Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and grammar errors, and add one specific example with a short reason. Use linking words (for example, because). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy giving gifts to my family and close friends. For example, I usually buy a small present for my parents on their birthdays because I want to show appreciation for their support. I think thoughtful gifts help strengthen relationships.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and organised supporting details. Use linking words (usually, for example, or sometimes) and correct vocabulary (weddings, birthdays). Avoid filler words like 'uh' and repetitive phrases. Limit to 3–4 concise sentences.

例: I usually give gifts on special occasions such as birthdays and weddings. For example, when a friend gets married I give a practical household gift because it will be useful for their new life together. Sometimes I also give small presents on other celebrations.

提案: Give a direct answer then specific criteria. Use clear pronouns and correct grammar (e.g., his/her, their). Use linking words (first, also) and give a concrete example of a consideration. Keep it concise and avoid repetition.

例: I choose gifts based on the recipient's interests and needs. For instance, if my friend enjoys cooking, I might buy a quality kitchen gadget because I know it will be useful. I also consider my budget and the occasion.

提案: Clarify who made the gift and who received it. Begin with a clear yes/no and a brief explanation, then give one specific, coherent example. Correct tense and pronoun errors and avoid confusing details. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I sometimes give handmade gifts because they feel more personal. For example, last month I made a small knitted scarf for a friend who lives abroad, and she was very happy to receive something handmade. It felt special because I made it myself.

提案: Answer directly and explain your opinion with a clear reason and an example. Use linking words (because, however, for example) and correct grammar. Avoid unclear phrases and repetition. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: I don't think expensive gifts are necessary to show feelings because sincerity matters more than price. For example, a heartfelt letter or a homemade meal can mean more to someone than an expensive item because it shows thought and effort.

× Yes, I am very good at giving the gifts because most of the time I will just send to the gifts from myself to the my parents and the friends.

✓ Yes, I am very good at giving gifts because most of the time I just give gifts from myself to my parents and friends.

Incorrect use of articles 'the' before plural nouns 'gifts', 'my parents' and 'friends'. Articles are unnecessary here. Also 'send to the gifts' is wrong phrasing; use 'give gifts' or 'give gifts to'. Suggestion: omit 'the' with general plural nouns and use 'give' not 'send to the gifts'.

× For example, if I'm going to their birthday party then I give.

✓ For example, if I'm going to their birthday party, I give them a gift.

Sentence is incomplete and missing object 'them' and 'a gift'. Ensure the verb has a clear object. Suggestion: add 'them a gift' or 'a gift to them' to complete the thought.

× I'm very good at giving the birthday because I believe that if you give the birthday then you spread their love to each other.

✓ I'm very good at giving birthday gifts because I believe that when you give birthday gifts you spread love between people.

Incorrect noun usage 'giving the birthday' and unclear pronoun reference 'their love to each other'. Use 'birthday gifts' and clearer subject 'people' or 'between people'. Suggestion: replace vague phrases with concrete nouns and correct pronouns.

× Uh, I usually give the gifts at some events.

✓ Uh, I usually give gifts at certain events.

Unnecessary article 'the' before 'gifts' and awkward 'some events'. Use 'gifts' and 'certain events' or 'special events'.

× Sometime I just, uh, give the givers on their birthday.

✓ Sometimes I just give gifts on their birthdays.

Pluralization errors: 'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes', 'givers' is incorrect word (should be 'gifts'), and 'their birthday' should be 'their birthdays' for general statement. Suggestion: use 'sometimes' and plural forms for general habits.

× But most of the time I usually give the gifts when I go to there any marriage.

✓ But most of the time I usually give gifts when I go to a wedding.

Incorrect preposition 'go to there any marriage' and article 'the gifts'. Use 'go to a wedding' and 'give gifts'. Suggestion: use 'wedding' for marriage event and correct article usage.

× For example, if my friend are going to get married, then I usually give the birthday gift and most of the time I just want to give their gift.

✓ For example, if my friend is going to get married, then I usually give a wedding gift and most of the time I just want to give them a gift.

Subject-verb agreement: 'friend are' should be 'friend is' (singular). Also 'birthday gift' is wrong for a marriage; use 'wedding gift'. Pronoun usage 'give their gift' is unclear; use 'give them a gift'.

× Well, I consider their point of view of my friend, for example, uh, I choose what he like and what he not like.

✓ Well, I consider my friend's point of view; for example, I choose what he likes and what he does not like.

Incorrect pronoun placement and agreement: 'their point of view of my friend' is mixed; use 'my friend's point of view'. Verb agreement: 'he like' and 'he not like' need third-person singular present 'likes' and 'does not like'. Suggestion: use possessive form and correct verb forms.

× So I, I prefer to prefer to give the gift uh, which they are like and dislike.

✓ So I prefer to give a gift that they will like.

Redundant phrase 'prefer to prefer' and incorrect relative clause 'which they are like and dislike'. Use 'that they will like' or 'that they like'. Suggestion: simplify and use correct relative clause structures.

× And I have the idea about their likes and dislikes.

✓ And I have an idea about their likes and dislikes.

Article usage: 'the idea' is odd; use 'an idea' for general sense. Otherwise sentence is acceptable.

× So I just consider herself and and choosing the gift according the person.

✓ So I just consider the person and choose the gift according to them.

Incorrect reflexive pronoun 'herself' and duplicated 'and'. Use neutral 'the person' and correct verb form 'choose'. Preposition should be 'according to'. Suggestion: avoid incorrect reflexive pronouns when referring generally.

× Yes, I give to other handmade kids was most of the time I just prefer to give the gift which I made by hand.

✓ Yes, I give handmade gifts to others; most of the time I prefer to give gifts that I made by hand.

Incorrect word order and tense: 'give to other handmade kids was' is ungrammatical. 'Kids' is likely wrong for 'gifts' or 'items'. Use present simple for habitual action and plural 'gifts'. Suggestion: restructure sentence for clarity.

× For example last month my mother made the one cloth that is by the own and I will give to my friend and she was very happy because he loves to handmade gifts and she live in out of country and there is a lot of people.

✓ For example, last month my mother made a piece of clothing herself and I gave it to my friend. She was very happy because she loves handmade gifts and she lives in another country.

Multiple tense, pronoun, and word choice errors: 'made the one cloth that is by the own' should be 'made a piece of clothing herself'; 'I will give' should be past 'I gave' to match 'last month'; pronoun agreement 'she was very happy because he loves' should be 'she... because she loves'; 'live in out of country' should be 'lives in another country'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistent for past events and correct pronouns.

× I think so director express feel your feeling are more better than give you expensive gift because when you give you expensive gift then you spend a lot of money.

✓ I think expressing your feelings is better than giving an expensive gift because when you give an expensive gift you spend a lot of money.

Unclear phrase 'director express feel your feeling are more better' is gibberish. Use gerund 'expressing your feelings' and comparative 'better than'. Article 'an' before 'expensive gift' needed. Remove redundant 'you'. Suggestion: use clear subject and consistent structure.

× In addition to this, if you give some your expression the express then I think so that a lot of people are just impressed you were feeling not just buying being expensive gift.

✓ In addition, if you express your feelings, I think many people will be impressed by your emotions, not by buying an expensive gift.

Awkward and incorrect phrases: 'give some your expression the express' should be 'express your feelings'; 'impressed you were feeling' should be 'impressed by your emotions'; 'buying being expensive gift' should be 'buying an expensive gift'. Suggestion: use active verbs like 'express' and proper prepositions 'impressed by'.