Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding redundancy and grammatical errors. Use simpler and more direct sentences to express your ideas. For example, say "I love singing because it helps me express my feelings when I can't find the right words."

예시: Yes, I love singing because it helps me express my feelings when I can't find the right words. Singing allows me to share my emotions in a way that speaking sometimes cannot.

제안: Focus on clarity and correct grammar. Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. For example, "Although I'm not the best singer, my dad taught me how to sing properly and how to breathe correctly while singing."

예시: Although I'm not the best singer, my dad taught me how to sing properly and how to breathe correctly while singing. As I grew up, I continued practicing these techniques to improve my singing.

제안: Improve sentence structure and vocabulary to make your answer clearer and more natural. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, "I want to sing for my parents because they always appreciate my voice. They often ask me to sing their favorite songs, and it makes me happy to see them enjoy my singing."

예시: I want to sing for my parents because they always appreciate my voice. They often ask me to sing their favorite songs, and it makes me happy to see them enjoy my singing.

제안: Make your answer more coherent by using linking words and clearer sentences. Avoid repetition and incomplete phrases. For example, "Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it allows people to express their feelings. Songs can uplift moods and sharing them through singing can make people feel joyful."

예시: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it allows people to express their feelings. Songs can uplift moods and sharing them through singing can make people feel joyful.

× Well in fact I sing because there are times that I can't express myself and but through singing I am able to sing install that is relating to what I am feeling.

✓ Well, in fact, I sing because there are times that I can't express myself, but through singing I am able to express what I am feeling.

The original sentence incorrectly uses both 'and' and 'but' together, which is redundant and grammatically incorrect. The correct conjunction here is 'but' to contrast the inability to express oneself and the ability to do so through singing. Also, 'install' is likely a mishearing or typo and should be 'express'. Proper punctuation improves clarity.

× I am not quite the best that saying but I do have told my dad used to teach me how to same properly and how to breathe when singing.

✓ I am not quite the best at singing, but I was told my dad used to teach me how to sing properly and how to breathe when singing.

The sentence has incorrect verb tense and word choice. 'I do have told' is incorrect; the past tense 'was told' fits better. 'Same' should be 'sing'. Also, 'that saying' should be 'at singing' to correctly express the skill. These corrections align the sentence with proper past tense usage and correct vocabulary.

× So as I grew up I. I am taught how to speak seeing properly since my dad was is.

✓ So as I grew up, I was taught how to sing properly since my dad was.

The sentence has tense inconsistency and unclear wording. 'I am taught' should be past tense 'I was taught' to match 'as I grew up'. 'Speak seeing' is likely a mishearing of 'sing properly'. 'Since my dad was is' is incomplete; 'since my dad was' suffices. These corrections fix tense and clarity issues.

× I want to sing for my parents because whenever I see they always show appreciation of how my voice is an.

✓ I want to sing for my parents because whenever I see them, they always show appreciation for how my voice is.

The sentence is missing the object pronoun 'them' after 'I see'. Also, 'appreciation of' should be 'appreciation for' to correctly express gratitude. Adding 'them' clarifies the sentence and corrects pronoun usage.

× The usually asked me to sing their favorite song and it makes me happy that they enjoy missing.

✓ They usually ask me to sing their favorite songs, and it makes me happy that they enjoy listening.

'The' should be 'They' as the subject pronoun. 'Asked' should be present tense 'ask' to match the habitual action. 'Their favorite song' can be plural 'songs' for generality. 'Enjoy missing' is incorrect; likely meant 'enjoy listening'. These corrections fix pronoun, tense, and word choice errors.

× Yes, as I mentioned, that for me is a it is a way of expressing yourself.

✓ Yes, as I mentioned, for me it is a way of expressing yourself.

The phrase 'that for me is a it is a way' is redundant and incorrect. Removing 'that' and 'a' before 'it is' clarifies the sentence. Also, mixing 'me' and 'yourself' is inconsistent but acceptable in conversational style. The correction improves sentence flow.

× And I think that singing could make people happy because there's a song that could make you happy and through singing it you can express yourself.

✓ And I think that singing can make people happy because there are songs that can make you happy, and through singing, you can express yourself.

'There's a song' should be plural 'there are songs' to generalize. 'Could' is changed to 'can' for present general truth. The phrase 'through singing it' is awkward; inserting a comma after 'singing' improves clarity. These changes correct the 'there be' structure and improve sentence clarity.