Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Correct basic idea but fix grammar, pronunciation and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct verbs and tense, and give one specific supporting detail. Keep it under 5 sentences and use linking words if adding details.

例: Yes, I enjoy shopping in my free time. For example, I often go to the local shopping mall with a friend to browse for clothes and try new cafés. This helps me relax and discover new stores.

提案: Answer is direct but too short. Add a brief reason and a linking word to make it more complete. Use one or two supporting details and keep it concise.

例: Yes, I always compare prices when I shop because I want to get the best value. For instance, I usually check online reviews and compare two or three stores before buying.

提案: Incomplete answer and lacks any reason. Provide a clear topic sentence and a complete supporting reason with a specific example. Use linking words to connect idea and reason, and finish the sentence properly.

例: Yes, I often find it difficult to make choices when I shop because there are so many similar options. For example, when buying a laptop I compare features and prices for several hours before deciding.

提案: Avoid overgeneralization and correct grammar. Offer a balanced opinion: acknowledge that price sometimes indicates quality but give a counterexample. Use specific details and linking words to support your view.

例: I don’t think expensive products are always better than cheaper ones. While pricier items can have better materials or service, cheaper alternatives can offer similar performance; for example, a mid-range smartphone may perform as well as a high-end model for everyday tasks.

× Yes, I like coping in my free time.

✓ Yes, I like shopping in my free time.

The student used 'coping', which is incorrect here; the verb intended is 'shop' (noun: shopping). This is a word choice/verb form error. Replace with 'shopping' to convey the intended activity. Suggestion: learn common collocations like 'like shopping' or 'go shopping'.

× When I am free, I take my friend and going to the shopping malls and other things.

✓ When I am free, I take my friend and go to the shopping malls and do other things.

This sentence mixes verb forms: 'take my friend and going' is incorrect. Coordinate verbs after 'and' must share the same form: use base form 'go' not 'going'. Also 'other things' is vague but acceptable; using 'do other things' clarifies actions. Suggestion: use parallel structure for coordinated verbs (e.g., 'take... and go...', 'visit... and buy...').

× Yes, it is difficult for me to make choices when I shop because.

✓ Yes, it is difficult for me to make choices when I shop because there are so many options.

The original sentence is incomplete: 'because' requires a following clause explaining the reason. Add a reason clause (e.g., 'because there are so many options' or 'because I get overwhelmed by choices') to complete the sentence. Suggestion: always provide the cause after 'because'.

× Yes, I think expensive products are always better than cheaper one because it have a quality and have a quantity.

✓ Yes, I think expensive products are always better than cheaper ones because they have better quality and greater quantity.

Multiple errors: 'cheaper one' should be plural 'cheaper ones' to match 'products' (singular/plural issue). 'It have' is incorrect subject-verb agreement and wrong pronoun; use plural pronoun 'they' and plural verb 'have'. The phrases 'a quality' and 'a quantity' are unnatural; use 'better quality' and 'greater quantity' instead. Suggestion: ensure nouns and pronouns agree in number and use natural collocations ('better quality', 'greater quantity').

× Yes, I compare prices when I shop.

✓ Yes, I compare prices when I shop.

This sentence is already correct grammatically and fits the question's tense and meaning. No change needed. Suggestion: none required.