Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response direct, grammatical and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid unclear words (e.g., "juicy") and repetitive phrases. Aim for 2–4 coherent sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy giving gifts. For example, at Diwali I give practical items like sweets and small home decorations because I think people appreciate useful presents. I try to choose gifts that match the recipient's taste so they feel valued.

提案: Answer directly and clearly with specific occasions and one brief reason. Use linking words such as "usually" or "often" and avoid vague phrases or questions inside the answer. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: I usually give gifts on special occasions such as birthdays, festivals and housewarming parties. Also, if I visit someone's home, I often bring a small gift like flowers or sweets because it makes both me and the host happy.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence and then give specific criteria with linking words (e.g., "Firstly", "Secondly"). Mention concrete examples of useful gifts to show clarity. Avoid redundant phrases.

例: When choosing a gift, I first consider its usefulness and quality. For instance, I might choose a good cookbook for someone who enjoys cooking or a warm scarf for someone who lives in a cold area, because practical gifts are more likely to be kept and appreciated.

提案: Respond directly and politely, then explain briefly with reasons. Avoid negative or absolute language; soften opinions and provide a short alternative. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: No, I usually buy presents rather than making them myself because I am not confident in my crafting skills. However, I can appreciate handmade gifts from others since they often show personal effort and care.

提案: Give a clear opinion sentence, then support it with specific reasons and an example. Use linking words like "because" and "for example" to connect ideas. Avoid unclear phrasing and aim for natural vocabulary.

例: No, I don't think expensive gifts necessarily express feelings better because what matters is the thought behind the gift. For example, a simple handwritten letter or a meaningful photograph can be more touching than an expensive item.

× Yes, I'm very good to giving different type of gifts to other as I'm a juicy person and I usually prefer to go different type of gifts to other eventually.

✓ Yes, I'm very good at giving different types of gifts to others because I'm a generous person and I usually prefer to give different kinds of gifts to people.

Errors: wrong preposition 'good to' should be 'good at'; 'different type' needs plural 'different types' or 'different kinds'; 'to other' should be 'to others' (plural) or 'to people'; 'juicy' is wrong word, likely 'generous'; 'prefer to go different type of gifts to other' is ungrammatical and corrected to 'prefer to give different kinds of gifts to people'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions (good at, give to), plural forms for count nouns, and choose appropriate adjectives.

× I believe that I always give those gifts to others which they give to me as well as I remember in my realities in a Diwali function.

✓ I believe I always give the same gifts to others that they give to me; I remember this happening at a Diwali celebration.

Errors: incorrect relative clause 'which they give to me' should be 'that they give to me'; 'those gifts' and 'the same gifts' clarified; 'I remember in my realities' is incorrect and should be 'I remember this happening' or 'I remember it from'; 'Diwali function' is better as 'Diwali celebration'. Suggestion: use correct relative pronouns (that for things), clearer pronouns, and idiomatic expressions.

× I usually prefer to give gifts to others when it is a time of occasions.

✓ I usually prefer to give gifts to others on special occasions.

Errors: 'when it is a time of occasions' is unidiomatic; quantifier/phrase misuse. Correct phrase is 'on special occasions'. Suggestion: use common collocations like 'on special occasions' or 'for special occasions'.

× Are there any function?

✓ Is there any function?

Errors: subject-verb agreement and count noun—'function' singular requires 'Is there'; though more natural: 'Is there a function?' or 'Are there any events?'. Suggestion: choose correct auxiliary verb and article with singular nouns.

× Even when I go to the house, I usually prefer to buy a gift for them so that I feel relaxed and happy while giving it.

✓ Even when I visit someone's house, I usually prefer to buy a gift for them so that I feel relaxed and happy when giving it.

Errors: 'go to the house' is awkward; use 'visit someone's house' or 'go to their house'; 'while giving it' better as 'when giving it'. Suggestion: use natural prepositional phrases and 'when' for timing.

× Usually I firstly choose the quality of the gift and think that it is better for them or not because I believe I usually gift those which is useful for others as well.

✓ Usually I first choose the quality of the gift and think about whether it will be suitable for them, because I usually give gifts that are useful to others.

Errors: 'firstly' often replaced with 'first'; 'choose the quality' is awkward — better 'consider the quality'; 'think that it is better for them or not' should be 'think about whether it will be suitable for them'; 'which is useful' should be 'that are useful' (plural agreement). Suggestion: use 'first' and correct relative clauses and plural agreement.

× If it is not useful then the person can easily forget the gift.

✓ If it is not useful, the person can easily forget the gift.

Errors: minor punctuation; sentence is otherwise acceptable. Suggestion: add comma after conditional clause for clarity.

× No, I don't believe that in handmade gifts because I feel that it is a wastage of time and I am not too much good to make a gift with my hands.

✓ No, I don't believe in handmade gifts because I feel they are a waste of time and I'm not very good at making gifts by hand.

Errors: 'believe that in' wrong word order — use 'believe in'; 'a wastage of time' should be 'a waste of time'; 'not too much good to make' should be 'not very good at making'; 'with my hands' better as 'by hand'. Suggestion: use correct collocations: 'believe in', 'a waste of time', 'good at + gerund'.

× So I usually prefer to buy gifts as compared to giving a handmade gift to others.

✓ So I usually prefer to buy gifts rather than give handmade gifts to others.

Errors: 'as compared to' is wordy and awkward here; use 'rather than' and maintain plural 'gifts'. Suggestion: use simple comparative structures: 'prefer X rather than Y'.

× No, I didn't believe that expensive is expressed battle the feelings of the person.

✓ No, I don't believe that expensive gifts better express a person's feelings.

Errors: wrong tense 'didn't believe' (general opinion should be present 'don't believe'); 'expressed battle' is garbled — intended 'better express'; missing noun 'gifts'; article and possessive adjustments. Suggestion: use present tense for general beliefs and correct verb phrase 'better express'.

× Because I believe that it is giving by the emotions and the respect, not with the prices.

✓ Because I believe that feelings are shown through emotion and respect, not by price.

Errors: 'it is giving by the emotions and the respect' is ungrammatical — use passive 'shown through' or active form; 'not with the prices' should be 'not by price' or 'not by its price'. Suggestion: use concise expressions 'shown by' or 'expressed through'.

× And even some of them are giving not as much expensive gift, but it is a masterpiece for others.

✓ And even when someone gives a less expensive gift, it can be a masterpiece for the recipient.

Errors: 'some of them are giving' awkward — use 'when someone gives'; 'not as much expensive' should be 'less expensive'; 'it is a masterpiece for others' ambiguous — 'a masterpiece for the recipient' clearer. Suggestion: use correct comparative 'less expensive' and clearer subject references.