Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Говорите более связно и избегайте повторов и запинок. Начните с прямого утверждения, затем приведите 1–2 конкретных примера и используйте связующие слова (for example, because, so). Обратите внимание на грамматику: используйте правильные конструкции (e.g. "my friends like the gifts I give them"). Поддерживайте количество предложений до 3–4, избегая лишних междометий (uh, um).

例: Yes, I am good at giving gifts because I know my friends’ personalities well. For example, I always choose practical items for my busy friend and handmade cards for a sentimental friend, so they appreciate the thought behind the present.

提案: Упрощайте и структурируйте ответ: начните с общего утверждения, затем перечислите конкретные случаи, используя связующие слова (for example, on, during, or). Исправьте предлоги и числа (e.g. "8th of March" or "International Women’s Day"). Избегайте ненужных фраз типа "in the world".

例: I usually give gifts to my family and friends on special occasions. For example, I give presents on New Year, on the 8th of March, and on people’s birthdays.

提案: Четко сформулируйте тему, затем приведите 1–2 конкретных фактора, которые вы учитываете, используя связки (because, so, for instance). Исправьте ошибки словосочетаний (e.g. "personal characteristics" not "personal characters") и грамматику ("make the gift more meaningful").

例: I consider the recipient’s personal characteristics and interests because it shows I have thought about them. For instance, I choose books for someone who loves reading and cooking tools for a friend who enjoys cooking.

提案: Отвечайте прямо и добавляйте один конкретный пример. Избегайте повторных пауз и неправильных форм (use "handmade gifts" and "I gave handmade gifts"). Объясните, почему вы сделали такой выбор и кому он понравился больше.

例: Yes, I gave handmade gifts when I was a child because I had little money. For example, I made a photo album for my parents, and they loved it, while my classmates preferred store-bought toys.

提案: Выражайте мнение ясно и приводите причину с примером. Избегайте запинок и повторов, используйте связки (I don't think so because..., for example...). Исправьте фразы (e.g. "I don't think that's true" and "the thought behind a gift matters more than the price").

例: I don't think expensive gifts express feelings better because the thought behind a gift matters more. For example, a simple handmade card can mean more to someone than an expensive present if it shows you understand them.

× Yes, I think I'm good at giving gifts, uh, because my friends, all my friends like her gifts were that I give them.

✓ Yes, I think I'm good at giving gifts because all my friends like the gifts I give them.

The sentence misuses the pronoun 'her' and has awkward passive structure. Replace 'her gifts were that I give them' with 'the gifts I give them' to correctly use the pronoun and form an active relative clause. Also remove filler words for clarity.

× Uh, and uh, I know so much the character, I know what they like.

✓ I know their personalities well and I know what they like.

'The character' is incorrect; use 'their personalities' or 'their tastes'. 'I know so much the character' is ungrammatical. Reorder to a natural English phrasing and use the correct possessive pronoun 'their'.

× So I try to, uh, giving gifts that uh, they are liked.

✓ So I try to give gifts that they will like.

After 'try to' use the base form 'give', not the -ing form. Also 'they are liked' is passive and awkward; use active future or present 'they will like' or 'they like'.

× I give gifts by for my friends and my family at the holidays.

✓ I give gifts to my friends and family on holidays.

Use 'give gifts to' (not 'give gifts by/for') and the preposition 'on' with 'holidays' (not 'at'). Remove extra preposition for correct structure.

× So for example, New Year or eight of March or maybe in their birthday.

✓ For example, New Year, International Women's Day on March 8, or perhaps on their birthday.

Use 'on' with specific days and 'on their birthday'. Also 'eight of March' is better as 'March 8' or 'International Women's Day on March 8'. Ensure consistent preposition use.

× It's, uh, the most popular holidays.

✓ These are popular holidays for giving gifts.

Subject-verb agreement and structure are off. 'It's the most popular holidays' mixes singular 'it' with plural 'holidays'. Rephrase to plural 'These are popular holidays' to agree.

× So for giving gifts in the world.

✓ So these are common occasions for giving gifts around the world.

Fragment and unclear phrase. 'So for giving gifts in the world' is not a complete sentence. Replace with a complete clause clarifying meaning.

× I consider on personal characters of pers of persons that I want to give a gift uh because it shows I thought about their interests and make the gift more meaningful for them umm.

✓ I consider the personal characteristics of the person I want to give a gift to because it shows I thought about their interests and makes the gift more meaningful.

Do not use 'consider on'; use 'consider' followed by the object. 'Personal characters' should be 'personal characteristics' or 'personality'. Use 'person I want to give a gift to' (preposition at end is acceptable) and ensure subject-verb agreement: 'it shows' and 'makes'. Remove filler words.

× Yes. So when I was a child, uh, I don't have a lot of money to buy a gift, so I give hand my gift for my parents or my friends.

✓ Yes. When I was a child, I didn't have a lot of money to buy gifts, so I gave handmade gifts to my parents or my friends.

Tense mismatch: the main clause refers to the past so use past tense 'didn't have' and 'gave'. 'Give hand my gift' is incorrect; use 'gave handmade gifts'. Use 'to' after 'gifts' for recipients.

× Especially for my parents because for my friends, uh, I, uh, my, uh, presence because not all children like uh, handmade gifts.

✓ Especially for my parents. As for my friends, I usually gave small presents because not all children like handmade gifts.

The original is fragmented and uses 'presence' incorrectly (likely intended 'presents'). Clarify with two sentences, use 'gave' for past, and correct noun 'presents'.

× Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

✓ Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

The question itself is acceptable, but in the student's response issues appear; no correction needed for the question.

× I don't think that's it true because, uh, all present, all gifts, uh, express my feelings.

✓ I don't think that's true because all gifts can express my feelings.

Remove extra 'it' ('that's it true' -> 'that's true') and redundant words. 'All present' is incorrect; use 'all gifts' and smooth the modal: 'can express' is natural.

× Uh, it was uh, ex the visit, what uh, uh, person that I, uh, gave gift because.

✓ It depends on the person I give the gift to.

The original is unintelligible. Replace with a clear sentence that matches intended meaning: 'It depends on the person I give the gift to.' Use correct preposition and structure.