History— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more concise and structured: start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors (use correct tense and prepositions). Use linking words if adding extra details.

例: Yes, I have studied history. I have studied it since primary school and I still take history classes at school because it is compulsory. In particular, I enjoy world history because I like learning about major events and how they shaped different countries.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence then specific methods with correct grammar and linking words. Use simple, accurate verbs and avoid fragmented phrases. Be specific about what resources help you and why.

例: I usually learn history by reading the textbook and taking notes on important events. I also watch educational YouTube videos to get different perspectives and more detailed explanations, which helps me understand complex topics better.

提案: Begin with a clear main idea, then give two specific benefits with linking words (for example, 'first' and 'second'). Avoid vague or confusing phrases; use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'development of a country', 'cultural influences', 'international relations').

例: Learning history has many benefits. First, it helps us understand the development of a country, such as its politics and economy. Second, it teaches us about different cultures and how historical events have shaped relations between countries, which helps us appreciate cultural differences.

提案: Provide a concise opinion sentence followed by one or two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'so', 'therefore'). Correct grammar: subject-verb agreement and concise phrasing. Avoid repeating similar ideas.

例: Yes, I think history is important because it helps us learn from the past and understand how our society developed. For example, knowing past struggles and achievements makes me appreciate modern conveniences and cultural traditions more.

× I studied history since primary school and until now I still study history because it's a compulsory subject and in my opinion I love to study history only about the world history.

✓ I have studied history since primary school and I still study it now because it is a compulsory subject, and in my opinion I like studying world history.

The original mixes past simple ('studied') with 'since', which requires present perfect ('have studied') to show an action continuing to the present. 'Until now I still study' is redundant; use 'I still study it now'. 'I love to study history only about the world history' is awkward and ungrammatical; replace with 'I like studying world history'. Also change contractions and pronouns for clarity and subject-verb consistency.

× Well normally I would read the textbook and highlighted the big events in history are.

✓ Well, normally I read the textbook and highlight the major events in history.

The sentence mixes past and present forms incorrectly. 'Would read' implies habitual past; use simple present 'read' for habitual actions in general. 'Highlighted' is past; use base or present 'highlight' to match 'read'. The phrase 'the big events in history are' is fragmented; 'major events in history' is a correct noun phrase. Use consistent tense and verb form.

× I would watch YouTube videos for more prior views and more detailed.

✓ I would watch YouTube videos to gain broader perspectives and more detail.

'For more prior views' is incorrect preposition and word choice; use 'to gain' plus noun 'broader perspectives'. 'More detailed' is an adjective fragment; use the noun 'more detail'. Ensure prepositions ('to') correctly introduce purpose.

× In my opinion, learning history not only help you learn about the development of 1 country, but also know more about one culture and how it influences it in battles and worlds and how and know how to appreciate the difference between country.

✓ In my opinion, learning history not only helps you learn about the development of a country, but also helps you learn about its culture, how it influenced wars and other events, and how to appreciate differences between countries.

'Not only help' should be 'not only helps' to agree with singular subject 'learning history' (present tense third-person singular). The numeral '1' must be 'a'. 'Know more about one culture' is unclear; change to 'learn about its culture'. 'Influences it in battles and worlds' is ungrammatical; 'influenced wars and other events' is clearer. 'Difference between country' needs plural 'countries'. Maintain parallel structure with repeated 'helps you' or use correct parallel verbs.

× Yes, of course, learning history let you know about the past and allow you to appreciate what our ancestors have done for us and feel happy and feel appreciated for what we have today and for the country and know more about the cultural.

✓ Yes, of course. Learning history lets you know about the past and allows you to appreciate what our ancestors have done for us, to feel grateful for what we have today, to understand the country, and to learn more about its culture.

'Learning history let you' should be 'lets you' (third-person singular present). 'Allow you' should be 'allows you' for the same reason. The original contains run-on coordination; break into parallel infinitive phrases ('to appreciate', 'to feel', 'to understand', 'to learn') for clarity. 'Feel happy and feel appreciated' is vague; 'feel grateful' is more natural. 'Know more about the cultural' is incorrect; use 'learn more about its culture' or 'the culture' with a noun.