Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and use clearer structure: start with a direct topic sentence, then one or two supporting details with linking words. Avoid vague phrases and repetition (e.g. "likings and dislikings"). Use more natural collocations like "likes and dislikes" or "their preferences."

例: Yes. I'm good at giving gifts. I enjoy choosing creative presents by finding out the person's preferences, so I can pick something meaningful rather than random.

提案: Organise into a clear topic sentence and supporting detail using linking words. Reduce run-on sentences and improve accuracy (e.g. "I study their preferences on social media"). Mention one specific example of what you learn from profiles to make it more concrete.

例: Mostly on birthdays and anniversaries. Also, I often check their social media to see what hobbies or brands they like, for example if they post photos of hiking gear I might choose outdoor equipment.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence then specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid filler words ("uh") and repeat ideas less. Provide an example of a feature you research for electronics and one criterion for other gifts to be specific.

例: Quality is my main concern. For electronics, I research features like battery life and brand reliability, and for clothing I check material and stitching so the item will last.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence and add one or two specific supporting details. Correct grammar and phrasing (e.g. "I enjoyed sewing" not "I liked stitching very much in that age"). Avoid unclear phrases like "I used to teach different kinds of design."

例: Yes. As a child I often made handmade gifts for my mother because I enjoyed sewing. For example, I sewed small embroidered handkerchiefs that she loved because they matched her taste.

提案: Give a clear opinion in the first sentence, then support it with specific reasons and an example. Improve grammar ("he have" → "they have") and use linking words such as "because" or "for example" to connect ideas.

例: No, I don't think so. I value thoughtfulness more than price because a well-chosen, useful gift shows the giver knows me. For example, receiving a book in my favourite genre feels more meaningful than an expensive item I won't use.

× Yeah, I think I am good at it.

✓ Yeah, I think I am good at it.

No grammatical error; sentence correctly uses present simple for a general ability. No change needed.

× I love to give some creative gifts to my friends and my parents.

✓ I love to give creative gifts to my friends and my parents.

'Some' is unnecessary before a plural noun when speaking generally. Removing it makes the sentence more natural: 'give creative gifts'.

× Mainly I like to know about their likings and dislikings and according to that I plan what would I give to them.

✓ Mainly I like to know about their likes and dislikes and, based on that, I plan what to give them.

'Likings and dislikings' is unnatural; use 'likes and dislikes.' Word order in 'what would I give to them' is incorrect for a statement — use 'what to give them.' 'According to that' is better expressed as 'based on that.' Added commas for clarity.

× On birthdays mainly and on anniversaries too, I like to know about the preferences like a study a lot about their preferences mostly from their social media profile where they portray themselves and their from there I can get a lot of personal experience of them and according to that.

✓ Mainly on birthdays and anniversaries, I like to learn about their preferences, mostly from their social media profiles where they present themselves, and from there I can get a lot of personal information to guide my choice.

This sentence is run-on and repetitive. 'Like a study a lot' is ungrammatical; use 'learn about' or 'study their preferences.' 'Profile' should be plural if referring to multiple people. 'Portray themselves' is better as 'present themselves.' 'Personal experience of them' should be 'personal information' or 'insights about them.' Reorganized for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I think the quality matters most to me.

✓ I think quality matters most to me.

'The quality' is unnecessary when speaking generally about quality; removing 'the' makes it more natural. Tense and structure are otherwise correct.

× I like to give something with a great quality so that it doesn't get damaged easily.

✓ I like to give something of good quality so that it doesn't get damaged easily.

'With a great quality' is unnatural. Use 'of good quality.' The rest of the sentence uses correct tense and structure.

× So while choosing any electronic device, I learn about the features and uh, for any other gifts.

✓ So while choosing any electronic device, I learn about the features, and for other kinds of gifts I also check their durability and usefulness.

The original ends abruptly and is incomplete ('and uh, for any other gifts.'). Completed the idea by specifying what is checked for other gifts (durability and usefulness) to make a full sentence and maintain parallel structure.

× Yeah, when I was a child, I used to give my mother handmade gifts.

✓ Yeah, when I was a child, I used to give my mother handmade gifts.

Correct use of 'used to' for past habitual action. No grammatical correction needed.

× I liked stitching very much in that age.

✓ I liked stitching very much at that age.

Preposition 'in that age' is incorrect; use 'at that age' to refer to a period of life.

× I used to teach different kinds of design and gave it to my mother, who is also a fond of stitching.

✓ I used to make different kinds of designs and give them to my mother, who is also fond of stitching.

'Teach' is wrong here; context implies creating/making designs. Use plural 'designs' and match tenses: 'used to make... and give' for habitual past. 'A fond of stitching' is incorrect; use 'fond of stitching.' Also 'them' refers back to 'designs.'

× So I can remember it right now.

✓ So I can still remember it now.

'Can remember it right now' is slightly awkward; 'still remember it now' is more natural to indicate a past memory retained in the present.

× Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

✓ Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

Question is grammatical as written; 'better' correctly compares ability of expensive gifts. No correction needed.

× I think no like for me whenever someone gives me something I always see how well he or she knows me.

✓ I don't think so; for me, whenever someone gives me something, I always consider how well they know me.

Informal 'I think no like' is ungrammatical. Use 'I don't think so.' 'He or she' can be replaced with singular 'they' for natural spoken English. Added commas for clarity.

× I feel good when he or she gives me something that I like and that is useful for me.

✓ I feel good when someone gives me something that I like and that is useful to me.

'Useful for me' is acceptable but 'useful to me' is more natural. Also changed 'he or she' to 'someone' for smoother phrasing.

× Like he have researched a lot while giving me that gift so.

✓ It shows they have researched a lot before giving me that gift.

'Like he have' is ungrammatical: subject-verb agreement and tense misuse. Use present perfect 'have researched' with singular 'they' or 'he/she has researched.' Rephrased to 'It shows they have researched a lot before giving me that gift' for clarity and correctness.