Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct minor grammar issues; start with a clear topic sentence and add one supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid redundancy (e.g., "when it comes to gifting").

例: Yes, I am. I take gift-giving seriously, because I prefer choosing thoughtful presents that suit the recipient’s tastes. For example, I usually spend time thinking about their hobbies before buying anything.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and use linking words for clarity; remove filler words like "umm" and give a specific example to make the answer more vivid.

例: I usually give gifts on special occasions like birthdays and farewells, and sometimes I give presents spontaneously to show appreciation. For instance, I once bought a small book for a colleague after they helped me with a project.

提案: Correct grammatical errors and combine sentences to avoid repetition. Use linking words and provide a specific example of a useful or unique item to illustrate your point.

例: I consider how useful the gift will be, so I prefer items someone can use daily. For example, I once gave a friend a compact portable charger because she travels a lot and didn’t realize how handy it would be.

提案: Answer directly, avoid fillers and fragmented sentences, and add a brief detail about why the recipient liked it or how they reacted. Correct tense and vocabulary (e.g., "I drew" not "I draw").

例: Yes, I have. In high school I drew a picture of an animal she loved but could never have as a pet, and she was really touched because it showed I remembered her interests.

提案: Good clear opinion; make it more natural by adding a linking phrase and a concise supporting reason or example. Avoid repeating similar words ("something").

例: No, I don't think so, because price doesn't measure thoughtfulness; a handmade card or a personalized keepsake often means more. For example, my sister treasured a scrapbook I made more than any expensive jewelry.

× I think I am. When it comes to gifting, I will get serious and I'm not the type of person who just give anything to anyone.

✓ I think I am. When it comes to gifting, I get serious and I'm not the type of person who just gives anything to anyone.

The verb after 'who' must agree with the singular noun 'person'. Use third person singular 'gives' instead of 'give'. Also 'I will get serious' is acceptable but 'I get serious' suits habitual meaning better; ensure tense matches intended meaning.

× I normally give gifts to others in special occasions such as birthdays, farewells, but sometimes when I feel like I want to appreciate someone, I would umm try to give them something meaningful as well.

✓ I normally give gifts to others on special occasions such as birthdays and farewells, but sometimes when I feel like I want to appreciate someone, I will try to give them something meaningful as well.

Use 'on' with 'occasions' (preposition error). Also use 'and' between items. 'Would' suggests conditional; use 'will' or present simple for habitual/future intent. Remove filler 'umm' in formal sentences.

× I would consider the usage of the gift. So I would give someone something that they would use it on a daily basis, or maybe something that is very useful, something that they never thought they needed it.

✓ I would consider the use of the gift. So I would give someone something that they would use on a daily basis, or maybe something that is very useful, something that they never thought they needed.

Avoid redundant pronoun 'it' after 'use' (pronoun misuse). Use 'use' not 'usage' for natural phrasing. Remove final 'it' after 'needed' and keep parallel structure.

× Yes I did. When I was in high school I gave my best friend a painting. Not really a painting, umm it was just a drawing. I draw an animal that she really liked but impossible for her to pet.

✓ Yes I did. When I was in high school I gave my best friend a painting. Not really a painting, it was just a drawing. I drew an animal that she really liked but it was impossible for her to pet.

Maintain past tense: 'draw' should be past 'drew'. Also 'impossible for her to pet' needs a subject and verb 'it was impossible' for grammatical completeness. Remove filler 'umm'.

× Not at all. The price tag does not really reflect the value of the gift. Sometimes something that you prepared by yourself, like something handmade, is much more meaningful and thoughtful compared to some branded items.

✓ Not at all. The price tag does not really reflect the value of a gift. Sometimes something you prepared yourself, like a handmade item, is much more meaningful and thoughtful compared to branded items.

Stylistic improvements: 'a gift' is more natural than 'the gift' here (article choice). Use adjective-noun order 'handmade item' rather than 'something handmade'. Remove unnecessary 'by' in 'prepared yourself'. These changes fix article/adjective use and improve fluency.