Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy such as "whenever I think" which is unclear here. Also, try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and refresh my mind. Moreover, it boosts my mood and reduces stress effectively.

제안: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and redundancy. Use correct verb forms like "learned" instead of "learn". Avoid repeating the same idea twice. Also, try to make your sentences clearer and more concise with linking words.

예시: No, I have never learned how to sing, but I really want to because it would help me develop my hidden talent and open up good career opportunities.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Avoid unnecessary phrases like "because why?" and improve sentence structure. Be specific and coherent by using linking words and correct verb tenses.

예시: I want to sing for my mother because she has always encouraged and motivated me to pursue my talents, and singing for her would be a way to show my appreciation.

제안: Your answer is difficult to understand due to grammar and vocabulary errors. Use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. Try to organize your ideas logically with linking words and provide specific reasons or examples.

예시: Definitely, singing brings joy to people's lives because it lifts their mood. Additionally, listening to music can help reduce anxiety and maintain a positive mindset.

× No, I have never learn singing, but I really want to.

✓ No, I have never learnt singing, but I really want to.

The verb 'learn' should be in the past participle form 'learnt' after 'have never' to correctly form the present perfect tense.

× But I really want to acquire singing skills because it helped me to accomplish my hidden talent and also it is providing me a good opportunity to make good career in this field.

✓ But I really want to acquire singing skills because it helps me to accomplish my hidden talent and also it provides me a good opportunity to make a good career in this field.

The verbs 'helped' and 'is providing' should be in the present tense 'helps' and 'provides' to match the present context of wanting to acquire skills. Also, 'make good career' should be 'make a good career' to use the correct article.

× I want to sing for my mother because why? Because when I saw my mother always encouraged and motivated me to do past in their field becaused it provides me a good opportunity to accomplish my hidden talent.

✓ I want to sing for my mother because she has always encouraged and motivated me to pursue my passion in this field, as it provides me a good opportunity to accomplish my hidden talent.

The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical. 'Because why?' is unnecessary. 'When I saw my mother always encouraged' is incorrect; it should be 'she has always encouraged'. 'Do past in their field' is unclear and corrected to 'pursue my passion in this field'. 'Becaused' is a typo corrected to 'as' to connect the ideas properly.

× Definitely singing bring joyful joyful in their indie people life becauses then.

✓ Definitely, singing brings joy to people's lives because then,

The verb 'bring' should be 'brings' to agree with the singular subject 'singing'. 'Joyful joyful' is redundant and incorrect; 'joy' is the correct noun. 'Their indie people life' is unclear and corrected to 'people's lives'.

× Sing a song, it really lived the person mode and sometimes listen to the music is also helpful to release the anxiety and maintain the good mode of the person.

✓ Singing a song really lifts a person's mood, and sometimes listening to music is also helpful to relieve anxiety and maintain a good mood.

The sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Sing a song' should be 'Singing a song'. 'Lived the person mode' is incorrect; it should be 'lifts a person's mood'. 'Listen to the music' should be 'listening to music'. 'Release the anxiety' should be 'relieve anxiety'. 'Maintain the good mode of the person' is corrected to 'maintain a good mood'.