Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Говоря о своих предпочтениях, постарайтесь давать более развёрнутый, но сжатый ответ: начните с чёткой темы (да/нет), затем добавьте 1–2 конкретные причины и пример. Избегайте повторов и общих фраз. Работайте над связностью и естественностью высказывания.

例: Yes, I enjoy shopping because it helps me relax and unwind after a busy week. For example, I like browsing local markets where I can discover unique items and chat with sellers, which feels refreshing.

提案: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки, путаные фразы и повторения. Нужно четко сформулировать мысль: сказать, что вы сравниваете цены и почему, дать логическое объяснение и пример. Используйте связки (because, so, if). Попрактикуйтесь в простых предложениях без лишних повторов.

例: Yes, I usually compare prices because I want to get good value for money. For instance, if two phones have the same features but one is cheaper, I will buy the cheaper one to save money.

提案: Ответ очень неструктурирован и содержит много заполнителей (uh, umm). Нужно начать с ясного утверждения, затем пояснить причину и привести пример. Избегайте слов-паразитов, практикуйте плавные переходы и короткие связные предложения.

例: Generally, making choices is easy for me, but I sometimes struggle when there are two colors I like. For example, if a shirt comes in blue and green and I love both, I find it hard to decide, especially if I can only afford one.

提案: Ответ имеет хорошую идею, но формулировки небрежны и есть ошибки в словоупотреблении. Разделите мысль: обобщение, затем примеры для разных категорий (техника vs одежда). Используйте более точную лексику и сводные слова (for example, however).

例: Not always. For everyday appliances like a blender or kettle, more expensive models often last longer and perform better. However, for clothes I usually prefer cheaper options because style matters more than brand for me.

× Shopping gives me the relaxation and freedom.

✓ Shopping gives me relaxation and freedom.

The definite article 'the' is unnecessary before uncountable abstract nouns like 'relaxation' and 'freedom'. Remove 'the' to make the phrase natural: 'gives me relaxation and freedom.'

× Yes, I can pay your prices when I shop.

✓ Yes, I compare prices when I shop.

The original sentence uses 'pay your prices' which is incorrect in context and uses wrong pronoun 'your'. The student meant comparing prices. Replace with 'I compare prices' to convey intended meaning and correct pronoun use.

× If one products are the same quality and the different price, I would definitely buy the I would.

✓ If two products are the same quality but have different prices, I would definitely buy the cheaper one.

'Products' is plural so 'one products are' is incorrect; use 'two products are' or 'if products are'. Also 'different price' should be pluralized to 'different prices' and subject-verb agreement requires 'have different prices'. Clarify 'buy the I would' to 'buy the cheaper one.'

× I would definitely buy a product the price cheaper because I see no point to buy something. Than.

✓ I would definitely buy the cheaper product because I see no point in buying the more expensive one.

Article and word order are incorrect: 'a product the price cheaper' should be 'the cheaper product'. Preposition 'to buy' after 'point' should be 'in buying'. 'Than' is misplaced; use 'the more expensive one' for contrast.

× I would say that it's, it's a sweet snap for me, it's if speech about colors yes uh uh, from uh umm, difficult, uh, for me difficult, uh, if I love their two colors.

✓ I would say it's an easy decision for me when it comes to colors. It's only difficult if I like two colors equally.

The original is fragmented and unclear. 'Sweet snap' is not idiomatic; use 'easy decision'. 'If speech about colors' should be 'when it comes to colors'. Rephrase to clear conditional: 'It's only difficult if I like two colors equally.'

× However, I don't have enough money to buy UH-2 colors.

✓ However, I don't have enough money to buy both colors.

'UH-2 colors' is incorrect. Use 'both colors' to refer to two options; this corrects pronoun/phrase misuse and makes the meaning clear.

× I think this term is related to devices that you use every day.

✓ I think this term relates to devices that you use every day.

'This term is related to' is wordy but not strictly wrong; improved phrasing 'relates to' is more natural. No article error here but smoothing the sentence improves clarity.

× For example, it's devices for you use in the kitchen on the House.

✓ For example, it's devices you use in the kitchen at home.

'For you use' is incorrect word order; use 'devices you use'. 'On the House' is wrong collocation — use 'at home'. Also 'the House' is unnecessary.

× If it's related to clothes, I have no reason to buy expensive clothes when you have the cheaper variant.

✓ If it's related to clothes, I have no reason to buy expensive clothes when there is a cheaper option.

Using 'you have' is incorrect pronoun choice; speaker should use impersonal 'there is' or 'there's'. 'Variant' is odd in this context; 'option' is more natural.