Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (past/time references), and give one specific supporting detail. Avoid repetition and filler sounds.

例: Yes, I think I'm good at giving gifts. For example, at my former friend's birthday I gave her a bath bomb, which she really loved because it smelled nice and helped her relax.

提案: Answer directly with current habit first, then briefly mention past behavior. Use correct verb tenses and linking words for clarity. Limit to two or three supporting details.

例: Now I usually give gifts on special occasions such as birthdays, Christmas and New Year. In the past, about four years ago, I sometimes gave gifts to make amends when friends were upset with me.

提案: Avoid fillers and negative phrasing. Provide a clear topic sentence about your main consideration (recipient's taste, occasion, budget) and give specific examples linked by a reason. Keep it concise and natural.

例: I usually consider the recipient's preferences and the occasion before choosing a gift. For instance, if they like relaxing items I buy a bath bomb; if they prefer snacks I might choose a packet of crisps.

提案: Correct grammar and be specific. Start with a clear yes/no, then give one or two concise examples of handmade items and why they were appreciated. Remove repetition and unclear phrases.

例: Yes, I have, especially as a child. I often made small clothes for friends' dolls and even little outfits for their pets, which they appreciated because they were thoughtful and unique.

提案: Give a clear opinion and support it with a reason and a brief example. Use correct grammar and avoid repetition. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to make your answer coherent.

例: No, I don't think expensive gifts express feelings better because thoughtfulness matters more than cost. For example, a handmade card or a small gift that shows someone knows your tastes can be more meaningful than an expensive item.

× Yes I think I am because at my ex friend's birthday I used to gift her a bathroom bomb and she very likes it.

✓ Yes, I think I am because at my ex-friend's birthday I used to give her a bath bomb and she liked it very much.

Errors: 'used to gift' is unnatural; use 'used to give' (verb choice) and 'bath bomb' is correct term; 'she very likes it' mixes adverb placement and third-person singular tense. Use past tense 'liked' because 'used to' indicates past habit, and place adverb after verb phrase ('liked it very much'). Also add apostrophe in 'ex-friend's' and commas for clarity.

× Four years ago I used to give gifts for my friends when they are upset about me and and now I give someone gifts only for birthdays or especially events like New Year's Day, Christmas, Happy Birthday and the Halloween party.

✓ Four years ago I used to give gifts to my friends when they were upset with me, and now I give gifts only for birthdays or special events like New Year's, Christmas, birthdays and Halloween parties.

Errors: tense inconsistency: 'Four years ago' requires past 'were' not present 'are' (present tense issue). Preposition: use 'give gifts to' not 'for' (preposition issue but restricted to provided list; main is present tense). Redundant phrasing and singular/plural: 'Happy Birthday' is an expression but better as 'birthdays'; 'the Halloween party' should be plural 'Halloween parties' or 'Halloween'. Also remove double 'and' and use 'special events' instead of 'especially events'.

× I don't care what to choose, uh, I only enter the shop and, uh, choose some random products like, uh, bathroom bomb, uh, crisps and uh, some small interesting stuff, yeah.

✓ I don't worry about what to choose; I just go into the shop and choose some random things like bath bombs, crisps and some small interesting items.

Errors: 'I don't care what to choose' is acceptable but 'what to choose' could be improved; main issue: verb forms and natural collocation—use 'go into the shop' instead of 'enter the shop' for spoken English, and pluralize 'bath bombs'. 'some small interesting stuff' is vague; use 'items'. This corrects awkward verb patterns and pluralization (singular/plural issue).

× Yes, especially when I was a child. My ex friends loves to loves when I made some little stuff like clothes and the clothes for their Pets at Home and I I very like doing paper.

✓ Yes, especially when I was a child. My ex-friends loved it when I made little things like clothes, clothes for their pets at home, and I really liked doing paper crafts.

Errors: Subject-verb agreement and tense: 'My ex friends loves' should be 'My ex-friends loved' (plural subject with past tense). Repetition 'loves to loves' is incorrect. 'Pets at Home' seems to be a store name; likely 'pets at home' means 'pets at home'—so 'clothes for their pets at home'. 'I I very like doing paper' mixes adverb placement and structure; use 'I really liked doing paper crafts'. This addresses third person singular and past tense issues and adverb placement.

× No, I don't think so because I very like when people give me presents that I really enjoy about it. Can it can possibly be some unexpensive things and some random stuff. I only I like everything.

✓ No, I don't think so because I really like it when people give me presents that I truly enjoy. They can even be inexpensive things or random stuff. I like almost everything.

Errors: 'I very like' is incorrect adverb use; use 'I really like' (incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs). 'that I really enjoy about it' is ungrammatical; 'that I truly enjoy' is correct. 'unexpensive' is not a word; use 'inexpensive' (word choice). Remove repeated words and adjust sentence flow. This corrects adverb placement and adjective choice.