Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons or examples. Correct grammar (plural/singular, articles) and avoid redundancy.

例: Not really. I usually just bring flowers to special events because I find them simple and appropriate. For example, at my friend’s graduation I gave a bouquet since she loves roses.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence and use correct vocabulary for occasions. Use linking words to list examples and one short specific detail about one occasion.

例: I usually give gifts on special occasions. For example, I give presents for birthdays, promotions and graduations; for birthdays I prefer small personal items like books or chocolates.

提案: Answer directly and avoid long unclear sentences. Explain one or two clear considerations (recipient’s taste, occasion, budget) and use linking words for coherence. Correct grammar and word choice.

例: I don’t spend much time choosing gifts; usually I consider the recipient’s taste and the occasion. For instance, if it’s a close friend I pick flowers in their favorite color, but for a colleague I choose a simple card.

提案: Good direct answer and reason. Make it more fluent by combining sentences and adding a brief example. Use linking words like because or so for coherence and correct grammar.

例: No, I haven’t made handmade gifts because I find them difficult and I’m not very craft-skilled. So I usually buy flowers or a card; for example, I gave a nice card to a coworker last month.

提案: Avoid overgeneralisation. Start with a nuanced opinion (sometimes) and give reasons and an example. Improve grammar and clarity; explain emotional vs practical value of gifts and use linking words.

例: Sometimes, but not always. Expensive gifts can show you cared enough to invest money, especially for practical items like a high-end phone with more features. However, a thoughtful inexpensive gift can be more meaningful if it matches the recipient’s interests.

× No, I am not good at giving gift because in the special events I often bring just the flower to other people.

✓ No, I am not good at giving gifts because at special events I often bring just flowers to other people.

Use plural 'gifts' and 'flowers' because general activities and countable nouns in this context are plural; remove the definite article before 'special events' and use 'at' for occasions. Also 'just' placed before the noun is appropriate. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general habits and 'at special events' for time phrase.

× I often give a gift to other people in special occasions, for example, birthday, a promotion day or con graduation day.

✓ I often give gifts to other people on special occasions, for example, birthdays, promotion days, or graduation days.

Use plural 'gifts' and 'occasions' for general habits. Use preposition 'on' with days/events. Use plural forms 'birthdays', 'promotion days', 'graduation days' or specify 'a birthday, a promotion, or a graduation' for singular instances. 'con graduation' seems to be a typo for 'congratulation' or 'graduation'; corrected to 'graduation'.

× Actually, I don't consider too much about choosing a gift because I often buy flower to everyone and every generations because the meaning of flowers is beautiful and nice so it's represent a good things.

✓ Actually, I don't think too much about choosing a gift because I often buy flowers for everyone and every generation because the meaning of flowers is beautiful and they represent good things.

Use verb 'think about' instead of 'consider about' (consider does not take 'about' in this context). 'Buy flowers for everyone' uses 'for' not 'to'. Use plural 'flowers' and 'generation' (or 'generations') consistently. Replace 'it's represent' with 'they represent' to match plural subject. 'Beautiful and nice' is redundant; use 'beautiful' or 'pleasant'. Suggestion: keep subject-verb agreement and correct prepositions.

× No, I never have this experience because it's very hard to do a handmade gift and I am not good about that.

✓ No, I have never had this experience because it's very hard to make a handmade gift and I am not good at that.

Use present perfect 'have never had' to describe life experience. Use 'make' for creating a gift rather than 'do'. Use 'good at' not 'good about'. Maintain correct verb tense and preposition.

× So I often buy just a flower or a card to other people when I would like to give them a gift.

✓ So I often buy just a flower or a card for other people when I want to give them a gift.

Use 'for' instead of 'to' when referring to buying something for someone. Use simple present 'want' for habitual preference, not 'would like' which implies conditional or polite request. Keep nouns consistent: 'a flower' is acceptable but consider plural for general habits.

× Yes, I think so, because expensive gift often have a much more function than a cheaper gift.

✓ Yes, I think so, because an expensive gift often has many more functions than a cheaper gift.

Add article 'an' before 'expensive gift'; use singular-plural agreement: 'has' with singular subject, or use plural 'expensive gifts often have many more functions than cheaper gifts'. 'A much more function' is ungrammatical; use 'many more functions' or 'much more functionality'. Ensure subject-verb agreement.

× For example, the mobile phone if in the high end phone and expensive price often have a much more function more than.

✓ For example, a high-end mobile phone with an expensive price often has many more functions than a cheaper one.

Reorder and correct phrases: use 'a high-end mobile phone' (compound adjective before noun), 'with an expensive price' or simply 'an expensive one'. Use singular-plural agreement: 'has' for singular, 'functions' plural. Replace awkward comparative 'much more function more than' with 'many more functions than a cheaper one'. Also avoid redundant words and ensure clarity.