Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful with grammar (verb forms, plurals) and word choice. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid unclear phrases like “browsing code” and keep sentences concise (max 4–5).

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy shopping in my free time because it helps me relax and sometimes I find unexpected bargains. For instance, last month I went to a small boutique with a friend and discovered a vintage jacket that put me in a great mood.

提案: Improve grammar (singular/plural, articles) and clarity of reasoning. Use linking words (so, therefore) and give a concrete example of how you compare prices. Keep sentences direct and specific.

例: Yes, I always compare prices because I want to save money and stick to my budget. For example, I check prices on three websites and read reviews before buying an expensive phone, so I can choose the best value.

提案: This answer is clear but fix small grammar errors and add one concrete strategy you use. Use linking words (because, therefore, so) and be specific about what makes choices difficult.

例: Yes, it can be difficult because there are so many options, which is overwhelming. Therefore, I take my time to compare features and read reviews, and I usually choose the item that will be most useful for daily use.

提案: Clarify your opinion with correct grammar and clearer examples. Use comparative language (better, more durable) and explain reasons (quality, warranty, value). Avoid confusing phrases like “away better” or “later than the most efficiency modules.”

例: I don't think expensive products are always better; it depends on the item. For example, I prefer mid-range electronics because they often offer good durability and value for money without the high price of premium brands.

× I enjoy shopping when I have free time because it help me relax and sometime I discover items I did not expect to find.

✓ I enjoy shopping when I have free time because it helps me relax and sometimes I discover items I did not expect to find.

Subject-verb agreement with singular subject 'it' requires 'helps' not 'help' (this is a subject-verb agreement/plurality issue). 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' because an adverb of frequency is needed. Suggestion: use 'helps' for third-person singular and use 'sometimes' for occasional events. Note: This correction addresses plural/singular and adverb form; keep present tense to match the habitual action.

× For example, I like browsing code in a boutique with a friend which always put me in a good mood.

✓ For example, I like browsing clothes in a boutique with a friend, which always puts me in a good mood.

The preposition/word 'code' is likely a word choice error; context requires 'clothes'. Also the relative clause refers to the activity, so the verb must be 'puts' for third-person singular. The clause should be separated by a comma. Suggestion: use appropriate noun 'clothes', add comma before 'which', and use 'puts' for subject-verb agreement.

× Yes, I always compare price when I shop because I want to save money and make my limit income straight future.

✓ Yes, I always compare prices when I shop because I want to save money and manage my limited income for the future.

Use plural 'prices' because multiple price options are compared. 'Make my limit income straight future' is ungrammatical—replace with 'manage my limited income for the future' to convey intended meaning. Suggestion: use plural for countable noun and correct phrase for 'limited income' and time reference.

× I usually check price online and compare different store before I buy especially for expensive item.

✓ I usually check prices online and compare different stores before I buy, especially for expensive items.

Use plural 'prices' and 'stores' when speaking generally. Add a comma before 'especially'. 'Expensive item' should be plural 'expensive items'. Prepositions are fine but nouns need correct number. Suggestion: make countable nouns plural for general statements.

× Yes, it is difficult for me sometime because there are so many items to choose from which can be overwhelming.

✓ Yes, it is difficult for me sometimes because there are so many items to choose from, which can be overwhelming.

Use 'sometimes' (adverb) not 'sometime'. Add a comma before 'which'. Suggestion: use adverb forms for frequency and punctuate nonrestrictive clauses.

× I usually take my time to compare option and think about which one will be most useful for me.

✓ I usually take my time to compare options and think about which one will be most useful for me.

Use plural 'options' when comparing multiple choices. Suggestion: pluralize countable nouns when referring to multiple items.

× It depends if you can see product are not away better.

✓ It depends; you can see that a product is not always better.

Original sentence has unclear structure and word choice. Use a clearer structure: 'It depends; you can see that a product is not always better.' This fixes verb agreement ('product is'), word choice ('always' instead of 'away'), and adds 'that' for clarity. Suggestion: restructure sentences for clarity and ensure correct adverb choice.

× Sometime you pay for the brand later than quality.

✓ Sometimes you pay for the brand rather than for quality.

Use 'sometimes' (adverb). Use comparative phrase 'rather than' to contrast paying for brand vs quality. Suggestion: use 'rather than' to show contrast and include 'for' before 'quality' for parallel structure.

× For example I prefer mid range electronics that offer good durability and value for money later than the most efficiency modules.

✓ For example, I prefer mid-range electronics that offer good durability and value for money rather than the most efficient models.

Use hyphenated 'mid-range'. Change 'later than' to 'rather than' to show contrast. 'Most efficiency modules' is incorrect; use 'most efficient models'. Ensure plural 'models' and correct adjective form 'efficient'. Suggestion: use correct comparative structure and adjective/adjective order.