Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more fluent, avoid repetition, and organize it with a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details. Use linking words and specific examples (where you shop or what you buy). Keep it under five sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy shopping on weekends because it's my free time and a chance to rest. For example, I usually visit the local market or supermarket to buy groceries and household items. Sometimes I also browse clothes stores for seasonal sales.

提案: Clarify your reason and remove unclear phrases. Use a clear topic sentence, a linking word (because/so), and a specific example of how you compare prices (apps, labels, or stores). Avoid hesitations and irrelevant metaphors.

例: Yes, I usually compare prices because I need to stick to a budget. For example, I check prices online and in different shops to find the best deal, especially for electronics or clothing. This helps me avoid overspending on items that do not offer good value.

提案: Make the sentence structure clearer and correct grammar (e.g. subject-verb agreement). State your main point, then give a concise reason and an example. Use linking words like 'when' or 'because' and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I find it difficult when I have to choose between a generic product and a well-known brand because the branded item is usually more expensive. For instance, when buying shampoo I often compare ingredients and reviews before deciding, since the cheaper option can sometimes be just as good.

提案: Give a direct opinion followed by a clear reason and a specific example. Avoid repetition and correct minor grammatical errors. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'for example' to make your answer coherent.

例: No, I don't think expensive products are always better because price often reflects the brand rather than quality. For example, some well-known brands charge more for the name, while mid-range or local brands can offer similar quality at a lower price.

× Yeah, I really enjoy shopping on my weekends, especially because it's my free time and I I often go shopping to buy necessary stuff such as grocery.

✓ Yeah, I really enjoy shopping on weekends, especially because it's my free time, and I often go shopping to buy necessary things such as groceries.

Errors: unnecessary article 'my' with 'weekends', double word 'I I', use of 'stuff' is informal and 'grocery' should be plural 'groceries'. Suggestions: remove 'my' before 'weekends'; delete the duplicated 'I'; replace 'stuff' with 'things' or 'items'; use plural 'groceries' for countable items. ID:6

× Yes, because I have to tighten my belt. I cannot like spend too much money on on something that is not valuable as like with there's a waste. So I didn't compare to like half a game.

✓ Yes, because I have to tighten my belt. I cannot spend too much money on something that is not valuable or a waste. So I don't compare prices for trivial items.

Errors: unnecessary filler 'like'; repeated word 'on on'; incorrect tense 'didn't compare' should be present habit 'don't compare'; awkward phrasing 'not valuable as like with there's a waste'. Suggestions: remove fillers 'like', correct repeated words, use present simple for habits, and rephrase to 'not valuable or a waste' or 'trivial items'. ID:4

× Yeah, especially when I'm compared the normal, the normal one, especially the not well known one to the well known brand, which is much more expensive, I have to consider because some sums are not well branded.

✓ Yeah, especially when I'm comparing the normal, less well-known one to the well-known brand, which is much more expensive; I have to think carefully because some products are not well-branded.

Errors: incorrect verb form 'I'm compared' should be 'I'm comparing' (present continuous); repetition 'the normal, the normal one'; 'not well known' needs hyphens as compound adjective 'less well-known'; 'some sums' is incorrect word choice — use 'products'. Suggestions: use correct verb form for ongoing action, avoid repetition, use hyphenated adjectives, and choose the correct noun ('products'). ID:8},{