Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and incomplete thoughts. Use simple linking words (e.g., however, because) to make the response coherent.

例: Not really. I rarely give gifts on special occasions because I prefer spending time with people rather than buying presents. However, I do try to give something small on close friends' birthdays to show I care.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence, then provide specific examples and use linking words to connect ideas. Avoid repeating the same phrase and give one concrete example of a "special day" besides birthdays.

例: I usually give gifts on birthdays because it's a meaningful day to celebrate someone. I also give presents on anniversaries or during local holidays, for example, I often buy a small book for my sister on our family anniversary.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence followed by two or three specific factors, linked with words like "firstly" and "also". Give a brief reason or an example for each factor to make your answer richer and more coherent.

例: I consider several things when choosing a gift. Firstly, quality is important because I want the recipient to actually use it. Secondly, I consider the price because I usually have a limited budget. Finally, I think about the person's hobbies—for instance, I would buy stationery for a friend who loves drawing.

提案: Answer directly and finish your thoughts. Briefly explain the reason and, if possible, offer an alternative you do when you can't make handmade gifts. Use linking words to connect the reason and the alternative.

例: No, I haven't. I'm not good at making things by hand because I find it difficult and time-consuming. Instead, I usually buy a thoughtful small gift, like a scented candle or a card, to show I care.

提案: Give a clear opinion in one sentence, then support it with a reason and a short example. Avoid informal phrases or unfinished comments. Use a linking word like "because" or "although" to connect ideas.

例: I don't think expensive gifts express feelings better because thoughtful gifts or gestures often mean more. For example, a handwritten letter or spending quality time together can show genuine affection without spending a lot.

× I'm not actually because I don't really give somebody a gifts in a special day, especially on birthday.

✓ I'm not, actually, because I don't really give people gifts on special days, especially on birthdays.

Use correct plural and pronoun forms: 'somebody' with 'a gifts' is wrong. 'People' is the correct plural general pronoun and 'gifts' matches plural. 'on special days' and 'on birthdays' are the correct prepositional phrases. Also add commas for clarity.

× I think that give giving a present to somebody is important, but for me it's like for me the the best way to.

✓ I think that giving a present to someone is important, but for me it's not the best way.

Remove duplicated words and use correct gerund 'giving'. Replace 'somebody' with 'someone'. The phrase 'it's like for me the the best way to' is ungrammatical; 'it's not the best way' conveys the intended meaning and completes the sentence.

× I think mostly is in their birthday because it's their special day.

✓ I think mostly it's on their birthdays because it's their special day.

Include subject 'it' and use plural 'birthdays' to match 'their' when speaking generally. Use preposition 'on' for days.

× They they are born on that day.

✓ They were born on that day.

When referring to a past event (birth), use past tense 'were born'. The duplicated 'They they' is an error; keep a single 'They'.

× So it's like a remarkable day to give them a present and I think also the special day off.

✓ So it's a special day to give them a present, and I also think it's a special day off.

Clarify structure: use 'a special day' rather than 'remarkable' for naturalness, add conjunction and subject in the second clause ('I also think it's a special day off'). This fixes missing subject and awkward phrasing.

× There are many factors that I consider to buy gifts to someone, but uh, the first thing is how good is this?

✓ There are many factors I consider when buying gifts for someone, but the first thing is: how good is it?

Use 'when buying' instead of 'that I consider to buy', and 'for someone' instead of 'to someone'. Replace 'how good is this?' with correct word order 'how good is it?' and add colon for clarity.

× And the second one I think is the cost because I, I don't spend much on gift, I think.

✓ And the second is the cost because I don't spend much on gifts, I think.

Use plural 'gifts' to match general reference and remove repeated 'I'. 'The second one' can be simplified to 'the second'. This addresses quantifier/number consistency.

× Uh, no, I, I don't really good at like how making because it's, it's really hard for me.

✓ No, I'm not really good at making things because it's really hard for me.

Use 'I'm not really good at' followed by gerund 'making' and an object 'things' for clarity. Remove filler 'like how' and duplicate 'it's'.

× I would rather to buy them, uh, a small gift or something else, But mostly I don't because.

✓ I would rather buy them a small gift or something else, but mostly I don't.

After 'would rather' do not use 'to' before the verb; use base form 'buy'. Lowercase 'but' and complete the sentence by removing trailing 'because'.

× Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

✓ Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

This sentence is grammatically acceptable as a question; no correction needed. It uses comparative 'better' appropriately with plural subject 'gifts'.

× Uh, I think not really because expense expensive gifts is I just like think that you, you buy and this one's so hard, bro.

✓ I don't think so, because expensive gifts don't necessarily show more feeling; I just think buying a very expensive gift is unnecessary.

Original has multiple errors: 'expense expensive gifts is' is ungrammatical and 'you, you buy and this one's so hard, bro' is unclear and informal. Rephrase to a clear negative opinion, use subject-verb agreement ('gifts don't'), and avoid slang in formal responses.