Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần nói rõ ràng, ngắn gọn hơn và tránh lặp từ. Tập trung vào câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ tần suất, lý do) với liên từ để mạch lạc. Giảm tiếng “umm” và sửa ngữ pháp (ví dụ “I only shop from time to time” thay vì lặp “I only”).

例: Yes, I enjoy shopping, but I only shop from time to time. I do it mainly for pleasure, yet I limit myself because I want to save money for future goals.

提案: Cần trả lời trực tiếp và hoàn chỉnh: dùng câu chủ đề ngắn, sau đó nêu lý do cụ thể. Tránh lặp từ và từ ngắt quãng như “uh”. Thêm ví dụ cụ thể (ví dụ so sánh giữa hai cửa hàng hoặc kênh bán hàng) để thể hiện chi tiết hơn.

例: Yes, I always compare prices when shopping because I want to get the best value. For example, I often check the same item online and in-store to see if discounts or delivery costs make a difference.

提案: Câu trả lời lộn xộn và thiếu rõ ràng; sửa câu chủ đề trực tiếp (Yes/No) rồi giải thích rõ ràng. Tránh dùng từ không phù hợp như “crisis” nếu không đúng ngữ cảnh. Thêm một lý do cụ thể hoặc ví dụ ngắn để minh họa lựa chọn của bạn.

例: No, I don't find it difficult to choose what to buy because I usually know what I need. For instance, when I need a new phone case I compare design and durability quickly and make a decision within a few minutes.

提案: Cần diễn đạt ý chính rõ ràng (No, not always) rồi nêu lý do cụ thể và hoàn chỉnh ví dụ. Tránh lặp và dùng những mô tả chi tiết hơn trong ví dụ (ví dụ nói vì sao sản phẩm đắt không tốt — chất lượng, thiết kế hoặc dịch vụ hậu mãi).

例: No, expensive products are not always better. For example, I once bought an expensive watch that stopped working within months, while a cheaper brand I bought later proved to be more reliable and durable.

× Well, yes, I could describe myself as a shopaholic person.

✓ Well, yes, I could describe myself as a shopaholic.

The phrase 'shopaholic person' is redundant; 'shopaholic' already implies a person. No third-person singular verb error here but removing redundancy improves grammar and naturalness.

× Well, umm, much as I love shopping, I only I only shop on like from time to time because, you know, frequent shopping may dissipate my money.

✓ Although I love shopping, I only shop from time to time because frequent shopping can drain my money.

Original sentence has repetition ('I only I only'), awkward filler words ('on like'), and wrong verb choice ('dissipate my money'). Use 'although' for contrast, remove repeated words, replace fillers, and use 'drain' or 'use up' for money. Keep present-tense habitual meaning.

× Yeah, I just want to set my money aside.

✓ I just want to save my money.

'Set my money aside' is understandable but less natural than 'save my money'. Use concise, common collocations for clarity. Tense and meaning (present habitual) remain appropriate.

× Definitely yes whenever I go shopping then I tend to uh make a comparison of the prices of uh, this similar part, the, the, the same products from different shops uh, because you know I, I just want to set my money aside and I don't want to like.

✓ Definitely. Whenever I go shopping, I compare the prices of the same products at different shops because I want to save money.

Remove fillers ('uh', 'like'), fix word order ('compare the prices of the same products at different shops'), and complete the unfinished ending. Use simple present for habitual actions.

× Well, umm, I think, no, I don't, uh, I, I don't find it difficult for, to like, pick up, uh, a single product when shopping because like I, I don't attach much importance to the, uh, crisis.

✓ No, I don't find it difficult to choose a single product when shopping because I don't attach much importance to brands.

Remove hesitation fillers and repetition, fix infinitive use ('to choose' instead of 'to like pick up'), and replace unclear word 'crisis' with likely intended word 'brands' or 'brand names'. Maintain present-tense and simple structure.

× Uh, well, I think it's not always necessarily, uh, the, the expensive products are not always excess necessarily, umm, better than the cheaper ones.

✓ I don't think expensive products are necessarily better than cheaper ones.

Eliminate double negatives and redundant modifiers ('not always necessarily', 'excess necessarily'). Use 'necessarily' after 'are' and keep the sentence concise. Present-tense general statement fits the question.

× Umm, for example, uh, I, I, I once bought a watch that is so expensive.

✓ For example, I once bought a watch that was very expensive.

When referring to a completed past action, use past tense consistently: 'bought' and 'was'. Replace 'so expensive' with more formal 'very expensive'. Remove fillers and repetition.