Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ нужно сделать грамматически правильным и более естественным. Избегайте лишних слов и ошибок в временах. Начните с прямого утверждения, затем коротко поясните причину и приведите пример. Используйте правильную форму глаголов и местоимений.

例: Yes, I am. I think giving gifts is important because it helps maintain friendships. For example, my friends and I exchange small presents every month.

提案: Сделайте фразу более связной и исправьте порядок слов и артикли. Уберите двусмысленность (“not our traditional” неясно) и используйте связующие слова для объяснения причины.

例: My friends and I exchange gifts monthly. It's not a formal tradition, but we do it because it helps strengthen our friendship.

提案: Уберите заполнители (uh, well) и исправьте структуру предложения. Сформулируйте тему прямо, затем приведите конкретный пример критериев выбора. Используйте точные глагольные конструкции (consider someone's interests).

例: I consider the recipient's interests and hobbies. For instance, if a friend likes painting, I might buy quality brushes or a sketchbook.

提案: Исправьте ошибки во временах и артиклях. Фразу «I have ever» заменить на «I have» или использовать прошедшее «I gave». Дайте точный временной маркер и короткое описание подарка.

例: Yes, I have. When I was younger I made a photo album for my parents and a knitted scarf for my sister.

提案: Сделайте ответ короче и чётче. Исправьте структуру («express your feelings» без изменений) и уберите лишние детали о магазине, если это не относится к аргументу. Приведите причину и краткий пример.

例: No, I don't think expensive gifts express feelings better. What matters is thoughtfulness; a meaningful, inexpensive present can show more care than something costly.

× Moreover, I reckon that is important to given some gifts for your friends.

✓ Moreover, I reckon that it is important to give some gifts to your friends.

The verb phrase 'to given' is incorrect because 'given' is the past participle; after 'to' the base form (infinitive) 'give' must be used. Also 'that is important' needs the dummy subject 'it' before 'is'. Suggestion: use the infinitive 'to give' and include 'it' as the subject: 'I reckon that it is important to give...'. (Ошибка связана с неправильным использованием формы глагола после 'to', требуется инфинитив.)

× For example, me and my friends given gifts each other every month.

✓ For example, my friends and I give gifts to each other every month.

Several issues: 'me and my friends' should be 'my friends and I' as subject pronoun and standard order; 'given' is wrong tense/form—present tense 'give' is needed to match habitual action; 'each other' needs 'to' before it in this structure. Suggestion: use subject 'my friends and I', present simple verb 'give', and preposition 'to' if needed: 'give gifts to each other'. (Ошибка: неверная форма местоимения в подлежащем и неправильное согласование глагола по времени.)

× It is not our traditional because in our opinion it help strengthen our friendship.

✓ It is not a tradition because, in our opinion, it helps strengthen our friendship.

'Traditional' is an adjective; the correct noun is 'tradition' with the article 'a'. Also 'help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject 'it'. Suggestion: replace 'traditional' with 'tradition' and use third person singular verb 'helps': 'it helps strengthen...'. (Ошибка: неправильный выбор слова и несогласование глагола.)

× Me and my friends give gifts to each other every month.

✓ My friends and I give gifts to each other every month.

Subject pronoun should be 'my friends and I' not 'me and my friends'. 'Me' is an object pronoun and is incorrect in subject position. Suggestion: use 'I' as part of the subject and place others before 'I' for natural order. (Ошибка: неправильно употреблено объектное местоимение в роли подлежащего.)

× So when I, uh, choose a gift, I, uh, consider to interest, uh, the person who I want to give a present.

✓ So when I choose a gift, I consider the interests of the person I want to give a present to.

'Consider to interest' is ungrammatical: 'consider' is followed by a noun or gerund, not 'to' + verb. Use 'consider the interests' or 'consider what interests' instead. Also 'who I want to give a present' needs 'to' at the end or rephrase to 'the person I want to give a present to'. Suggestion: use noun phrase 'the interests' and place 'to' at end or use 'for': 'consider the interests of the person I want to give a present to'. (Ошибка: неверный глагольный шаблон после 'consider' и порядок слов в предикативной конструкции.)

× Yes, I have ever given a handmade gifts to others.

✓ Yes, I have given handmade gifts to others.

'Have ever given' is awkward in affirmative answers; 'ever' is used in questions or negatives. Also 'a handmade gifts' mixes singular article with plural noun—use 'handmade gifts' or 'a handmade gift'. Suggestion: use present perfect 'I have given handmade gifts' or 'I have given a handmade gift'. (Ошибка: неверное использование 'ever' и артикля с множественным числом.)

× For example, when I was smaller than now I give a handmade present to my parents and my sister.

✓ For example, when I was younger I gave a handmade present to my parents and my sister.

Use 'younger' rather than 'smaller' to compare age. The time clause refers to past, so the main verb should be past tense 'gave' not 'give'. Suggestion: say 'when I was younger, I gave...' to match past time reference. (Ошибка: неправильный выбор слова для сравнения возраста и несоответствие времени глагола.)

× To tell the truth, I believe that it is false information that expensive gifts express better your feeling, because nearby my house there is a great shop where I can buy a lot of wonderful gifts for my, for example, best friends.

✓ To tell the truth, I believe it is false that expensive gifts better express your feelings, because near my house there is a great shop where I can buy many wonderful gifts for my friends, for example.

Multiple errors: 'false information that' is unnatural—use 'false that' or 'not true that'. Word order 'express better your feeling' is incorrect; adverb 'better' should come before the verb or rephrase 'better express your feelings'. 'Nearby my house' should be 'near my house'. 'a lot of' with countable 'gifts' is acceptable but 'many' is more formal; 'my, for example, best friends' is awkward—use 'my friends, for example' or 'my best friends, for example'. Also 'feeling' should be plural 'feelings'. Suggestion: simplify sentence and correct word order: 'it is false that expensive gifts better express your feelings, because near my house there is a great shop where I can buy many wonderful gifts for my friends, for example.' (Ошибка: структура предложения, порядок слов, предлоги и формы существительного.)