Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors (e.g., say “I really like shopping” not “I very like shopping”).

例: I really enjoy shopping. For example, when I visit a mall I often buy a few items that fit me well or catch my eye because I like things that look good on me. Also, I sometimes shop online when I can’t find what I want in stores.

提案: Be concise and correct grammar, and link ideas smoothly. Use precise vocabulary for reasons and mention one clear method for comparing prices. Avoid unfinished sentences.

例: Yes, I usually compare prices because I want to save money. For instance, I use apps like Taobao or Pinduoduo to check prices and read reviews, which helps me decide whether a product is cheaper and good value compared to local stores.

提案: Provide a clear main sentence and one or two specific reasons with linking words. Reduce repetition and use correct expressions (e.g., 'fall in love with' is informal—use 'really like').

例: Yes, I often find it hard to choose. For example, in a store I may really like several items that differ in style and colour, so I feel confused and take longer to decide. To solve this, I sometimes take photos and compare them later.

提案: This answer is clear and well-structured but watch small grammar mistakes and improve vocabulary accuracy. Use linking words to strengthen reasoning and give a precise example.

例: No, I don’t think expensive products are always better. Often you pay a premium for the brand rather than for better quality. For example, designer handbags can be very expensive because of the label, while some cheaper bags are actually well made and last just as long.

× Yes, I very like shopping no matter when it is.

✓ Yes, I really like shopping no matter when it is.

The sentence uses 'very like' which is not correct English. 'Like' is a stative verb and is modified by adverbs such as 'really' or 'very much'. Use 'really like' or 'like ... very much' to make the sentence natural.

× If I get into a shopping mall, I will buy a lot of different kinds of things.

✓ If I go into a shopping mall, I will buy a lot of different kinds of things.

'Get into' suggests entering by force or gaining access; 'go into' or 'enter' is the natural verb for visiting a mall. The conditional structure (if + present, will + verb) is correct, so only the verb choice needed correction.

× Just like if I find these things it better fit on me or it's very pretty nice and looked very good, I would like to buy it.

✓ For example, if I find something that fits me well or looks pretty, I would like to buy it.

This sentence has multiple problems: awkward 'Just like', incorrect verb forms ('it better fit on me' should be 'that fits me well'), redundant modifiers ('very pretty nice'), and wrong tense 'looked' instead of 'looks'. The corrected version simplifies the structure and uses the present simple 'fits' and 'looks' to express general truths and 'would like' for hypothetical preference.

× Yes, I would like to compare prices when I go shopping because I think that it is a very efficient way for us to release some money.

✓ Yes, I compare prices when I go shopping because I think it is an efficient way to save money.

'Would like to compare' implies a preference rather than a habitual action; the question asks about regular behavior so present simple 'I compare' is better. 'Release some money' is unnatural; the correct phrase is 'save money'. Also remove unnecessary 'that' and 'for us' to make the sentence concise.

× And I would like to compare it with some apps which I downloaded on my phones, just like the Pinduoduo or the Taobao.

✓ I also compare prices using some apps that I downloaded on my phone, such as Pinduoduo or Taobao.

Use 'using' or 'with' appropriately: 'compare prices using apps' is natural. 'On my phones' is incorrect number agreement and article use — 'on my phone' or 'on my phones' if plural devices; here singular is assumed. 'the Pinduoduo' and 'the Taobao' are incorrect; brand names usually take no article.

× I think that the price on them are cheaper than in the.

✓ I think that the prices on those apps are cheaper than in stores.

The sentence has subject-verb disagreement ('price ... are'), missing noun after 'in the', and unclear reference. Use plural 'prices' to agree with 'are', and complete the comparison with 'in stores' or 'at stores' to clarify meaning.

× Yes, I think that it is difficult for me to choose one when I go shopping because I think that when I go into shopping in a store, I may be falling in love with a lot of different kinds of items and also they may be different from each other and the color.

✓ Yes, I think it is difficult for me to choose when I go shopping because I often fall in love with many different items that differ in style and color.

The original repeats 'I think' and uses awkward phrasing 'go into shopping in a store' and progressive 'may be falling in love' which is unnecessary for habitual actions. Use simple present 'fall in love' for habitual tendencies and concise modifiers 'many different items that differ in style and color.'

× I would be very confused with it.

✓ I would be very confused about them.

'Confused with' is not the correct preposition; use 'confused about'. Also 'it' is singular while 'items' are plural, so use 'them' for agreement.

× No, I don't think expensive products are always better than cheaper one.

✓ No, I don't think expensive products are always better than cheaper ones.

There is a number mismatch: 'cheaper one' should be plural 'cheaper ones' to match 'products'.

× Often you buy a price premium for the brand rather than higher quality.

✓ Often you pay a price premium for the brand rather than for higher quality.

Use the verb 'pay' with 'price premium', and parallel structure requires 'for' before both nouns: 'for the brand' and 'for higher quality'.

× For example some designers handbags cost a lot of mostly because of the label even through cheaper bags can be judged as well made.

✓ For example, some designer handbags cost a lot mostly because of the label, even though cheaper bags can also be well made.

Several errors: 'designers handbags' should be 'designer handbags' (adjective form), misplaced 'mostly', 'even through' is incorrect ('even though'), and awkward 'can be judged as well made' — better 'can also be well made.' Added commas for clarity.