Traffic— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and sentence structure, be more concise, and add a linking word plus a specific detail. Use present tense for current situation and avoid redundancy. Aim for 2–3 sentences: a clear topic sentence + one supporting detail with a linking word.

例: Yes, there are many crosswalks near where I live because I live in the city centre. Because traffic is dense and public transport is busy, the authorities have installed extra crosswalks to keep pedestrians safe.

提案: Be more direct and concise, correct awkward phrasing, and give a specific proposal with a reason and consequence. Use linking words (for example, so/therefore) and avoid repetition of “I think”. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes. I would introduce a strict ban on using car horns late at night because excessive honking disturbs residents. For example, prohibiting horn use between 11:00 PM and 6:00 AM would improve sleep quality and reduce noise pollution.

× Yes, I think they are a lot of crosswalks around the place that I lived because I lived quite in the city center and the transportation was pretty complex.

✓ Yes, I think there are a lot of crosswalks around the place where I live because I live quite near the city centre and the transportation is pretty complex.

Subject-verb agreement and word choice: 'they are a lot of crosswalks' is incorrect because 'a lot of crosswalks' is the subject phrase and requires 'there are' for existential construction; 'they' is wrong. Use present tense 'live' to match the question about the place where you live (present), not 'lived'. 'placewhere' should be two words 'place where'. 'quite in the city center' is unnatural; use 'quite near the city centre' or 'in the city centre'. Change spelling of 'center' to 'centre' only if using British English; maintain consistent variety. Suggestions: use 'there are' with plural nouns (There are a lot of...); keep tense consistent with context; separate words correctly and choose natural prepositions like 'in' or 'near'.

× So it needs a lot of crosswalks to maintain.

✓ So it needs a lot of crosswalks to be maintained.

Passive form / verb usage: The intended meaning is that many crosswalks are required to maintain traffic safety or flow. The original 'to maintain' lacks an object and sounds awkward. Use passive infinitive 'to be maintained' or rephrase 'so many crosswalks are needed to maintain traffic flow'. Suggestion: make the action clear by using a passive structure or supplying the object (e.g., 'to maintain traffic flow').

× Well, I think I would probably set some new rules about how to use the horn, because in China there's no such rule as you cannot use the horn after midnight or after 11:00 PM or something like that.

✓ Well, I think I would probably set some new rules about how to use the horn, because in China there is no rule that says you cannot use the horn after midnight or after 11:00 PM.

Grammar and clarity: 'there's no such rule as you cannot...' is ungrammatical and awkward. Use 'there is no rule that says...' to introduce the content of the rule. Avoid redundant 'such' and 'or something like that' for formal answers. Keep tense/modal consistency. Also 'there's' expanded to 'there is' is optional but clearer. Suggestion: use 'no rule that says' to report a missing regulation, and remove vague filler phrases.

× And I think I would change that.

✓ And I think I would change that.

This sentence is grammatically correct. It uses a conditional/polite hypothetical 'I would change that' consistent with the previous 'I would probably set some new rules'. No correction needed. Note: keep as is for clarity and politeness.