Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cách cải thiện: Trả lời nên ngắn gọn, trực tiếp và rõ ràng; tránh lặp từ và ngữ pháp sai. Bạn nên mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (Yes/No và lý do ngắn gọn), sau đó thêm 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể dùng liên từ (because, so) để giải thích. Chú ý sử dụng động từ và danh từ đúng dạng (e.g., "give gifts", "fit them").

例: No, I'm not very good at giving gifts because I often don't know people’s interests. For example, when buying for my parents I’m unsure what they like, so I usually choose something safe like flowers or a gift card.

提案: Cách cải thiện: Trả lời nên có câu chủ đề rõ ràng và dùng từ vựng phù hợp (e.g., "on birthdays" not "in his birthday"). Hạn chế lỗi cấu trúc ("I often give rings" hoặc "I often give gifts") và dùng liên từ (for example) kèm chi tiết cụ thể và ngắn gọn. Giữ câu không quá 3-4 mệnh đề để tránh rối.

例: I usually give gifts on birthdays or special occasions. For example, I give a small present to my friends on their birthdays to show appreciation and strengthen our friendship.

提案: Cách cải thiện: Nên dùng câu chủ đề trực tiếp: "I consider the recipient’s interests." Tránh sai ngữ pháp ("within others", "I go ask his birthday"). Nói cụ thể: nêu ví dụ hoàn chỉnh về món quà và lúc bạn tặng. Dùng liên từ (for example, because) để kết nối ý.

例: I consider the recipient’s interests and hobbies when choosing a gift. For example, my brother loves LEGO, so I usually buy him a new LEGO set for his birthday because he enjoys building models.

提案: Cách cải thiện: Trả lời cần mạch lạc: khẳng định rồi mô tả ngắn gọn chi tiết cụ thể (what, who, when, why). Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và trật tự từ ("I have made a card for my mom","it showed that I thought about her"). Dùng tối đa 3 câu để rõ ràng.

例: Yes, I have. I once made a handmade card for my mother on Mother’s Day. It showed that I had thought about her and she felt very happy.

提案: Cách cải thiện: Nên trình bày ý kiến rõ ràng và cân bằng (Yes, but... / No, because...). Tránh lặp từ ("expensive, expensive") và sai thì/động từ ("my mother give me"). Cung cấp lý do cụ thể và một ví dụ ngắn, chính xác về dịp. Giữ tối đa 3 câu.

例: I think expensive gifts can sometimes show strong feelings because they often reflect time and money spent. However, meaningful or thoughtful gifts can be more important than price; for instance, my mother once gave me a watch for my graduation, which made me feel special.

× No I am not.

✓ No, I'm not.

Use a contraction and comma for natural spoken English; not strictly a grammar error but punctuation/contraction improves fluency.

× I think giving gift to my parents or my friends is hard for me because I don't know their interests so I can so I cannot choose a gift that fit to them.

✓ I think giving gifts to my parents or my friends is hard for me because I don't know their interests, so I cannot choose a gift that fits them.

Pluralize 'gift' when speaking generally (Grammar type 1). Remove extra words 'so I can so'. Use subject-verb agreement 'fits' for singular 'gift' or 'fits them' for the gift fitting the recipients (Grammar type 27). Remove 'to' after 'fit' (incorrect preposition, Grammar type 11). Add a comma before the conjunction 'so' to join independent clauses (Grammar type 26). Suggestions: use plural nouns for general statements, ensure verbs agree with their subjects, and avoid unnecessary words.

× I often give ring give to others on their birthday or special occasions.

✓ I often give rings to others on their birthdays or on special occasions.

Use plural 'rings' for repeated/general action (Grammar type 1). Use plural 'birthdays' when referring to different people's birthdays and add 'on' before 'special occasions' for correct preposition (Grammar type 11). Remove duplicated word 'give'.

× For example, I always prepare gift for my friends in his birthday to strengthen friendship.

✓ For example, I always prepare a gift for my friends on their birthdays to strengthen our friendship.

Use 'a gift' with the article (Grammar type 22). Use 'their' to agree with plural 'friends' (Grammar type 12). Use 'on' with 'birthday' (Grammar type 11). Use 'our friendship' for clarity and correct possessive reference.

× I think a gift should within others because it's related to their interest.

✓ I think a gift should suit others because it's related to their interests.

'Should within others' is incorrect; use 'suit' to express appropriate match (Grammar type 26/11). Use plural 'interests' to match 'their' (Grammar type 1).

× For example, my brothers love MMM Lego, so I often buy.

✓ For example, my brothers love MMM Lego, so I often buy it for them.

Add object pronoun 'it' referring to the Lego and 'for them' to indicate recipient (Grammar type 12). Ensure complete clause: 'buy' needs an object (Grammar type 23).

× I go ask his birthday.

✓ I ask about it for his birthday.

Original is ungrammatical. Clarify intention: 'I ask about it for his birthday' or 'I ask him what he wants for his birthday.' Provide clear structure with subject and verb (Grammar types 26 and 23).

× This I have I have made a card for my mom's in Mathura.

✓ I once made a card for my mom in Mathura.

Remove repeated 'I have'. Use simple past 'made' for a completed action (Grammar type 5). Use 'for my mom' without possessive 'mom's' (Grammar type 22). Place time/place phrase 'in Mathura' appropriately.

× It show that me thought about her.

✓ It showed that I had thought about her.

Use past tense 'showed' for past event (Grammar type 5). Use correct subject pronoun 'I' instead of 'me' (Grammar type 12). Use past perfect 'had thought' to indicate prior thought if emphasizing sequence (Grammar type 9).

× Well, I think expensive, expensive gifts can sometimes show strong feelings because they show someone spend money and effort.

✓ Well, I think expensive gifts can sometimes show strong feelings because they show someone spent money and effort.

Remove duplicated 'expensive'. Use past tense 'spent' to describe the action of spending money for a gift (Grammar type 5). Consider using 'shows' with singular 'gift' or 'they show' with plural 'gifts'; consistency maintained here with plural 'gifts' and plural verb 'show' (Grammar type 27).

× For example, my mother give me an expensive watch for my revolution and it feels special.

✓ For example, my mother gave me an expensive watch for my birthday and it felt special.

Use past tense 'gave' for completed past action (Grammar type 5). Replace 'revolution' with 'birthday' (word choice). Use past tense 'felt' to match the past time frame (Grammar type 5). Ensure subject-verb agreement 'mother gave' (Grammar type 27).