Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response grammatically correct, concise, and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail using a linking word. Avoid redundancy and keep it under five sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy shopping. I usually go with my friends or family because we like to try on clothes and give each other opinions.

提案: Provide a clear reason and one specific example. Use linking words (for example, because, so) and correct verb forms. Avoid repetitions and irrelevant fragments.

例: Yes, I always compare prices because I want to get the best value. For example, last month I compared several stores before buying a gift for my husband and I negotiated the price at one shop.

提案: Give a direct answer, explain the reason briefly, and offer one specific supporting detail or consequence. Use correct grammar and linking words like because or so.

例: Yes, I often find it hard to choose because I worry about making the wrong decision. As a result, I spend a long time comparing options before buying anything.

提案: Respond clearly and support your opinion with a specific reason and example. Use comparative language correctly and avoid vague phrases. Keep sentences concise and logical with linking words such as however or because.

例: No, I don't think expensive items are always better because price doesn't always reflect quality. For example, I once bought a cheap kitchen knife that stayed sharp longer than a costly one I owned.

× I usually shopping go there my friends and family member.

✓ I usually go shopping there with my friends and family members.

The verb 'shopping' should be used in the verb phrase 'go shopping' (verb + -ing), and word order needs fixing. Also use the preposition 'with' to show accompaniment and plural 'members' for more than one family member. Suggestion: use the fixed phrase 'go shopping' and place the verb before the adverbial phrase.

× I usually shopping go there my friends and family member.

✓ I usually go shopping there with my friends and family members.

'Family member' should be plural 'family members' when referring to more than one person. Use appropriate quantifier/plural form when speaking about multiple people.

× Yes, definitely I compare price when I I I shop is the last month I go to shopping my husband's birthday and I bargaining in shopkeeper.

✓ Yes, definitely I compare prices when I shop. Last month I went shopping for my husband's birthday and I bargained with the shopkeeper.

Use plural 'prices' when comparing more than one price. Also split run-on sentence into two sentences and correct verb forms ('went' past tense). Use 'bargained with the shopkeeper' (verb + preposition) rather than 'I bargaining in shopkeeper.'

× Yes, definitely I compare price when I I I shop is the last month I go to shopping my husband's birthday and I bargaining in shopkeeper.

✓ Yes, definitely I compare prices when I shop. Last month I went shopping for my husband's birthday and I bargained with the shopkeeper.

The action 'go' referring to a past event should be in past tense 'went'. 'Bargained' is the correct past form of 'bargain'. Ensure consistent past tense for past events.

× Yes, definitely I compare price when I I I shop is the last month I go to shopping my husband's birthday and I bargaining in shopkeeper.

✓ Yes, definitely I compare prices when I shop. Last month I went shopping for my husband's birthday and I bargained with the shopkeeper.

Use 'for' to indicate purpose ('shopping for my husband's birthday') and 'with' to indicate interaction ('bargained with the shopkeeper'). Avoid 'in' in this context.

× Yes, is it is a major problem for me because I'm not a better choose in things and I always difficulty for make choice when I shop.

✓ Yes, it is a major problem for me because I'm not good at choosing things and I always have difficulty making choices when I shop.

The original has word order issues and incorrect collocations. Use 'it is' rather than 'is it is', 'good at choosing' is the correct phrase, 'have difficulty' plus gerund 'making choices' is correct structure.

× Yes, is it is a major problem for me because I'm not a better choose in things and I always difficulty for make choice when I shop.

✓ Yes, it is a major problem for me because I'm not good at choosing things and I always have difficulty making choices when I shop.

'Better' is incorrect here; use the adjective 'good' with the prepositional phrase 'good at'. Also use 'making' (gerund) after 'difficulty'.

× Yes, is it is a major problem for me because I'm not a better choose in things and I always difficulty for make choice when I shop.

✓ Yes, it is a major problem for me because I'm not good at choosing things and I always have difficulty making choices when I shop.

Use plural 'choices' when speaking generally. 'Difficulty' needs to be used with 'have' and followed by a gerund ('making choices').

× No, I don't think expensive product always better than cheaper ones because sometime a cheaper ones is the best quality product and expensive they cannot survive a more time and I think is the cheapest thing always used.

✓ No, I don't think expensive products are always better than cheaper ones because sometimes cheaper items are of the best quality and expensive ones do not last as long; I think the cheapest things are often durable.

Use plural 'products' and 'items' for general statements. Include 'are' for subject-verb agreement. 'Sometimes' spelling fixed. 'Cheaper ones' must agree in number. Use 'do not last as long' instead of 'cannot survive a more time'. Clarify comparative 'last as long' and correct word order.

× No, I don't think expensive product always better than cheaper ones because sometime a cheaper ones is the best quality product and expensive they cannot survive a more time and I think is the cheapest thing always used.

✓ No, I don't think expensive products are always better than cheaper ones because sometimes cheaper items are of the best quality and expensive ones do not last as long; I think the cheapest things are often durable.

Subjects and verbs must agree: 'expensive products are', 'cheaper items are', 'cheaper ones are'. Ensure consistent plural forms and corresponding verbs.

× No, I don't think expensive product always better than cheaper ones because sometime a cheaper ones is the best quality product and expensive they cannot survive a more time and I think is the cheapest thing always used.

✓ No, I don't think expensive products are always better than cheaper ones because sometimes cheaper items are of the best quality and expensive ones do not last as long; I think the cheapest things are often durable.

Replace awkward phrases: 'of the best quality' is the correct prepositional phrase. 'Last as long' is the correct idiom to express longevity rather than 'survive a more time'. Use 'often' for frequency.