Memory— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity and conciseness: start with a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct grammar (e.g., "they think I forgot" → "they think I’ve forgotten things"). Use one or two supporting details with linking words and keep within 3–4 sentences. Also watch filler words and repetition like "it's" twice.

예시: Not really. I have a poor memory, which sometimes causes misunderstandings with my friends because they think I’ve forgotten things about them. However, that’s not because I don’t care; I simply forget details easily, so I try to apologise and explain when it happens.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and expand with one or two specific details and a linking word to show consequence or result. Avoid informal fragments; use past tense consistently and add a brief reflection or what you learned.

예시: Yes, I once forgot my mother’s birthday, and she was very upset and cried. As a result, our relationship was strained for a while, and I now set reminders for family events so it never happens again.

제안: Clarify vocabulary and content: use correct verbs ("feeding" not "hitting"), be specific about routine tasks, and use linking words to list items. Keep sentences natural and avoid vague phrases like "there's quite a lot."

예시: In daily life I need to remember my routine tasks, such as feeding my cat, giving her supplements, and doing household chores like laundry. I also plan my work schedule each morning so I don’t forget appointments.

제안: Begin with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar and collocations (e.g., "I can’t really remember many things by myself" not "can really memorize anything"). Use linking words to explain methods and reasons, and give a short example of a tool you use.

예시: I usually take notes and set phone reminders to remember important things. For example, I put birthdays and appointments in my calendar and set alerts, which helps me stay organised and avoid forgetting important dates.

× they often think that I forgot.

✓ they often think that I have forgotten.

The original uses 'forgot' without an auxiliary, which is informal and can be ambiguous. In this context (habitual/repeated perception about past actions), the present perfect 'have forgotten' is more appropriate to show a past action with present relevance. Use 'have forgotten' to indicate the memory lapse relating to the present. Suggestion: Use present perfect for past actions with present relevance (I have forgotten).

× I forget things about them because I don't really care about them.

✓ I forget things about them, but I don't really not care about them.

The original sentence tries to deny the implied reason (that forgetting equals not caring). A clearer correction is to keep simple present for habitual forgetting and add a contrasting clause. The phrase 'I don't really care about them' contradicts the speaker's later claim of love. Use a contrastive conjunction (but) and a negated verb phrase to express the intended meaning. Suggestion: Use contrastive structure (but) and correct negation to convey that forgetting does not mean lack of care.

× But it's it's really not like that.

✓ But it's really not like that.

The original repeats 'it's' accidentally. Remove the duplicated contraction for grammatical correctness and fluency. Suggestion: Proofread to remove accidental repetition.

× I've forgotten my mother's birthday once and she did cry a lot and she actually still brings this topic up.

✓ I forgot my mother's birthday once; she cried a lot, and she still brings the topic up.

Mixing present perfect 'I've forgotten' with 'once' is acceptable but less natural than simple past 'I forgot' for a single completed event. 'She did cry a lot' is emphatic and unnecessary; simple past 'she cried' is more natural. Keep 'she still brings the topic up' in present simple to show it continues. Suggestion: Use simple past for single past events (I forgot) and simple past for subsequent past actions (she cried). Keep present simple for habitual present actions (she still brings it up).

× I do have to remember my routine, like hitting my cat and loving giving her supplements and doing some horsework.

✓ I do have to remember my routine, like feeding my cat, giving her supplements, and doing some housework.

'hitting my cat' is likely a wrong verb choice; 'feeding my cat' fits routine caregiving. 'loving giving' is ungrammatical; use 'giving' or 'making sure to give'. 'horsework' is incorrect — likely 'housework'. Also list items in parallel gerund forms for clarity: feeding, giving, doing. Suggestion: Use correct verbs for intended meanings and keep parallel structure in lists.

× I mostly prefer taking notes and setting up reminders because other than that I can really memorize anything by myself.

✓ I mostly prefer taking notes and setting up reminders because otherwise I can't really memorize things by myself.

The phrase 'other than that' is awkward here; 'otherwise' fits better. 'I can really memorize anything by myself' contradicts speaker's earlier admission of poor memory — likely intended is inability, so 'can't really' is correct. Use 'things' instead of 'anything' for naturalness. Suggestion: Use 'otherwise' for contrast and match modal verb to intended meaning (can vs can't).

× But it's keeping them on track helps me a lot to remind myself about them.

✓ But keeping track of them helps me a lot to remember them.

'It's keeping them on track helps' is ungrammatical (extraneous 'it's'). Use gerund phrase 'Keeping track of them' as subject. 'to remind myself about them' is awkward; use 'to remember them' or 'helps me remember them.' Suggestion: Use gerund subject structure and simpler verb 'remember' for clarity.