relaxing' to the noun 'relaxation' completes the sentence.

× I don't have anyone to sing for ages 1 to sing it to myself to express.

✓ I don't have anyone to sing for; I sing to myself to express my feelings.

The phrase 'ages 1' is unclear and likely incorrect. The sentence is confusing and lacks proper pronoun use. Clarifying the meaning and restructuring improves clarity.

× Ah, my emotion too.

✓ Ah, to express my emotions too.

The original is a fragment. Adding 'to express' and pluralizing 'emotion' to 'emotions' makes it a proper phrase.

× Become myself more in my own place.

✓ It helps me become more myself in my own space.

The original is a fragment and unclear. Adding a subject and verb clarifies the meaning.

× Yes, I absolutely think that sinking bring happiness to people because.

✓ Yes, I absolutely think that singing brings happiness to people because.

'Sinking' is a typo for 'singing'. Also, 'bring' should be 'brings' to agree with singular subject 'singing'.

× Music can. Connect people together, even if they used different languages.

✓ Music can connect people together, even if they use different languages.

The period after 'can' is incorrect. Also, 'used' should be 'use' to maintain present tense consistent with 'can connect'.

× An it may always make people have. Fun.

✓ And it may always make people have fun.

'An' should be 'And'. The period after 'have' is incorrect and breaks the sentence. Removing the period fixes the sentence.