Singing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer needs to be clearer and more natural. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons using simple linking words like 'because' or 'and'. Avoid unclear phrases and incorrect words.

예시: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relieve stress and makes me feel happy. For example, when I sing cheerful songs, I feel more relaxed and joyful.

제안: Your answer should be more structured and complete. Start with a clear topic sentence, then explain your reasons with linking words like 'because' or 'but'. Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear expressions.

예시: No, I have never learned how to sing professionally because I don't plan to be a singer. However, I want to learn now because I want to improve my singing skills for fun.

제안: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Please answer directly who you want to sing for, then give specific reasons with linking words. Avoid irrelevant or confusing phrases.

예시: I want to sing for my friends when we go to karaoke because it helps us bond and have fun together.

제안: Your answer should be clearer and more natural. Start with a direct answer, then explain why with simple and correct vocabulary. Use linking words like 'because' to connect ideas logically.

예시: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because it helps reduce stress and releases chemicals in the brain that make us feel happy.

× I love singing frame which is cause and singing have two meaning for me.

✓ I love singing because it has two meanings for me.

The original sentence uses 'frame which is cause and' incorrectly as a conjunction. The correct conjunction to express reason is 'because'. Also, 'singing have' should be 'singing has' due to subject-verb agreement.

× I love singing frame which is cause and singing have two meaning for me.

✓ I love singing because it has two meanings for me.

The word 'meaning' should be plural 'meanings' because it refers to more than one meaning.

× Firstly is can help me release my stress through singing some session or happy son such as incapable cannonball and secondly it really help me interpret.

✓ Firstly, it can help me release my stress through singing some songs or happy songs such as 'Incapable' and 'Cannonball', and secondly, it really helps me interpret.

The sentence lacks proper subject and verb agreement and has unclear phrases. 'is can help' should be 'it can help'. 'some session or happy son' should be 'some songs or happy songs'. Also, 'help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject 'it'.

× No, I haven't learned how this thing before is 'cause I think I would not be a singer in the future.

✓ No, I haven't learned how to do this before because I think I will not be a singer in the future.

The phrase 'how this thing' is unclear and should be 'how to do this'. Also, 'is 'cause' is informal and should be 'because'. 'would not be' is better as 'will not be' to express future intention.

× So I haven't done it.

✓ So I haven't done it before.

Adding 'before' clarifies the time frame of the action.

× However I think I want to learn it now since is because I want to sing more, better and when my.

✓ However, I think I want to learn it now because I want to sing more and better.

The phrase 'since is because' is redundant; only 'because' is needed. The phrase 'and when my' is incomplete and should be removed.

× I wanna sing if my friend with during the karaoke is be 'cause we can strengthen our bones during this time in.

✓ I want to sing with my friends during karaoke because we can strengthen our bonds during this time.

'If my friend with during the karaoke is be' is incorrect. It should be 'with my friends during karaoke'. Also, 'strengthen our bones' is likely a mistake for 'strengthen our bonds'.

× The singing of mutual Sean songs such as. Up. Some can improve. Like the songs from the singer?

✓ We sing mutual songs such as 'Up' which can improve our mood, like songs from the singer.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It should be restructured to form a complete sentence.

× Sure, I think singing can bring happiness to people is becauses UM.

✓ Sure, I think singing can bring happiness to people because...

'is becauses UM' is incorrect and should be 'because'. 'UM' is a filler and should be omitted in formal speech.

× Singing is a one way to really stress which can. Boo boo's our end of an arrows in our body which can which is a new transmitter to less feel happiness and pleasure.

✓ Singing is one way to relieve stress, which can boost endorphins in our body, acting as neurotransmitters that help us feel happiness and pleasure.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains many errors. 'really stress' should be 'relieve stress'. 'Boo boo's our end of an arrows' is incorrect and should be 'boost endorphins'. 'which can which is a new transmitter to less feel happiness and pleasure' is unclear and corrected to explain the function of endorphins as neurotransmitters.