Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce repetition and grammar errors, give a clear topic sentence and two specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct vocabulary (e.g., 'fond of', 'bought', 'interests'). Keep answer within 3–4 sentences.

例: I think I'm quite good at choosing gifts because I focus on the person's interests. For example, when I went to Japan last year I bought a mini Blythe doll for a friend who is fond of collectible dolls. I usually think about what the person likes and whether the gift will be meaningful to them.

提案: Correct grammar and avoid repeating words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then list occasions using linking words (first, second, also). Be specific and concise.

例: I usually give gifts on two main occasions. First, I give them on special days like birthdays, anniversaries, or parents' days such as Mother's Day and Father's Day. Second, I give gifts to celebrate personal achievements like graduations.

提案: Use correct grammar for subject and possessive forms, and include linking words to make the answer coherent. Provide one clear main point and a brief specific example that supports it.

例: I mainly consider the recipient's hobbies and interests when choosing a gift. For example, a friend studying interior design graduated recently, so I bought her a mini LEGO house that she could design and display, which matched her interests perfectly.

提案: Begin with a clear affirmative sentence and correct small errors (use 'I think' not 'Guess I have', and plural forms). Add a brief reason and one specific example to strengthen the answer.

例: Yes, I have. I often give handmade portraits to close friends and family for special occasions like birthdays because I feel they are more personal and meaningful than store-bought gifts. For instance, I painted a portrait for my sister's birthday last year and she loved it.

提案: Provide a clear opinion sentence and then compare both sides using linking words (however, on the other hand). Fix grammar (e.g., 'it depends', 'mean' -> 'means') and give a concise example to illustrate your view.

例: I think it depends. Expensive gifts can show you are willing to spend a lot for someone; however, a personal or thoughtful gift often better reflects the recipient's preferences and your relationship. For example, I once received an expensive watch but appreciated more a handmade album a friend gave me because it captured our memories.

× I think I'm pretty good at giving gifts.

✓ I think I'm pretty good at giving gifts.

No change needed: subject-verb agreement is correct. Keep as is.

× Usually I don't give give very often, but when I do try to, I think carefully about the person interest.

✓ Usually I don't give gifts very often, but when I do try to, I think carefully about the person's interests.

Errors: repeated word 'give give', missing noun after 'give', missing possessive apostrophe and plural 'interests'. Suggestion: remove duplicate word, add the noun 'gifts', change 'person interest' to 'person's interests' to show possession and pluralize 'interest' because people usually have multiple interests.

× For example when I went to Japan last year, my friends who really fond of blind doll, I bite her one of the mini Blythe doll.

✓ For example, when I went to Japan last year, my friend who is really fond of blind dolls, I bought her one of the mini Blythe dolls.

Errors: subject-verb agreement and word choice. 'friends who really fond' needs a linking verb 'is' and singular 'friend' if referring to one person; 'fond of blind doll' should be 'fond of blind dolls' (plural). 'I bite her one' is incorrect verb and structure; use 'I bought her one' to show purchasing. Also pluralize 'Blythe doll' if referring to the model type 'Blythe dolls'.

× For me, I usually gift gift on 2 occasion.

✓ For me, I usually give gifts on two occasions.

Errors: repeated word 'gift gift' and incorrect singular/plural form 'occasion' with numeral. Use the verb 'give gifts' and plural 'occasions' when referring to more than one. Spell out small numbers in formal speech: 'two'.

× The first one is for a special day such as birthday or anniversary or from my parents it would be father day or mother day and sickly would be personal achievements such as graduation day.

✓ The first is for special days such as birthdays or anniversaries, or for parents it would be Father's Day or Mother's Day; secondly, it would be personal achievements such as graduation day.

Errors: sentence run-on and incorrect word choice 'sickly' for 'secondly', missing articles and plural forms. Break into clearer parts, pluralize 'birthdays/anniversaries', capitalize and possessivize 'Father's Day/Mother's Day', and use 'secondly' for the next point.

× I usually consider the recipient is hobbies and interests.

✓ I usually consider the recipient's hobbies and interests.

Error: incorrect structure; 'consider' is followed by noun phrase not 'is'. Use the possessive form 'recipient's' to show ownership of 'hobbies and interests'.

× For example, one of my best friend who's studying interior design so when she graduated I bought her a mini Lego house so she could design and display it and also enjoy while doing it.

✓ For example, one of my best friends who's studying interior design: when she graduated, I bought her a mini Lego house so she could design and display it and also enjoy building it.

Errors: 'one of my best friend' should be 'one of my best friends' (plural in the group). Run-on sentence: add punctuation and connectives. 'Enjoy while doing it' is awkward; specify 'enjoy building it' for clarity.

× Guess I have, I often give handmade portrait to close friends and family for a special occasion like birthdays and anniversaries because I think they feel more personal and meaningful than store bought gifts.

✓ I guess I have. I often give handmade portraits to close friends and family for special occasions like birthdays and anniversaries because I think they feel more personal and meaningful than store-bought gifts.

Errors: missing subject 'I' at the start, plural 'portrait' should be 'portraits' to match 'often', 'a special occasion' -> 'special occasions' for general statement, and 'store bought' should be hyphenated 'store-bought' as a compound adjective.

× I think it's depend on the aspect because sometimes expensive gift mean that you are willing to spend a lot of money for this special person and sometimes giving a personal gift is more considerate about their preference.

✓ I think it depends on the situation because sometimes an expensive gift means that you are willing to spend a lot of money on this special person, and sometimes giving a personal gift is more considerate of their preferences.

Errors: verb agreement 'it's depend' -> 'it depends'; article and singular/plural agreement 'expensive gift mean' -> 'an expensive gift means'; preposition 'spend ... for' -> 'spend ... on'; 'considerate about' -> 'considerate of'; pluralize 'preference' to 'preferences'. These changes correct tense, subject-verb agreement, article use, prepositions, and collocations.