History— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more grammatical, concise and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and clearer vocabulary (e.g., "I studied history"), and briefly mention what periods or topics you studied. Avoid vague or incorrect phrases like "post National History" and "mature world events."

例: Yes. I studied history as a compulsory subject throughout school. We covered national history and major world events from the nineteenth and twentieth centuries.

提案: This answer is clear and relevant but could be slightly more natural and varied. Use linking words to combine ideas and give a short reason or example to enrich the answer. Avoid repeating the word "history" back-to-back.

例: Nowadays I mostly learn history through documentaries, podcasts and nonfiction books rather than traditional textbooks, because these formats make historical events more vivid and easier to remember.

提案: Improve grammar and coherence: give a clear topic sentence, then a supporting reason with correct verb forms. Remove filler words and correct phrases like "gives us valuable action" and "Shall we don't repeat them." Use linking words to connect ideas and a concise example.

例: Learning history helps us understand how modern society developed and learn from past mistakes, so we can avoid repeating them in the future.

提案: Make the sentence grammatical and precise. Start with a clear affirmation, then give one or two specific reasons. Replace unclear words like "abbreviation appreciation" and "Arabically changing words" with correct terms (e.g., "cultural identity" and "rapidly changing world"). Keep it concise and natural.

例: Definitely. Learning history fosters a strong sense of national and cultural identity, and it helps people stay connected to their roots in a rapidly changing world.

× Yes I have history where compulsory subject all the way through my school years where I learned post National History and mature world events.

✓ Yes, history was a compulsory subject throughout my school years, where I learned national history and modern world events.

The original sentence has wrong word order, missing articles, and incorrect word choices ('have history', 'where compulsory subject', 'post National History', 'mature world events'). This is a sentence structure error. Correct by using past tense 'was' for a past condition, add commas, use 'throughout' instead of 'all the way through', and replace 'post National' and 'mature' with 'national' and 'modern' to convey the intended meaning. Suggestion: break complex ideas into clearer clauses and use appropriate nouns and adjectives.

× Nowadays I mostly learn history through history documentaries and history podcasts and reading nonfiction books rather than traditional textbooks.

✓ Nowadays I mostly learn history through history documentaries, history podcasts, and by reading nonfiction books rather than from traditional textbooks.

The original mixes parallel structures incorrectly. The gerund 'reading' needs a parallel preposition or marker to match 'through'. This is a problem with verb + -ing form and parallelism. Fix by adding 'by' before 'reading' and use commas; also add 'from' before 'traditional textbooks' for clarity. Ensure parallel forms when listing activities.

× It helps us understand how modern society came to be and gives us valuable action from past. Uh, mistake. Shall we don't repeat them?

✓ It helps us understand how modern society came to be and gives us valuable lessons from the past so that we do not repeat mistakes.

Multiple issues: awkward nouns ('action' should be 'lessons'), missing article 'the' before 'past', incorrect question form 'Shall we don't repeat them?'. These are sentence structure errors. Combine clauses into a coherent statement, replace incorrect words, and use proper negative construction 'do not' instead of 'don't' after 'shall' (which is not appropriate here). Use 'so that' to show purpose.

× Definitely is fosters a strong sense of national identity and cultural abbreviation appreciation which captures stay connected to our roots in Arabically changing words.

✓ Definitely, it fosters a strong sense of national identity and cultural appreciation, which helps us stay connected to our roots in an ever-changing world.

Problems include missing subject 'it', wrong verb form and extra 'is' before 'fosters', incorrect word 'abbreviation' for 'appreciation', wrong adverb 'Arabically' for 'ever', and 'words' should be 'world'. These are subject-verb agreement and word choice errors. Insert the subject 'it', remove the extra 'is', correct vocabulary, and use a relative clause 'which helps us stay connected'. Use 'ever-changing' instead of 'Arabically changing'.