Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more concise and natural by using a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Avoid redundant phrasing (e.g., "retail stores that are offline") and use linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes — I prefer shopping online because it’s more convenient and faster. However, I sometimes visit physical stores when I want to try things on or check quality in person.

提案: Provide a concise topic sentence and add a specific reason with a linking phrase. Replace awkward terms like "economically rational" with more natural expressions such as "to save money" or "to get the best deal."

例: Yes, I always compare prices online to get the best deal. For example, I usually check Amazon and Rakuten to find lower prices or better shipping options.

提案: Clarify and organize your answer: start with a clear statement, explain when it is difficult, and finish with a consequence. Correct grammar (e.g., "sometimes"), and avoid incomplete fragments like "I rarely." Use linking words such as "but" and "because."

例: Sometimes it is difficult for me to choose, especially when there are many similar options. But usually I know what I want, so I decide based on price or reviews.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence, then explain with one or two clear reasons. Avoid fillers like "uh" and awkward phrasing such as "main composition of the price." Use linking words like "however" or "for example."

例: No — expensive items are not always better. Usually they indicate higher quality, but price can also reflect brand reputation or rarity, so you should judge each product by its features and reviews.

× Yes, I like shopping mainly online.

✓ Yes, I mainly shop online.

Sentence uses a present simple verb phrase; better to use 'shop' as the main verb rather than the noun 'shopping' to sound natural and concise. Keep present tense to match the question about current preference.

× I sometimes go to retail stores that are offline, but I mostly buy things online because it's more convenient and faster.

✓ I sometimes go to physical retail stores, but I mostly buy things online because it is more convenient and faster.

Use 'physical' or 'brick-and-mortar' instead of 'offline' for natural English. Also expand contraction 'it's' to 'it is' if formality desired; grammar is otherwise correct. Maintain present simple tense.

× I always compare prices when I shop online.

✓ I always compare prices when I shop online.

This sentence is grammatically correct and already uses appropriate present simple tense for habitual action. No correction needed.

× I compare Amazon and Rakuten main EC sites available in Japan.

✓ I compare prices on major e-commerce sites in Japan, such as Amazon and Rakuten.

Original word order and phrasing ('Rakuten main EC sites') is awkward. Reorder to 'major e-commerce sites in Japan, such as Amazon and Rakuten' for clarity and correct noun modification.

× I do this because I want to be economically rational.

✓ I do this because I want to be economically rational.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable. 'Economically rational' is slightly formal but correct; no change required.

× It's sometime is difficult for me to make a decision, but most of the time I have something in mind so I usually decided on the price. I rarely.

✓ Sometimes it is difficult for me to make a decision, but most of the time I have something in mind, so I usually decide based on price. I rarely struggle.

Multiple issues: 'sometime is' is wrong; use 'sometimes it is' for adverb placement. 'Decided' is past tense while context requires present simple 'decide'. 'Decide on the price' is better as 'decide based on price'. The fragment 'I rarely.' is incomplete; expand to 'I rarely struggle' to form a complete sentence.

× No, I don't think so, but most of the time expensive products show better quality, but it's not always the case.

✓ No, I don't think so. Most of the time, expensive products show better quality, but that is not always the case.

Combine shorter sentences and avoid repeating 'but'. 'It's' can be expanded to 'that is' for clarity. Add commas for readability. Pronoun use corrected by replacing 'it's' with 'that is'.

× Rarity and uh, brand symbols are the main composition of the price uh, for exclusive items, so.

✓ Rarity and brand image are the main components of price for exclusive items.

'Brand symbols' is awkward; use 'brand image' or 'brand reputation'. 'Main composition of the price' is unnatural; 'main components of price' is correct. Remove filler words 'uh' and trailing 'so' and make sentence complete.