Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap doğal ama dilbilgisi ve akış sorunları var. Kısa ve doğrudan bir konu cümlesi kurun, ardından nedenini ekleyin. Örneğin zaman ifadesini doğru kullanın ("since I was a child"). En fazla 3-4 cümleyle tamamlayıcı detay verin.

例: Yes, I enjoy shopping; I've liked it since I was a child because I love looking at new styles and finding good deals. For instance, I often browse shops on weekends to keep up with trends.

提案: İyi bir doğrudan cevap; daha fazla özgün detay ekleyin ve bağlaç kullanın (ör. "because", "so"). Neden karşılaştırma yaptığınızı somut bir örnekle destekleyin.

例: Yes, I usually compare prices because my father taught me to be thrifty, so I check online and in-store prices before buying. For example, I compare smartphone deals to make sure I get the best value.

提案: Cevap duyguyu ifade ediyor ama karışık ve dilbilgisi hataları var. Konu cümlesini net kurun, ardından bir veya iki destekleyici neden verin. Bağlaçlar ve doğru cümle yapıları kullanın; gereksiz tekrarları kaldırın.

例: Yes, I often find it hard to decide between similar items because I worry about choosing the best one. For example, when my dad and I shop, he gets impatient while I compare features and prices of two similar shirts.

提案: Görüş net ama örnek kafa karıştırıcı ve hatalı (anlatım ve sözcük seçimi). Net bir neden verin ve anlamlı, spesifik bir örnek kullanın. "for example" sonrası gelen örneğin mantıklı ve doğru İngilizce olmasına dikkat edin.

例: No, not always. Often cheaper items offer similar quality, so I compare materials and reviews before buying; for example, I once chose a mid-priced backpack instead of an expensive brand because it had better padding and reviews.

× Yes, absolutely. Since when I was a child.

✓ Yes, absolutely. Since I was a child.

The phrase 'Since when I was a child' is ungrammatical in English. Use 'since I was a child' to indicate a period beginning in the past and continuing to the present. Remove 'when' because 'since' already introduces the time reference.

× Yes, because my father always told me to be thrifty.

✓ Yes, because my father always tells me to be thrifty.

The original mixes past tense 'told' with the adverb 'always' implying a habitual action. Use present simple 'tells' to indicate a repeated or habitual action. If the intent is a past single action, keep 'told' but remove 'always'.

× Yes, I really don't like this side of myself because I don't make a decision about two things and it's really hard for me and sometimes my dad and I go shopping and he will crazy because I don't decision.

✓ Yes, I really don't like this side of myself because I can't decide between two things; it's really hard for me. Sometimes my dad and I go shopping and he gets angry because I don't make a decision.

The original has multiple issues: incorrect verbs ('don't make a decision' -> 'can't decide' or 'don't make a decision between two things'), incorrect modal/future form ('he will crazy' -> 'he gets angry'), missing verb ('I don't decision' -> 'I don't make a decision'), and run-on sentences. Split into clearer sentences, use appropriate verbs: 'can't decide' for inability, 'get(s) angry' for reaction, and 'make a decision' properly placed. Use present simple for habitual actions.

× No, not always, because for example, I can pay for two hundreds, uh, pairs of sacks.

✓ No, not always, because, for example, I can pay two hundred for a pair of socks.

The phrase 'two hundreds' is wrong; use 'two hundred' (no plural) or 'two hundred dollars' if adding a currency. 'Pairs of sacks' is likely intended as 'a pair of socks' or 'pairs of socks'. Also 'pay for two hundred' needs an object (currency or amount) and correct noun. Adjust to 'pay two hundred for a pair of socks' or 'pay two hundred dollars for a pair of socks' depending on intended meaning.