バンド 7 の例
トピック: Describe a time when you felt proud of a family member
例
Step 1: Identify the Part 2 question requirements. The question asks you to describe a time when you felt proud of a family member. You should mention: - When it happened - Who the person is - What the person did - And explain why you felt proud of him/her Step 2: Strategies for a better answer - Expand your answer with more details or extra stories: Give background about your family member, describe the situation in detail, and add any relevant emotions or reactions. - Coherence is important: Make sure your story flows logically from one point to the next. - Paraphrasing: Use different words to express the same ideas, especially when referring to pride or achievement. - Referring: Refer back to previous points to maintain cohesion. - Signposting: Use linking words and phrases to guide the listener through your answer. - Vocabulary needs to be appropriate as well as varied: Use a range of adjectives and verbs to describe feelings and actions. - Using synonyms or substitution: Avoid repeating the same words, especially “proud” or “family member.” - Demonstrating a range of grammar is key factor: Use different tenses, conditionals, and complex sentences. - Whole Model Answer MUST be more than 300 words. Topic:A time I felt proud of my younger sister When it happened One of the most memorable times I felt incredibly proud of a family member was about two years ago, during my younger sister’s high school graduation ceremony. The event took place in June, right at the end of the academic year, and it was held in the large auditorium of her school. I remember the weather was perfect that day, which made the whole experience even more enjoyable for our family. Who the person is The person I’m referring to is my younger sister, Lily. She’s always been a very determined and hardworking individual, but she’s also quite modest and doesn’t usually talk much about her achievements. Growing up, we were quite close, and I’ve always admired her dedication to her studies and her willingness to help others. What the person did What made this occasion so special was that Lily was chosen as the valedictorian of her graduating class. This meant she had the highest academic performance among all her peers, and she was selected to deliver the graduation speech. I still remember sitting in the audience, feeling a mixture of excitement and nervousness as she walked up to the podium. Her speech was not only eloquent and heartfelt, but it also inspired many of her classmates to pursue their dreams. She spoke about overcoming challenges, the importance of perseverance, and the value of supporting one another. After her speech, she received a standing ovation from everyone in the auditorium, including teachers, students, and parents. And explain why you felt proud of him/her The reason I felt so proud of Lily was not just because of her academic accomplishments, but also because of the way she carried herself throughout the entire process. She worked incredibly hard, often staying up late to study or help her friends with their assignments, yet she never complained or sought attention. Seeing her recognized for her efforts and hearing her speak so confidently in front of a large audience made me realize how much she had grown. It was a truly emotional moment for me, and I felt an overwhelming sense of pride and admiration for her. To this day, whenever I think about that moment, it motivates me to work harder and be a better sibling.
ステップ1：パート2の質問の要件を確認する。 この質問は、家族の一員を誇りに思った時について説明するよう求めています。以下の点を述べる必要があります： - それがいつ起こったか - その人が誰か - その人が何をしたか - そして、なぜその人を誇りに思ったのかを説明すること ステップ2：より良い答えのための戦略 - 答えを詳細や追加の話で広げる：家族の背景を説明し、状況を詳しく描写し、関連する感情や反応を加える。 - 一貫性が重要：話が一つのポイントから次のポイントへ論理的に流れるようにする。 - 言い換え：同じ意味を異なる言葉で表現する、特に「誇り」や「達成」を示すときに使う。 - 振り返り：前のポイントに言及して結束を保つ。 - 案内表現の使用：リンク語やフレーズを使って聞き手を答えに導く。 - 適切かつ多様な語彙：感情や行動を表すため、多様な形容詞や動詞を用いる。 - 同義語や代用の利用：特に「誇り」や「家族の一員」という言葉を繰り返さないようにする。 - 文法の範囲を示すことが重要：異なる時制、条件文、複雑な文を使う。 - モデル解答は300語以上であること。 トピック：妹を誇りに思った時 いつ起こったか 私が家族の一員を非常に誇りに思った最も印象的な時の一つは、約2年前、妹の高校の卒業式の時です。イベントは6月、学年の終わり頃にあり、彼女の学校の大きな講堂で行われました。その日は天気が完璧で、家族にとってこの経験をより楽しいものにしてくれたことを覚えています。 その人が誰か 私が言及しているのは妹のリリーです。彼女はいつも非常に決意があり勤勉な人ですが、同時にとても控えめで、自分の成果についてあまり話しません。私たちは育つ中でとても仲が良く、彼女の勉強への真剣さや人を助ける姿勢をずっと尊敬してきました。 その人が何をしたか この場を特別なものにしたのは、リリーが卒業クラスの代表に選ばれたことです。これは彼女が同級生の中で最も高い学業成績を収め、卒業スピーチをする役割を任されたことを意味します。私は観客席に座り、彼女が演壇に歩み寄るのを見て、興奮と緊張が入り混じった気持ちを覚えています。彼女のスピーチは雄弁かつ心からのもので、多くのクラスメートに夢を追いかけるように刺激を与えました。挑戦を乗り越えること、忍耐の重要性、互いに支え合う価値について話しました。スピーチの後、彼女は先生や生徒、保護者を含む全員から立ち上がって拍手を受けました。 なぜ誇りに思ったか説明する 私がリリーを誇りに思った理由は、単に学業の成果だけでなく、彼女がその過程全体で示した姿勢にもあります。彼女は非常に努力し、夜遅くまで勉強したり友人の課題を手伝ったりしていましたが、決して文句を言わず、注目を求めることもありませんでした。彼女の努力が認められ、大勢の前で自信を持って話す姿を見て、彼女がどれだけ成長したかを実感しました。それは私にとって本当に感動的な瞬間で、彼女に対する強い誇りと敬意を感じました。あの時のことを思い出すたびに、私はもっと努力し、より良い兄弟になろうと励まされています。
文法分析
- **複雑な文構造:** この回答は、詳細や深みを加えるために従属節や関係節を用いた複雑な文の運用能力をよく示しています。例えば、「What made this occasion so special was that Lily was chosen as the valedictorian of her graduating class, which meant she had the highest academic performance among all her peers, and she was selected to deliver the graduation speech.」 - **時制の多様性:** 回答は過去形（“I remember the weather was perfect”）、過去進行形（“she was staying up late to study”）、現在形（“she’s always been a very determined and hardworking individual”）を巧みに切り替えて、背景や状況を提供しています。 - **代名詞の参照と一貫性:** “she,” “her,” “this”といった代名詞が効果的に使われており、一貫性を保ち、繰り返しを避けています。 - **受動態の使用:** 「was chosen as the valedictorian」「was held in the large auditorium」「was recognized for her efforts」など、受動態が適切に使用されています。 - **条件文と使役構文:** 「The reason I felt so proud…was not just because of her academic accomplishments, but also because of the way she carried herself.」のように、理由や仮定の状況を表現するために使役や条件構文が使われています。 - **接続詞と標識語:** 「What made this occasion so special」「After her speech」「The reason I felt so proud」「To this day」「whenever I think about that moment」などの語句が物語の流れを導き、論理的な展開を助けています。
語彙
  • - **Adjectives and Descriptive Phrases:** “incredibly proud,” “memorable,” “determined,” “hardworking,” “modest,” “eloquent,” “heartfelt,” “confidently,” “overwhelming sense of pride and admiration.”
    - **形容詞と説明的なフレーズ:** “incredibly proud,” “memorable,” “determined,” “hardworking,” “modest,” “eloquent,” “heartfelt,” “confidently,” “overwhelming sense of pride and admiration.”
  • - **Academic and Event-Related Vocabulary:** “graduation ceremony,” “valedictorian,” “graduating class,” “academic performance,” “graduation speech,” “standing ovation,” “auditorium,” “peers,” “teachers,” “students,” “parents.”
    - **学術およびイベント関連の語彙:** “graduation ceremony,” “valedictorian,” “graduating class,” “academic performance,” “graduation speech,” “standing ovation,” “auditorium,” “peers,” “teachers,” “students,” “parents.”
  • - **Verbs and Phrasal Verbs:** “admired,” “delivered,” “overcoming challenges,” “pursue their dreams,” “supporting one another,” “recognized for her efforts,” “carried herself,” “motivates me,” “work harder.”
    - **動詞と句動詞:** “admired,” “delivered,” “overcoming challenges,” “pursue their dreams,” “supporting one another,” “recognized for her efforts,” “carried herself,” “motivates me,” “work harder.”
  • - **Emotional and Reflective Language:** “felt an overwhelming sense of pride,” “truly emotional moment,” “admiration,” “motivates me to work harder,” “be a better sibling.”
    - **感情的かつ内省的な言葉:** “felt an overwhelming sense of pride,” “truly emotional moment,” “admiration,” “motivates me to work harder,” “be a better sibling.”
  • - **Idiomatic and Natural Expressions:** “walked up to the podium,” “stood out,” “staying up late,” “never complained or sought attention,” “to this day.”
    - **慣用的で自然な表現：** “walked up to the podium,” “stood out,” “staying up late,” “never complained or sought attention,” “to this day.”
  • These features together demonstrate a Band 7.0 level answer: clear, fluent, well-organized, with a range of grammar and vocabulary, and only occasional minor errors that do not impede communication.
    これらの特徴は、全体としてバンド7.0レベルの回答を示しています：明確で流暢、よく組織されており、様々な文法や語彙を用い、コミュニケーションを妨げないごくわずかな軽微な誤りがあるのみです。