History— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two supporting details with correct tense and articles. Avoid repetition and long run-on sentences. Use linking words like “and” or “also” properly.

例: Yes. I have studied history since childhood and I am still learning it as a third-year university student. I study both my country’s history and international events, and I enjoy researching them because they help me understand how the world developed.

提案: Use present simple for habitual actions and organise ideas with linking words. Give specific methods (reading, lectures, discussions) and one clear opinion. Correct grammar (articles, plural forms) and avoid vague phrasing like “like”.

例: I learn history mainly by reading books and attending university lectures. I also discuss historical events with classmates and watch documentaries. Because history often shows recurring patterns, these methods help me recognise similarities and make better predictions.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and then two specific benefits with brief explanations. Use correct nouns and avoid filler words. Link ideas with words like “for example” or “because”.

例: Learning history helps people develop a sense of identity and patriotism because they learn how previous generations defended their country. It also increases global awareness, since studying different events and cultures explains how the modern world was shaped.

提案: Start with a direct opinion, then support it with reasons and a short example. Use correct plural forms and prepositions (“from many perspectives”, “biased towards a country”). Keep sentences short and avoid redundancy.

例: Yes, I believe learning history from many perspectives is important. If you only study one viewpoint, you may become biased towards a single interpretation. Studying multiple sources reveals different sides of events and makes history more interesting and balanced.

× Yes, of course I studied a history for my first age to until now I'm a third year university student and I'm still learning history every day for about my country and international history and I think it's a very interesting to like research and know more about the world.

✓ Yes, of course. I studied history from my childhood until now. I'm a third-year university student and I still study history every day, focusing on my country's history and international history. I find it very interesting to research and learn more about the world.

Errors: unnecessary articles ('a history'), incorrect time expression ('for my first age to'), wrong verb tense/phrase ('studied' vs ongoing), missing hyphen in 'third-year', awkward phrasing. Suggestion: Remove the indefinite article before 'history' because 'history' as a subject is uncountable (Article errors). Use 'from my childhood until now' for continuous timeframe. Use present simple to state current study habits ('I still study'). Use clear noun phrases 'my country's history' and 'international history'. Add hyphen in 'third-year' when used as a compound adjective.

× I learned history through a stories about their victories, the defeat, about like how the resilient, how a people solve a problem.

✓ I learned history through stories about their victories and defeats, about how people showed resilience, and about how people solved problems.

Errors: unnecessary article 'a' before 'stories' (Article errors) and incorrect forms like 'the defeat' and 'how the resilient'. Also 'a people' is incorrect; 'people' is plural. Use past participle 'solved' for completed actions and correct noun forms. This correction addresses verb form and article misuse by using 'defeats', 'showed resilience', and 'solved problems'.

× And I know that maybe the history is repeatable.

✓ And I think that history may be repeatable.

Errors: awkward modal/time expression and unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'history' (Article errors). Use present simple 'think' to express opinion and modal 'may' to indicate possibility. Remove 'the' because speaking of history in general does not require the definite article.

× Everything can repeatable in the future.

✓ Everything can be repeated in the future.

Errors: incorrect verb form after modal verb 'can'. After 'can' use base form or passive 'be + past participle'. 'Repeatable' is an adjective but the intended meaning is passive occurrence, so use 'can be repeated'. This fixes verb + -ing/form misuse and passive structure.

× When we learn about like history, we can predict it.

✓ When we learn about history, we can sometimes predict trends.

Errors: filler 'like' is unnecessary; 'predict it' is vague. Use 'sometimes' to soften claim and 'predict trends' to be precise. This corrects awkward present participle usage and improves clarity.

× Learning about history can enhance in the a person patriotism and they like they know more about the the the reverse generation and know how they protect the country, know more about the world and like everything.

✓ Learning about history can enhance a person's patriotism and help them learn about previous generations, how they protected the country, and more about the world.

Errors: incorrect preposition 'in' after 'enhance', incorrect article sequence 'the a person', repeated 'the', wrong pronoun agreement and awkward phrasing 'the reverse generation'. Suggestion: Use 'enhance a person's patriotism' and 'help them learn about previous generations' for clarity and correct preposition/article/pronoun usage.

× I think learning history from many perspective is very important for a person because if you learn just from one perspective you will be biased a country and if you learn in the right way you will see that history is something really interesting and it's not bother boring.

✓ I think learning history from many perspectives is very important because if you learn from only one perspective you will be biased about a country. If you learn in the right way, you will see that history is really interesting and not at all boring.

Errors: noun pluralization 'perspective' -> 'perspectives' (Singular and plural issue), missing preposition 'about' after 'biased' (Incorrect use of prepositions), awkward phrase 'bother boring' and incorrect article use. Use present simple 'think' appropriately. Suggestions: pluralize 'perspectives', add 'about', rephrase 'not at all boring' for natural English.