Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, um), and give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and finish with a brief reason or feeling.

例: Yes, I think I'm good at giving gifts. For example, when it's a friend's birthday I usually choose something cool and useful, like a gadget or a book they want, because I enjoy seeing their surprised reaction.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and then list occasions using linking words (for example, such as, or) and a specific detail about how you celebrate to make it richer and more natural. Remove repetition and fillers.

例: I usually give gifts on special occasions, such as my friends' birthdays, Mother's Day, and Teacher's Day. For instance, on birthdays I often prepare a small party and a thoughtful present to create happy memories.

提案: Start with a direct statement about the main considerations (recipient's preferences, budget, occasion). Then give one or two specific examples and use linking words. Avoid saying "I don't know" and cut out hesitations.

例: I consider the person's tastes and the occasion first. For example, if she likes fashion I might buy clothes, makeup, or accessories online, and I also keep my budget in mind so the gift is appropriate.

提案: Do not say you don't understand; ask for clarification briefly if needed, then attempt an answer. Show understanding of 'handmade' (made by hand) and give a short personal example or explain you haven't made one and why.

例: If you mean a handmade gift (made by hand), I haven't given one yet because I'm not confident in crafting. However, I once made a simple card with a photo and a short message for my mother.

提案: Answer directly with a clear opinion and then explain why with a specific reason or example. Avoid vague emotional fillers; use linking words like 'because' or 'however' to clarify your view.

例: I think expensive gifts can show strong feelings sometimes, because they often require more effort and money. However, I believe a thoughtful, affordable gift can be just as meaningful if it matches the recipient's interests.

× In my opinion, I'm good at giving a gift uh, when it's my friend's birthday, I buy a cool and interesting gift for my friend and uh, I love giving gifts and for somebody because it's good and it.

✓ In my opinion, I'm good at giving gifts. When it's my friend's birthday, I buy a cool and interesting present for them. I love giving gifts to people because it makes them happy.

Multiple issues: 1) Singular and plural issue (ID 1): 'a gift' and 'gifts' inconsistent; use plural when speaking generally. 2) Pronoun and article usage (IDs 12 and 22): 'a gift' then 'for my friend' is repetitive; use 'present' and 'them' for gender-neutral reference. 3) Sentence structure errors (ID 26): The original is run-on and unclear; split into shorter sentences. 4) Incorrect use of prepositions (ID 11): 'giving gifts and for somebody' is incorrect; use 'giving gifts to people'. Suggestion: Keep number agreement, avoid repetition, use clear pronouns, and split long run-on sentences into shorter ones.

× I usually give give gifts when my friend's birthday or my mom's day, uh, or teacher's day, I give a gift for them and I think it's a happy and it's good memory.

✓ I usually give gifts on my friend's birthday, on Mother's Day, or on Teacher's Day. I give them a gift and I think it creates happy memories.

Singular and plural issue (ID 1) and preposition errors (ID 11): Use 'give gifts' (plural) for habitual actions. Use preposition 'on' with days (on my friend's birthday, on Mother's Day). 'Give a gift for them' is incorrect; use 'give them a gift' or 'give a gift to them'. Also 'it's a happy and it's good memory' is ungrammatical; use 'creates happy memories'. Split into clearer sentences.

× I don't know, I like buy clothes and make up, uh, or bags, accessories, uh, sunglasses and these and umm, I some, I, I always buy online and uh, it might.

✓ I don't know. I like to buy clothes, makeup, bags, accessories, and sunglasses. I usually buy online.

Present tense and verb form issues (ID 6 and ID 8): 'I like buy' should be 'I like to buy' or 'I like buying' (verb + to-infinitive or gerund). 'Make up' should be 'makeup' as a noun. 'I some, I, I always buy online and uh, it might.' is incomplete and ungrammatical (sentence structure error ID 26). Suggestion: Use correct verb forms, list items cleanly with commas, and complete the final clause or remove it.

× I don't understand this sentence. Yeah, I don't understand what is a handmade.

✓ I don't understand this sentence. I don't know what 'handmade' means.

Sentence structure error (ID 26) and word order/pronoun use (ID 12): 'I don't understand what is a handmade' uses incorrect word order for indirect questions and misuses 'a' with an adjective 'handmade'. Use 'what 'handmade' means' or 'what a handmade gift is'. Suggestion: For indirect questions use subject-verb order (what handmade means), and use appropriate articles when necessary.

× Uh, yeah. Are you feel, uh, when I give expensive gift, I, uh, it uh, make me feel happy and exciting and uh, I enjoy, uh, I really enjoy giving expensive gift.

✓ Yes. When I give an expensive gift, it makes me feel happy and excited. I really enjoy giving expensive gifts.

Present tense and third person agreement (IDs 6 and 2): 'Are you feel' is incorrect for meaning; should be 'Yes' or 'I feel'. 'When I give expensive gift' needs an article: 'an expensive gift'. Subject-verb agreement: 'it make me' should be 'it makes me' (third person singular). Word choice: 'exciting' describes something that excites others; the correct adjective for a feeling is 'excited'. Also pluralize 'gifts' for general statement. Suggestion: Use correct articles, ensure subject-verb agreement, and choose correct adjective forms.