Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural and relevant, but slightly long and includes a mixed metaphor (“fight”) that sounds informal. Reduce redundancy and use one clear supporting detail. Also correct minor grammar: "these kind of" → "these kinds of" or "this kind of" and "pieces" → "items".

例: Yes, I enjoy shopping, especially wandering around second-hand shops and markets. They attract many people on weekends, so I usually go early to avoid the crowds.

提案: Good clear response with a personal reason — this adds specificity. Improve by tightening phrasing, correcting "piece" → "item" and "more on the pricier range" → "quite expensive." Use a linking word to connect ideas and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I compare prices, especially for items that are quite expensive. Because my parents had limited money when I was growing up, we always checked prices, and that habit has stuck with me.

提案: Clear structured answer with conditional idea, but repetitive phrasing ("hard decision" and "difficult to make a decision"). Use varied vocabulary and one linking word (e.g., "however" is fine) then give a brief example of when it's hard to decide.

例: It depends. If I know exactly what I need, I decide quickly; however, when I'm unsure about the style or fit, choosing becomes difficult—for example, I struggle to pick between similar jackets when sizes and colors are different.

提案: Good opinion and reasoning, but has repetition and a small typo ("cheaper than cheaper ones"). Improve coherence by using a stronger linking word (e.g., "for example") and provide a brief specific example to support the claim.

例: No, expensive items are not always better. Often a higher price reflects the brand name rather than quality; for example, you can find well-made shirts from lesser-known brands that cost much less than designer ones.

× these kind of stores and markets can be quite crowded during the weekends so I have to be mentally ready for a fight to get the pieces I want.

✓ these kinds of stores and markets can be quite crowded on weekends, so I have to be mentally ready for a fight to get the pieces I want.

'These kind' is incorrect; the correct form is 'these kinds' or 'this kind of' followed by singular. Also, 'during the weekends' is unnatural here; use 'on weekends' for habitual occurrences. Add a comma before 'so' to join clauses clearly.

× especially if the piece I want is more on the pricier range.

✓ especially if the piece I want is on the pricier side.

'More on the pricier range' is unidiomatic. Use 'on the pricier side' to describe higher price. This corrects word choice and adjective phrase formation.

× When I grew up my parents didn't have much money so we had to compare prices and I think this behavior stuck with me so I still do it.

✓ When I was growing up, my parents didn't have much money, so we had to compare prices, and I think this behavior stuck with me, so I still do it.

Use 'was growing up' (past continuous) or 'when I grew up' requires comma; sentence needs commas to separate clauses. The original lacks punctuation and the sequence 'When I grew up' is acceptable but adding commas and optionally 'was' clarifies timing. Also add commas to separate coordinated clauses for readability.

× It depends when I know beforehand what I'm looking for so I can decide straight on.

✓ It depends: when I know beforehand what I'm looking for, I can decide straight away.

'It depends when' is unclear; add colon or rephrase to 'It depends: when...' 'Straight on' is not the usual adverb; use 'straight away'. Add comma after the subordinate clause.

× If the piece I saw is something I need then it's not a hard decision.

✓ If the piece I see is something I need, then it's not a hard decision.

Mixing past 'saw' with general present conditional about shopping is inconsistent. Use present simple 'see' for present habitual or current reference. Also add comma before 'then'.

× No, I don't think expensive products are always better than cheaper than cheaper ones because the price usually considers the brand as well.

✓ No, I don't think expensive products are always better than cheaper ones, because the price usually reflects the brand as well.

The phrase 'better than cheaper than cheaper ones' repeats 'than' and is incorrect. Use 'better than cheaper ones'. Also 'price considers the brand' is incorrect collocation; use 'reflects' or 'includes' to show price accounts for brand.

× So if the price is higher, it could be because of the brand and not because of the quality.

✓ So if the price is higher, it could be because of the brand and not because of the quality.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Included here to show it fits tense and structure.

× Therefore it makes sense to compare products.

✓ Therefore, it makes sense to compare products.

Add comma after 'Therefore' as a conjunctive adverb. The sentence is otherwise correct; included to provide punctuation improvement.