Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations and repetitions, and add one specific example with linking words. Keep it under five sentences.

예시: I’m fairly good at memorising things, especially when I’m interested in the topic. For example, I learned several song lyrics in a few days because I enjoyed the music, so I remembered them quickly. However, I often struggle to remember facts I find boring, so I use notes to help me.

제안: Provide a direct topic sentence then give a specific example or brief explanation using linking words. Avoid vague claims like 'I believe' and expand slightly to show evidence of responsibility.

예시: I rarely forget important things because I’m quite organised. For instance, I always write down deadlines and set phone alerts, so I haven’t missed any major appointments in recent years.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and give a specific detail and remedy using linking words. Correct grammar and reduce filler words.

예시: The main thing I need to remember every day is taking my medication on time. Because I sometimes forget, I set an alarm and keep the pills next to my toothbrush so I’ll see them when I brush my teeth.

제안: Good practical answer — make it more concise and add one linking phrase to explain effectiveness. Remove unnecessary time details unless they add meaning.

예시: I usually set reminders on my phone to remember important things. For example, when I realised I might be late for a 6:00 meeting, I set an alarm, which ensured I left on time and didn’t miss it.

× 'I think I can memorize well.'

✓ 'I think I can memorize things well.'

'Memorize' as a verb here is transitive and normally takes an object; adding a direct object clarifies what is being memorized. Suggestion: include the object (e.g., "things") after the verb or use a gerund phrase if appropriate.'

× 'I did not say that I'm very good at it or or dumb at it, but I think I can memorize well.'

✓ 'I did not say that I'm very good at it or dumb at it, but I think I can memorize things well.'

'Did not say' is past tense, which is fine, but the sentence had a repeated word "or" and an awkward phrase "dumb at it." Removing the duplicate word and making the object explicit improves clarity. Also using present 'I'm' after 'did not say' is acceptable because the speaker refers to a current state; maintain consistent meaning.'

× 'For example, if I have interest in something, I'll memorize it quick and if it's not really interesting for me, then I don't remember it that much.'

✓ 'For example, if I am interested in something, I'll memorize it quickly, and if it's not really interesting to me, I won't remember it much.'

'Have interest' is not the natural collocation; use 'am interested'. 'Quick' is an adverbial use requiring 'quickly'. Also maintain conditional/future reference consistently: use 'won't remember' for future result. Use 'interesting to me' rather than 'for me' for correctness.'

× 'That usually does not happen with me.'

✓ 'That usually does not happen to me.'

'Happen with me' is less idiomatic than 'happen to me' when talking about events affecting someone. Use 'to' for correct collocation.'

× 'I'm a responsible person and I believe that I do not forget important stuff that needs priority.'

✓ 'I'm a responsible person and I believe that I do not forget important things that are a priority.'

'Stuff' is informal; 'things' is more appropriate in this context. 'Needs priority' is incorrect because 'things' do not 'need priority' grammatically; use 'are a priority' or 'need prioritizing.' This corrects pronoun/reference and phrasing.'

× 'This nothing very particular that I need to remember in my daily life.'

✓ 'There is nothing very particular that I need to remember in my daily life.'

'This nothing...' lacks a verb and is ungrammatical. Use 'There is' to introduce existence, matching the existential construction required.'

× 'That is the one thing that I struggle with most and remembering.'

✓ 'That is the one thing that I struggle with most: remembering it.'

'...and remembering' is a fragment that doesn't connect correctly. Rewriting as 'remembering it' or using a colon fixes the structure so the gerund phrase functions as the object of 'struggle with.'

× 'I usually put a reminder in my phone. For example, even today I had a meeting at 6:00 and it was almost 545 and I thought I'd forget or be late, so I just put a reminder in my phone because I was using my phone at that time so it was easier for me.'

✓ 'I usually put a reminder in my phone. For example, today I had a meeting at 6:00, and it was almost 5:45 when I thought I'd forget or be late, so I put a reminder on my phone because I was already using it, which made it easier.'

'Almost 545' should be 'almost 5:45' and times need punctuation/format. 'I just put' is acceptable but past simple 'I put' fits the past event. Use 'on my phone' (more idiomatic than 'in'), and clarify clauses by combining and removing repetition. Replace 'using my phone at that time' with 'already using it' to avoid redundancy.'