Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more fluent and concise: begin with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), then give one specific example with a short result. Avoid filler words (uh, well) and small grammatical errors (singular/plural, word order). Use linking words to connect idea and result.

例: Yes, I think I'm fairly good at choosing gifts because I try to match them to the person’s hobbies. For example, I recently bought my sister a cookbook since she enjoys cooking, and she was really pleased with it. This usually helps me give presents that feel personal and thoughtful.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence, then list 2–3 common occasions using linking words (for example, also, and). Correct plural forms and use concise phrases rather than repeating words. Add one brief reason to make the answer richer.

例: I usually give gifts on special occasions such as birthdays and anniversaries because they are good opportunities to show I care. For example, I buy my parents small presents on their birthdays, and I often give friends simple gifts at Christmas or when they graduate.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and expand with brief explanations for each factor, using linking words (first, second, then) and correcting grammar (singular/plural and articles). Be specific about how each factor influences the choice.

例: I consider two main things: my relationship with the person and their needs. First, the closer we are, the more personal the gift can be; second, I think about what they actually need, which then determines the budget and the type of present.

提案: Use a clear time reference and correct grammar (younger → younger, recent year → recent years). Avoid repetition and give one concise detail about the handmade gift and why you stopped, if possible. Use a linking word to contrast past and present (but, however).

例: Yes. When I was younger I used to make birthday cards for my grandparents, which they loved. However, in recent years I haven't had much time to make crafts, so I haven't made any handmade gifts lately.

提案: Give a direct opinion sentence, then support it with 2 short reasons linked logically. Correct grammar (plural agreement, word order) and avoid long, unlinked list of activities; use linking words (for example, instead, because).

例: No, I don't think expensive gifts necessarily express feelings better because experiences often matter more. For example, spending time together, celebrating with a small party, or taking photos can create lasting memories that show you care more than an expensive present.

× I think I'm fairly good at giving gift because I try to think about the person's hobbies and needs of, for example, my sister.

✓ I think I'm fairly good at giving gifts because I try to think about the person's hobbies and needs, for example, my sister's.

The singular noun 'gift' should be plural 'gifts' when speaking generally (article errors/number). Also the phrase 'needs of, for example, my sister' is awkward and missing a possessive; change to 'my sister's' to show the needs belong to her. Use a comma before 'for example' for clarity.

× Uh, my I recently gave my sister a nice cookbook because she likes cooking and, uh, she was really happy. I use.

✓ I recently gave my sister a nice cookbook because she likes cooking, and she was really happy.

Remove extraneous words 'my' and 'I use.' and link clauses with correct punctuation. Verb forms are correct, but extra words caused sentence structure error; this fits subject-verb agreement/structure corrections in the list.

× Well I usually give gift on special occasions like a birthday or marriage anniversary because they are good chance to show I care.

✓ Well, I usually give gifts on special occasions like a birthday or a marriage anniversary because they are a good chance to show I care.

Use plural 'gifts' for general action and add articles 'a' before 'marriage anniversary' and before 'good chance'. Commas improve readability.

× I often buy a small present for my parents on their birthday and give friends simple gift and Christmas or when they graduate.

✓ I often buy a small present for my parents on their birthdays and give friends simple gifts at Christmas or when they graduate.

Use plural 'birthdays' since parents have separate birthdays, plural 'gifts' for general reference, and 'at Christmas' is the correct prepositional phrase. This is an article/number usage issue.

× I mainly consider two things, my relationship with the person and their needs. Uh, the factor decide everything else such as a budget and the type of gift.

✓ I mainly consider two things: my relationship with the person and their needs. These factors decide everything else, such as the budget and the type of gift.

Original second sentence has subject-verb disagreement and unclear reference. Change 'the factor decide' to 'These factors decide' to match plural subject and verb. Add article 'the' before 'budget' for specificity.

× Yes, I used to make a birthday card for my grandparents when I was a younger, but in recent year I don't remember making any any craft craft.

✓ Yes, I used to make birthday cards for my grandparents when I was younger, but in recent years I don't remember making any crafts.

Use plural 'birthday cards' for repeated action, remove extra 'a' before 'younger', use 'in recent years' for timeframe, and plural 'crafts'. Also remove duplicated words. These are past-tense and plural/time expression corrections.

× Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

✓ Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

Sentence is grammatically fine; no correction needed. Included for completeness but unchanged.

× Well I don't think expensive gift are well are doing feel better because sometime more like spending time together and take photos and celebrate parties together and talk with each other is very important.

✓ Well, I don't think expensive gifts make you feel better because sometimes spending time together, taking photos, celebrating parties together, and talking with each other are more important.

Change 'gift' to plural 'gifts' and replace awkward phrasing 'are well are doing feel better' with 'make you feel better'. Use 'sometimes' and gerunds for parallel activities: 'spending', 'taking', 'celebrating', 'talking'. Use plural verb 'are' to agree with the list of activities. This addresses subject-verb agreement, article/plural errors, and sentence structure.