Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., "Yes, I like shopping.") and give one or two specific supportive details (frequency and reason). Avoid unnecessary fillers and grammatical errors. Use linking words like “however” to contrast ideas.

例: Yes, I like shopping. However, I don't go often because I have little money, so I usually shop only once or twice a year to buy what I really need.

提案: Provide a clear structure: state whether you compare prices, then give specific reasons and an example. Reduce repetitions and informal spoken hesitations. Use linking words like “because” and “when” correctly, and choose more appropriate vocabulary (e.g., "affordable" instead of "cheap", "expensive" instead of "rich").

例: Yes, I usually compare prices because I want good value. If I have little money I choose the more affordable option, but when I can afford it I will buy a more expensive pair of shoes because the material is more comfortable.

提案: Give a concise direct answer then explain with specific details and a clear example. Avoid repeating phrases and use correct grammar. Use linking words (e.g., "however", "because") to organize your explanation and contrast factors that affect your choice.

例: Not really. The main issue for me is price. For example, if two items look similar but cost different amounts, I often choose the cheaper one, unless the expensive one is clearly more comfortable or higher quality.

提案: Start with a clear opinion (Yes/No), then explain why with specific reasons and an example. Avoid repetition and fix grammar and word choice (e.g., "not always", "cheaper items can be uncomfortable"). Use linking words such as "however" and "for example".

例: Not always. However, cheaper items can sometimes be low quality or uncomfortable. For example, I prefer to buy more expensive shoes for long trips because they are usually more comfortable and last longer.

× Yes, definitely. But I am a boy I and I am so poor right now.

✓ Yes, definitely. But I am a boy and I am so poor right now.

The original sentence contains a redundant pronoun 'I' after 'boy', causing a sentence structure error. Remove the extra 'I' to form a correct coordinated clause with 'and'. Suggestion: say 'I am a boy and I am so poor right now.' or combine: 'I'm a boy and I'm very poor right now.'

× So I'm like one year I'm going to shopping for one time, but not too often, by the way.

✓ So in a year I'm going to go shopping one time, but not too often, by the way.

The original mixes informal fillers and incorrect verb patterns: 'I'm going to shopping' is wrong because 'go shopping' requires 'go' + gerund, not 'going to' + verb. Also 'one year' should be 'in a year'. Use correct future construction: 'I'm going to go shopping' or 'I'll go shopping in a year.'

× Yes, definitely. I'm I'm going to compare the price.

✓ Yes, definitely. I compare prices.

The student uses 'I'm going to compare the price' which implies future intention, but the question asks about present habit. Use simple present 'I compare prices' or 'I usually compare prices.' Also pluralize 'price' to 'prices' when comparing multiple items.

× I'm just use the cheap one, but when I have a money I'm gonna choose the rich one because I like to buy a shoes, so I need a comfortable, umm, comfortable material for myself.

✓ I just use the cheap one, but when I have money I'll choose the more expensive one because I like to buy shoes, so I need comfortable material for myself.

Multiple issues: 'I'm just use' should be 'I just use' (simple present). 'a money' is incorrect; 'money' is uncountable so use no article. 'gonna' is informal; use 'I'll' or 'I will'. 'the rich one' is unnatural for 'expensive one' and 'a shoes' should be 'shoes' (no article). 'comfortable material' uses correct adjective order. Suggestions: 'I just use the cheaper one, but when I have money I'll choose the more expensive one because I like to buy shoes and need comfortable materials.'

× It's not too difficult. The difficult thing is the price.

✓ It's not too difficult. The difficult thing is the price.

No grammatical correction needed for these sentences; they are acceptable. (Included to show alignment with original meaning.)

× The price is thing that are really difficult to choose.

✓ The price is the thing that is really difficult to decide.

Original has subject-verb agreement and article omissions: 'The price is thing that are' is incorrect. Insert the article 'the thing' and use singular verb 'is' to agree with singular 'thing'. Also 'choose' in this context is better as 'decide'.

× Some the same price but it look really the same.

✓ Some have the same price and look really similar.

Original uses incorrect article placement and verb agreement: 'Some the same price' should be 'Some have the same price.' 'it look' should be 'they look' to agree with plural subject. Use 'similar' instead of 'the same' repetition.

× But some it re easy to choose because some is cheap and some is expensive.

✓ But some are easy to choose because some are cheap and some are expensive.

Subject-verb agreement errors: 'some' is plural so use 'are' not 'is' or 'it's'. Also 'it re' is a typo. Ensure plural verbs: 'some are cheap and some are expensive.'

× But the expensive 1 is more comfortable. So I'm gonna choose the rich one yeah.

✓ But the expensive one is more comfortable, so I'm going to choose the more expensive one.

Use consistent vocabulary: replace '1' with 'one'. 'gonna' is informal; use 'going to' or 'I'll'. 'rich one' is incorrect for 'expensive one'. Keep register appropriate: 'I'm going to choose the more expensive one.'

× Not really but but the cheap cheaper 1 is really uncomfortable for for our pro products or material.

✓ Not really, but the cheaper ones are really uncomfortable because of poor quality materials.

Multiple issues: duplicate 'but but' and 'for for'. 'cheap cheaper 1' is wrong; use 'cheaper ones'. 'our pro products' is unclear—likely 'poor quality products' or 'poor-quality material'. Use plural agreement 'ones are'.

× But definitely I'm going to choose expensive products because it make me more comfortable to like to make me comfortable when I have a big trip.

✓ But definitely I'll choose expensive products because they make me more comfortable when I go on a long trip.

Use future simple 'I'll choose' for decision. Subject-verb agreement: 'it make' should be 'they make' to match plural 'products'. 'to like to make me comfortable' is redundant; simplify to 'they make me more comfortable when I go on a long trip.'