Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more fluent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations and repetitions, and use one or two supporting details with linking words. Correct minor grammar: say “good at giving gifts” or “a good gift-giver” and “the person who receives my present.”

例: Yes, I’m a good gift-giver. I always choose presents carefully so they suit the recipient’s tastes, and I see gifting as a way to show appreciation. For example, I often pick books for friends who love reading.

提案: Organize the answer: give a clear main idea then add one supporting detail with a linking phrase. Eliminate fillers and repetitions. Use words like “usually” and “occasionally” to show frequency.

例: I usually give gifts on special occasions such as birthdays, Christmas and Thanksgiving. Occasionally, I also buy gifts impulsively when I find something that reminds me of someone.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence then two specific criteria with linking words. Reduce hesitations and fix grammar: “whether the person will like it” and “something that will remind them of me.”

例: I consider two main things when choosing a gift: whether the person will actually like or use it, and whether it has a personal connection. For instance, I might choose a practical kitchen gadget for someone who enjoys cooking, or a photo frame to remind them of a shared memory.

提案: Clarify the contradiction in your answer and be concise. Start with a direct statement (yes or no), then explain briefly why and give a specific example if possible. Fix grammar: “I have given handmade gifts several times, but I don’t usually make them because I’m not good at DIY.”

例: I’ve given handmade gifts a few times, but I don’t make them often because I’m not skilled at DIY projects. For example, once I painted a small picture for a friend’s birthday, even though I’m usually not very meticulous at crafting.

提案: Good clear opinion and relevant explanation. To improve, add a contrasting phrase and a brief example to strengthen coherence and demonstrate vocabulary range (e.g., “on the other hand,” “sincere”). Avoid repeating words like “really” too often.

例: No, I don’t think expensive gifts express feelings better. On the contrary, sincerity matters more; a thoughtful, low-cost present can be more meaningful—for example, a handwritten letter or a homemade meal often shows genuine care.

× I would say that I am a good gifter because I when I whenever I choose gifts and preparing gifts for somebody, I would choose it meticulously so that it has some connection with the person who receiving my present.

✓ I would say that I am a good gifter because whenever I choose and prepare gifts for somebody, I choose them meticulously so that they have some connection with the person receiving my present.

Errors: incorrect verb forms and parallel structure. 'choose gifts and preparing gifts' mixes base verb and -ing form; use parallel verbs 'choose and prepare'. Also 'I would choose it' should match plural 'gifts' so use 'them'. 'person who receiving' lacks auxiliary 'is' and needs 'receiving' as participle. Suggestion: keep verbs parallel and ensure number agreement and necessary auxiliaries.

× I would choose it meticulously so that it has some connection with the person who receiving my present.

✓ I choose them meticulously so that they have some connection to the person receiving my present.

Error: preposition choice and pronoun agreement. 'connection with' is acceptable but 'connection to' is more natural here; main issue was pronoun number: 'it' should be 'them'. Also 'who receiving' missing 'is'. Suggestion: use 'connection to' or 'connection with' consistently and match pronouns in number.

× So I think, yeah.

✓ So I think so.

Stylistic: 'so' is the natural continuation; 'yeah' is informal filler. Use 'so' to complete the sentence. Suggestion: avoid filler words in formal responses.

× Uh, special occasions, I would say on birthday parties, Christmas and uh, even Thanksgiving, umm, sometimes I, uh, I would, umm, impulsively give them something because I just see that the gifts are related to them and have some connection with the people.

✓ On special occasions, such as birthdays, Christmas, and even Thanksgiving, I give gifts. Sometimes I impulsively give something because I see a gift that relates to the person.

Errors: disordered sentence and redundant words. 'special occasions, I would say on birthday parties' is awkward; use 'On special occasions, such as...'. Remove filler 'umm' and repeated pronouns. 'gifts are related to them and have some connection with the people' is vague; clarify 'relates to the person'. Suggestion: structure sentence with a topic phrase, list examples, and separate the impulsive action into a clear second sentence.

× Umm, I would consider that if the person who receive it actually like it or if it's useful for them or not, I know that they would appreciate it anyway, but I wanted to be something special and something that that person can feel, uh, uh, connected and can, it can remind me about, I remind them about me.

✓ I consider whether the person who receives it actually likes it or whether it's useful for them. I know they will appreciate it anyway, but I want it to be something special that makes the person feel connected and reminds them of me.

Errors: pronoun and verb agreement. 'person who receive' needs 'receives'; 'actually like' needs 'likes'. Tense inconsistency: 'would appreciate' vs 'I wanted' should be present 'will appreciate' and 'I want'. Redundant and confusing phrases removed. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and consistent tense; simplify to avoid repetition.

× I usually make uh, but I don't really like to making handmade gifts.

✓ I have made handmade gifts several times, but I don't really like making them.

Errors: verb forms. 'I usually make uh' is incomplete. 'like to making' incorrectly mixes infinitive 'to' with gerund 'making'; use 'like making' or 'like to make'. Suggestion: use 'like making' for preference and complete the idea about frequency.

× I don't, I'm not good with DIY projects and I'm not meticulous when it comes to uh, making handmade things, so I don't make.

✓ I'm not good with DIY projects and I'm not meticulous when it comes to making handmade things, so I don't usually make them.

Errors: sentence fragments and tense/aspect. 'I don't' alone is a fragment; complete with 'usually make them'. Suggestion: add adverb 'usually' and object 'them' to complete thought.

× Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

✓ Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

This is a question prompt from examiner; grammatically acceptable. No change necessary.

× I don't think the price of the gifts matter when it comes to expressing feelings.

✓ I don't think the price of gifts matters when it comes to expressing feelings.

Errors: subject-verb agreement and article use. 'the gifts' can be generalized to 'gifts' and verb should be 'matters' to agree with singular subject 'price'. Suggestion: use 'price matters' and omit 'the' when speaking generally.

× I think that presents are meant to come from the bottom of the heart and it must be something genuine.

✓ I think that presents should come from the bottom of the heart and should be genuine.

Errors: modal consistency and agreement. 'are meant to come' is acceptable but 'should come' is clearer; 'it must be something genuine' uses singular 'it' while 'presents' is plural—use 'should be genuine'. Suggestion: match number and use consistent modal verbs.

× So the price doesn't matter as long as you really, really want to express your love to someone.

✓ So the price doesn't matter as long as you really, really want to express your love for someone.

Error: preposition choice after 'express your love'. Use 'for someone' rather than 'to someone'. Suggestion: 'express your love for someone' is the natural collocation.