Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문장이 자연스럽지 않고 문법 오류와 어색한 단어 선택이 많습니다. 먼저 질문에 직접 답하는 주제 문장을 간단히 말한 후, 이유와 구체적인 예시로 이어지세요. 동사 사용과 소유격/목적어(예: my friends, my parents)를 바로잡고, 불필요한 단어(예: clothes)는 제거하세요. 또한 문장 길이는 2~4문장으로 유지하고 연결어(for example, because)를 적절히 사용하여 논리를 명확히 하세요.

例: Yes, I think I'm good at giving gifts. I enjoy choosing small, thoughtful presents like coffee for my friends and parents because it helps them feel energized during the day. For example, I often buy a bag of specialty coffee for a friend who works long hours, which always makes them smile.

提案: 문법(관사, 전치사)과 어순 오류가 있고 표현이 반복됩니다. ‘daily life’ 대신 ‘in daily life’ 또는 더 자연스러운 표현을 사용하세요. 먼저 일반적인 습관을 말한 뒤 주된 경우(생일 등)를 이유와 함께 구체적으로 설명하세요. 연결어(because, but) 사용을 명확히 하고 불필요한 반복을 줄이세요.

例: I sometimes like to give small gifts in everyday life, but mostly I give presents on special occasions such as birthdays and anniversaries. I do this because those days are meaningful and giving gifts is a way to show my love and appreciation.

提案: 의도는 분명하지만 문법(동명사/부정사, 단수/복수), 어휘 선택(Tumblr -> tumbler)이 틀렸습니다. ‘practical gifts’라는 주제를 먼저 말하고, 구체적 예시와 이유를 연결해서 제시하세요. 또한 ‘remind them of me’처럼 목적을 완전하게 표현하세요.

例: I usually choose practical gifts because I want them to use the items every day. For example, I often give comfortable shoes or a stainless steel tumbler, since these items are useful and can remind the recipient of me whenever they use them.

提案: 시제 일치, 어순, 중복 표현(‘I felt I felt’)과 부정확한 표현(‘that I was a middle school student’)을 고치세요. 먼저 과거 경험을 명확한 한 문장으로 말하고, 제작 과정과 감정(보람)을 구체적으로 덧붙이세요. 문장 수는 2~3문장으로 제한하세요.

例: Yes, I made a pair of knitted gloves for my mother when I was in middle school. I knitted them during a homecraft class, and it took me about a month to finish, so I felt very proud and rewarded when I gave them to her.

提案: 문법(부정문 구조, 관사, 비교 표현)과 어휘 선택(‘sincere letters’에 대한 표현 완성)이 불완전합니다. 의견을 분명히 밝힌 뒤, 이유와 구체적 예시를 명확히 제시하세요. 연결어(for example, because)를 사용해 논리를 완성하고 문장을 매끄럽게 만드세요.

例: No, I don't think expensive gifts express feelings better. For example, sometimes a sincere handwritten letter from a student means more to me than a practical or costly present because it shows thoughtfulness and personal connection.

× Yes I do.

✓ Yes, I am.

The student used 'do' as a response to 'Are you good at giving gifts?' but the correct short answer to a yes/no question with the verb 'to be' is 'Yes, I am.' Use the auxiliary that matches the main verb in the question (be -> am).

× I because gives house people happy with their trial things.

✓ I like giving people gifts because it makes them happy.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and confusing. Reorder to subject + verb + object and use appropriate verbs: 'like giving' and 'makes them happy.' 'People' should follow the verb as the object; 'trial things' is unclear so replaced with 'gifts.'

× For example, I love to buy coffees for my clothes, friends and parents because it helps them to keep energized for a day.

✓ For example, I love to buy coffee for my close friends and parents because it helps them stay energized throughout the day.

Use uncountable 'coffee' not 'coffees.' 'for my clothes' is incorrect; likely intended 'close' or 'clothes' is wrong. Use 'stay energized' rather than 'keep energized' and 'throughout the day' sounds natural. Preposition 'for' is fine with 'buy for someone.'

× I want to give gifts on a daily life but mostly I give on their special day like anniversary or birthday because the day is they deserve to be celebrated and show how I love and care about them by giving gifts.

✓ I want to give gifts in daily life, but mostly I give them on special days like anniversaries or birthdays because those days deserve to be celebrated and they show how much I love and care about them.

Use 'in daily life' or 'in everyday life' for habitual intention. Change 'give on their special day' to 'give them on special days.' Use plural 'anniversaries or birthdays.' 'the day is they deserve' is incorrect word order; use 'those days deserve to be celebrated.' Also 'show how I love' -> 'show how much I love.' Tense remains present habitual.

× I usually choose practical gifts because I want them to use everyday.

✓ I usually choose practical gifts because I want them to use them every day.

Include the object pronoun 'them' after 'use.' 'every day' should be two words when used as an adverbial phrase. 'Everyday' as one word is an adjective meaning commonplace.

× For example, I love to giving gifts like comfortable shoes and Tumblr for their daily life because it's both useful and can remind them of.

✓ For example, I love giving gifts like comfortable shoes and tumblers for daily use because they're both useful and can remind them of me.

Use 'love giving' not 'love to giving.' 'Tumblr' is likely 'tumbler' (a drinking container) and should be lowercase. Use 'for daily use' or 'for their daily life.' Sentence needed object 'of me' to clarify whom it reminds. Also 'they're both useful' agrees with plural noun.

× Yes, I have given gloves to my mother's birthday that I was a middle school student.

✓ Yes, I gave gloves for my mother's birthday when I was a middle school student.

Use simple past 'gave' for a completed past action and 'when I was a middle school student' to indicate time. 'Given gloves to my mother's birthday' is incorrect preposition; use 'for my mother's birthday.'

× I made this knitted gloves in the homecraft subject and I was very rewarded.

✓ I made these knitted gloves in my homecraft class and I felt very rewarded.

Use plural demonstrative 'these' with plural 'gloves.' 'Homecraft subject' is better as 'homecraft class.' 'Was very rewarded' is awkward; use 'felt very rewarded' or 'was very proud.'

× I felt I felt rewarded because it took a long time.

✓ I felt rewarded because it took a long time.

Remove duplicate 'I felt.' Use past tense 'felt' once. The cause 'because it took a long time' is fine.

× It takes it took about a month to make it.

✓ It took about a month to make it.

Use simple past 'took' to match the past context. Remove redundant 'takes.'

× Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

✓ Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

The question form is acceptable; no correction needed. (Included to show it's valid.)

× No, not in the average case.

✓ No, not in the average case.

Phrase is understandable though slightly formal; no grammatical correction necessary.

× For example, in sometimes I'm more appreciated to receive a sincere letters from my students then some useful practical things because they show their.

✓ For example, sometimes I appreciate receiving a sincere letter from my students more than some practical useful things because it shows their feelings.

Remove extraneous 'in.' Use 'sometimes I appreciate receiving' and singular 'a sincere letter' or plural consistently. Use 'more than' for comparison, not 'then.' Complete the idea: 'shows their feelings' or 'shows they care.' Also 'appreciated to receive' should be 'appreciate receiving.'