Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct minor grammar errors. Use a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and include one brief supporting detail with a linking word. Also vary vocabulary (e.g., 'attentive to' instead of 'pay attention to').

例: Yes, I am good at giving gifts because I pay close attention to people's interests. For example, I usually select items that reflect their hobbies so the gift feels personal and useful.

提案: Correct grammar and improve fluency by using one clear sentence then a supporting reason. Remove redundancy like repeating 'express love'. Use linking words such as 'because' or 'so'.

例: I usually give gifts during festivals because these occasions are a good opportunity to show gratitude to family and friends. For instance, at Lunar New Year I prepare small presents to thank relatives for their support.

提案: Good structure and examples; fix minor grammar (remove extra words, add articles) and improve linking between sentences. Use concise phrasing and varied vocabulary like 'practical' or 'appropriate'.

例: I consider whether the recipient will like and use the gift, so I choose something practical that matches their tastes. For example, I might buy a useful kitchen gadget for someone who enjoys cooking, or a bestselling novel for an avid reader.

提案: This answer is clear and honest; tighten language and correct small word choice issues ('handcrafts' -> 'handicrafts' or 'handmade items'). Add a linking phrase to connect the two sentences smoothly.

例: No, I haven't given handmade gifts because I'm not skilled at handicrafts; instead, I spend a lot of time selecting thoughtful presents based on the person's interests.

提案: Clarify confusing phrases and fix grammar. Avoid fillers like 'uh' and unclear sentences such as 'Us are thoughtfully inexpensive'. Use a clear opinion, support it with reason and an example, and link sentences with connectors like 'however' or 'rather'.

例: No, I don't believe expensive gifts express feelings better because meaning comes from thoughtfulness rather than price. For example, a small, well-chosen gift that suits someone's hobby can be more meaningful than an expensive but impersonal item.

× I think I'm very good at doing this because I often pay a lot attention to people's interests and choose gifts in a very, very personal way.

✓ I think I'm very good at this because I often pay a lot of attention to people's interests and choose gifts in a very personal way.

The phrase 'good at doing this' is awkward; 'good at this' is more natural. More importantly, 'pay a lot attention' is missing the preposition 'of' or the prepositional structure 'pay a lot of attention to'. The corrected sentence uses 'pay a lot of attention to' and simplifies 'very, very' to 'very' for natural style. Suggestion: Use 'pay a lot of attention to' and avoid redundant words.

× I usually give gifts to others on festivals because I think festival is a very good day to show gratitude and love express love to my family members and friends.

✓ I usually give gifts to others on festivals because I think festivals are very good days to show gratitude and express love to my family members and friends.

The singular noun 'festival' was used incorrectly where the plural 'festivals' fits and the sentence needs plural agreement: 'festivals are very good days.' Also the phrase 'love express love' is redundant and ungrammatical; it should be 'express love'. Suggestion: Match singular/plural and remove redundant words; ensure verbs agree with plural nouns.

× I would think about whether the person will actually like and use the gift. So I try to use choose something that fits their taste and needs.

✓ I think about whether the person will actually like and use the gift. So I try to choose something that fits their taste and needs.

The modal 'would' is unnecessary in a habitual context; present simple 'I think' is better. More importantly, 'use choose' is a mistaken combination of verbs; only 'choose' is needed. Suggestion: Use simple present for habitual actions and avoid inserting extra verbs.

× For example, if they enjoy cooking I might buy a nice kitchen gadget. But for someone likes reading I would choose a best selling book.

✓ For example, if they enjoy cooking, I might buy a nice kitchen gadget. But for someone who likes reading, I would choose a best-selling book.

The clause 'someone likes reading' needs the relative pronoun 'who' to connect the noun and the verb. Also 'best selling' as a compound adjective requires a hyphen: 'best-selling'. Suggestion: Use 'who' after 'someone' and hyphenate compound adjectives before a noun.

× To be honest, I've never given anyone a handmade gift because I'm not very good at making handcrafts. Instead, I usually spend a lot of time choosing thoughtful presents based on their personal interests.

✓ To be honest, I've never given anyone a handmade gift because I'm not very good at making handicrafts. Instead, I usually spend a lot of time choosing thoughtful presents based on their personal interests.

The main issue is word choice: 'handcrafts' is nonstandard; 'handicrafts' or 'handmade items' is correct. The rest of the sentence is grammatical. Suggestion: Use established vocabulary like 'handicrafts' or 'handmade items'.

× I don't think the value of a gift depends on its price. What matters is whether it fits the recipient's taste and needs. Us are thoughtfully inexpensive. Present can convert much more meaning than an expensive but, uh, impersonal item.

✓ I don't think the value of a gift depends on its price. What matters is whether it fits the recipient's taste and needs. Thoughtful but inexpensive presents can convey much more meaning than an expensive but impersonal item.

Several errors: 'Us are thoughtfully inexpensive' is ungrammatical and likely intended to mean 'thoughtful but inexpensive presents.' 'Present' should be plural 'presents' or the phrase rephrased, and 'convert' is the wrong verb; 'convey' is correct for conveying meaning. Also remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: Use clear noun phrases ('thoughtful but inexpensive presents'), correct verb choice ('convey'), and proper plurality.