Hometown— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the place, then add one or two specific details. Avoid misused words (e.g., 'violence') and aim for natural collocations like 'financial services' or 'business sector.' Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: My hometown is Hong Kong, a city on the south coast of China. It is an international financial hub known for its banking and trading sectors, and it serves as a gateway between China and the rest of the world.

제안: Improve pronunciation and word choice, and organize the answer with linking phrases. Start with a topic sentence, then give specific examples of transport modes and a brief explanation of how they help daily life. Correct vocabulary: 'trams' (or 'light rail'), 'buses', 'MTR', 'minibuses'. Avoid long unclear phrases and grammatical errors.

예시: I like Hong Kong’s efficient public transport. For example, we have the MTR, buses, minibuses and ferries, and trams in some districts. Because of this network, I can usually reach most places within 30–45 minutes, which makes commuting very easy.

제안: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a direct answer giving the length of time, then add one brief supporting detail if needed. Correct tense and phrasing: 'I was born there' or 'I have lived there since I was born.'

예시: I have lived in Hong Kong since I was born, so about 27 years. It’s the place I grew up and I feel attached to it for that reason.

제안: Organize your response: give a clear opinion, then 2–3 specific reasons with linking words (e.g., 'Firstly', 'Additionally'). Avoid unclear references and incorrect names; use correct grammar and clearer vocabulary (e.g., 'mainland China' or 'foreign workers' if relevant). Keep sentences concise and accurate.

예시: I don’t think Hong Kong is ideal for young people. Firstly, the job market is very competitive and high living costs make it hard to afford housing. Additionally, recent policies that allow more mainland workers have increased competition for some jobs, so many young people feel stressed about their future.

× Many people work in violence and the city serves as a gateway between China and the rest of the world.

✓ Many people work in finance and the city serves as a gateway between China and the rest of the world.

The student wrote 'violence' when they meant 'finance'. This is a word choice error (incorrect adjective/noun) causing the sentence to be nonsensical. Suggestion: use the correct noun 'finance' and proofread for words that sound similar but have different meanings.

× My hometown is Hong Kong, which is on the South Coast of China, and it is an international financial hub.

✓ My hometown is Hong Kong, which is on the south coast of China, and it is an international financial hub.

The error is capitalization of a common directional noun. 'South coast' here is a common noun phrase and should not be capitalized. Use lowercase for compass directions when used as adjectives in general descriptions: 'south coast'.

× OK, when it comes to what I like about my city, I would say is the convenient public transport.

✓ OK, when it comes to what I like about my city, I would say it is the convenient public transport.

The original sentence omits the subject 'it' after 'I would say', causing ungrammatical structure. Insert the dummy subject 'it' to complete the clause: 'I would say it is...'. Suggestion: after 'I would say' always follow with a noun phrase or a clause beginning with 'that' or 'it is'.

× You know, in Hong Kong we have different types of public transport like valid bars, MTR and minibars.

✓ You know, in Hong Kong we have different types of public transport like trams, the MTR and minibuses.

'Valid bars' and 'minibars' are incorrect words here. The student likely meant 'trams' and 'minibuses'. This is a vocabulary choice error. Suggestion: use precise transport terms: 'trams', 'MTR' (Mass Transit Railway) and 'minibuses'. Use 'the MTR' with the definite article.

× And if you want, you can even take the ferries.

✓ And if you want, you can even take ferries.

Using 'the ferries' implies specific ferries known to listener; general statement about a mode of transport should omit the definite article: 'take ferries' or 'take the ferry' for a specific route. Suggestion: remove 'the' for general statements.

× So it is very convenient.

✓ So transport is very convenient.

The original 'So it is very convenient' uses the pronoun 'it' unclearly. Making the subject explicit ('transport') improves clarity and ties the sentence to the previous context. Suggestion: refer clearly to the noun just discussed.

× Basically you can just walk through the empty. Patient within 5 minutes and you can go anywhere you want just within around 45 minutes.

✓ Basically you can just walk to a bus stop or MTR station within 5 minutes, and you can get anywhere you want within around 45 minutes.

This sentence has multiple issues: wrong words ('empty. Patient'), unclear quantification and sentence fragmentation. The student likely meant 'walk to a bus stop or station'. This is a vocabulary and sentence structure error. Suggestion: replace garbled fragments with clear nouns ('bus stop or MTR station') and use 'get anywhere within around 45 minutes' for clarity.

× Since when I was born there, I have been living in Hong Kong for around 27 years.

✓ Since I was born, I have been living in Hong Kong for around 27 years.

The phrase 'Since when I was born there' is ungrammatical. Use 'Since I was born' or 'I have lived in Hong Kong since I was born'. 'Since' with a time clause does not need 'when'. Suggestion: use 'since' + clause 'I was born' or 'since birth'.

× That is where I live and where I born.

✓ That is where I live and where I was born.

The clause 'where I born' omits the auxiliary verb 'was' required for the past passive 'born'. This is an incorrect use of verb form/pronoun structure. Suggestion: use 'was born' to indicate place of birth.

× Well, I don't think it is, Elizabeth said Other.

✓ Well, I don't think it is, others said otherwise.

The phrase 'Elizabeth said Other' is nonsensical and appears to be transcription errors. Likely intended 'others said otherwise'. This is a pronoun/reference and word choice problem. Suggestion: use 'others' to refer to other people and 'otherwise' to indicate a different opinion.

× But I think Hong Kong is a very stressful place for teenagers and the adolescent, because nowadays it's extremely difficult for young people to find a job in Hong Kong.

✓ But I think Hong Kong is a very stressful place for teenagers and adolescents, because nowadays it's extremely difficult for young people to find a job in Hong Kong.

Use 'adolescents' (plural) to match 'teenagers', and 'the adolescent' is incorrect here. This is an adjective/noun form error. Suggestion: use plural 'adolescents' when speaking generally.

× Hong Kong government, they said a new policy are they start recruiting many people.

✓ The Hong Kong government said a new policy is that they have started recruiting many people.

Multiple errors: missing definite article 'the' before 'Hong Kong government'; subject-verb agreement 'are' wrong; incorrect word order. This combines article error and tense/agreement issues; primary correction shown uses 'the' and correct verb forms. Suggestion: include 'the' before government names and use 'is that they have started' for reported policy.

× From Bengland, China, which, you know, makes the job market much worse than ever.

✓ They are recruiting many people from mainland China, which, you know, makes the job market worse than before.

'From Bengland, China' is incorrect (likely meant 'mainland China') and 'much worse than ever' is awkward; 'worse than before' is clearer. Also verb reference fixed. Suggestion: use 'mainland China' and comparative phrase 'worse than before'.

× So I think Hong Kong is a very stressful city.

✓ So I think Hong Kong is a very stressful city.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Left as is.

× Many people struggle to buy a flat.

✓ Many people struggle to buy a flat.

This sentence is grammatically correct and appropriate. No change needed.