Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and clear: start with a concise topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler words (uh, um) and incomplete sentences. Use linking words like "however" or "but" if contrasting. Keep it under five sentences.

예시: Not really. I find it hard to memorise facts quickly, especially for tests, because I get distracted easily. However, I remember things better when I revise them repeatedly or make simple notes.

제안: Answer directly with a clear yes/no, then give a specific example of something you have or haven't forgotten. Use one linking word (e.g., "but" or "although") and avoid repetition. Keep sentences complete and specific.

예시: Yes, I have. For example, I once forgot a dentist appointment because I didn't write it down, but I never forget important family events because I put them in my calendar.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence about what you need to remember daily (appointments, tasks, names). Give one specific reason and an example. Avoid unrelated personal details unless relevant, and use linking words like "for example" or "because".

예시: I need to remember tasks and appointments in my daily life, such as meetings and homework, because missing them causes problems. For example, I use a phone reminder to make sure I never miss a class or a deadline.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence describing your method, then explain why it works with a specific detail. Use linking words like "so" or "therefore" and avoid grammatical errors and repetition. Keep to two or three sentences max.

예시: I use music and repetition to remember important things. For instance, I play a particular playlist while studying a topic, so the melody helps trigger my memory during exams.

× No, I think so. I think my memorizing level is a 0 because. Example and, uh, yesterday, uh, in activities I when.

✓ No, I don't think so. I would rate my memory level as zero. For example, yesterday during activities I couldn't remember things.

The original contains pronoun and sentence-structure issues. 'I think so' conflicts with 'No' so change to 'I don't think so' to match meaning. 'My memorizing level is a 0 because.' is fragmentary; use 'I would rate my memory level as zero' for clarity. 'Example and... yesterday, ... in activities I when' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'For example, yesterday during activities I couldn't remember things.' Suggestions: ensure subject pronouns match verbs and avoid sentence fragments; organize examples with 'for example' followed by a complete clause.

× No, because umm, in normal day I didn't remember, but uh, the important day or something, uh, important, uh, people I didn't forget. It is especially to me.

✓ No, normally I don't remember many things, but on important days or about important people I don't forget. These are especially important to me.

The sentence mixes past and present inconsistently. 'in normal day I didn't remember' should be 'normally I don't remember' to express habitual present. 'the important day... I didn't forget' should be present habitual 'I don't forget' if the speaker means a general habit. Also 'It is especially to me' is incorrect; use 'These are especially important to me' or 'They are especially important to me.' Suggestion: decide whether you describe a habit (use present simple) or a past event (use past simple) and keep tense consistent.

× Play beats music. I listen to music with my crush and after I listen the music I remember him. Music is best remembered choice.

✓ I play beats music. I listen to music with my crush, and after I listen to the music I remember him. Music is the best way for me to remember.

Several article and collocation issues: 'Play beats music' is unclear but kept as 'I play beats music' if meaning 'I play beat-based music'; consider 'I play beat music' or 'I make beats.' 'after I listen the music' needs the preposition 'to' ('listen to the music'). 'Music is best remembered choice' lacks articles and natural phrasing; use 'Music is the best way for me to remember.' Suggestion: use 'the' with specific nouns ('the music') and prefer natural collocations ('the best way to remember'). Consider rephrasing 'Play beats music' to clearer expression of activity.

× I listen to music when I remembered the important people. Are important lesson, job and all important things when I listen to music.

✓ I listen to music when I want to remember important people, lessons, my job, and other important things.

The phrase 'when I remembered' is wrong tense and construction; use 'when I want to remember' or 'to remember.' 'Are important lesson, job and all important things when I listen to music' is ungrammatical and misorders elements. Rephrase to list items with commas and include possessive ('my job') if needed. Suggestion: use 'when I want to remember' to indicate purpose and keep a parallel structure when listing items.