Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, umm, repeated words), and provide one or two specific reasons with linking words. Also correct grammar (e.g., 'others' preferences', 'takes a lot of time').

例: Not really. I find it difficult to choose gifts because I worry about other people's preferences, so buying a surprise often takes a lot of time and thought.

提案: Open with a clear direct answer and use linking words to explain. Reduce hesitations and make the supporting detail more specific (who, what kind of gifts).

例: I usually give gifts on people’s birthdays. For example, I often bring a cake and a small personal present like a book or a scarf to celebrate with friends and family.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and structured reasons. Avoid repetition and fix grammar ('price of the product', 'not too cheap or too expensive'). Add another specific consideration (recipient's taste) and use linking words.

例: The main thing I consider is the price of the gift, because I try to choose something affordable but not too cheap. In addition, I think about the recipient’s taste so the gift feels personal.

提案: This answer is good but reduce hesitations and correct tense and plural agreement. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific details (who, what, why it was meaningful) using linking words.

例: Yes. I made a chocolate cake with my sister for our parents’ anniversary. It took a long time to bake and decorate, but it was very meaningful for our family because we cooked it together.

提案: Give a clear opinion and support it with reasons. Avoid repetition and hesitations. Explain the idea more fully (short-term impact vs. lasting meaning) and use linking words like 'however' or 'because'.

例: I think expensive gifts can show feelings at first, but they don’t last. However, I prefer thoughtful or handmade gifts because they create longer-lasting memories and show genuine care.

× Honestly no I'm not because I always care about others preference so it it is too difficult to uh purchase umm surprising gift so it it usually takes a lot of time about.

✓ Honestly no, I'm not, because I always care about others' preferences, so it is too difficult to purchase a surprising gift and it usually takes a lot of time.

The student used 'others preference' which needs a possessive form 'others'' and plural 'preferences' (Incorrect use of pronouns and singular/plural). Also there were redundant words and awkward phrasing; use 'purchase a surprising gift' and combine clauses for clarity. Suggestion: use possessive form for others and plural when referring to multiple preferences, and simplify redundant phrases.

× It's definitely their birthday because birthday is, umm, celebrating others, so they usually give, uh, cake or their personal presents. It's really interesting and fun.

✓ It's definitely on their birthday because a birthday is a celebration of someone, so people usually give a cake or personal presents. It's really interesting and fun.

The original misused noun phrases and articles: 'birthday is, umm, celebrating others' is incorrect; use 'a birthday is a celebration of someone' (There be issue / Article errors). Also 'their personal presents' is awkward—use 'personal presents' or 'personal gifts'. Suggestion: include appropriate articles and rephrase 'celebration of someone' and use natural subjects like 'people'.

× I consider the most. Price prices of the product. So I always try to keep the price from to not too cheap and not too expensive.

✓ I consider price the most. So I always try to keep the price not too cheap and not too expensive.

Redundant 'Price prices' and 'I consider the most' are unclear; this is an incorrect use of quantifiers and sentence structure. Use 'I consider price the most' to indicate priority. Also 'keep the price from to not' is ungrammatical; simplify to 'keep the price not too cheap and not too expensive.' Suggestion: remove repetition, use correct word order for emphasis, and avoid unnecessary prepositions.

× Yes, I have uh, it's for my parents. So I made a chocolate cake with, with my, with my sisters. It take it took a lot of time, but it was a meaningful gift not only for parents and also me and my sister.

✓ Yes, I have. It was for my parents. I made a chocolate cake with my sister. It took a lot of time, but it was a meaningful gift not only for my parents but also for me and my sister.

Mixed and incorrect tenses and subject forms: 'I have uh, it's for my parents' mixes present perfect and present; use 'I have' or 'I have given one; it was for my parents.' 'It take it took' is wrong; use past tense 'took.' Also 'with my sisters' should be singular if only one sister participated; clarify as 'my sister.' 'Not only for parents and also me and my sister' needs parallel structure and articles. Suggestion: keep past events in past tense, ensure parallel structure and correct articles.

× Honestly yes, but it just for a few minutes and then I feel feel sorry to them because it's too expensive to buy it and and.

✓ Honestly yes, but it only lasts for a few minutes, and then I feel sorry for them because it is too expensive to buy.

Problems include missing verb 'lasts' (Present tense issue), duplicated word 'feel feel,' wrong preposition 'sorry to them' should be 'sorry for them,' and incomplete phrase 'and and.' Also 'it's too expensive to buy it' can omit the final pronoun. Suggestion: include proper present-tense verbs, use correct prepositions (sorry for), remove repetition and trailing conjunctions.