Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and use present tense; make one clear topic sentence then give one specific supporting detail. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. Use linking words like 'for example' to connect details.

例: Yes, I enjoy giving gifts. For example, I usually buy fashionable clothes for my friends on their birthdays and choose thoughtful, delicate items for my girlfriend to show affection.

提案: Answer directly and use correct prepositions and plural forms. Add a linking phrase to expand with a specific example of a festival.

例: I usually give gifts on my friends' birthdays and during traditional festivals. For example, I give red envelopes or small presents during Lunar New Year.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence about what you consider, then give one or two specific factors with correct grammar. Use linking words like 'first' and 'also'. Avoid vague advice to 'choose a lot of kinds'.

例: I consider the recipient's tastes and my budget. First, I try to pick something the person likes, such as a book if they enjoy reading, and I also make sure the gift is within my budget.

提案: Use correct verb forms and clear structure: say whether you have done it, then explain why or why not with a concise reason. Use linking words like 'because'.

例: I have given handmade gifts occasionally because they take a lot of time to make. For example, I once knitted a scarf for a close friend, but I don't often make gifts due to time constraints.

提案: Give a clear opinion with supporting reasons and correct sentence structure. Use linking words like 'because' and avoid unclear phrases. Provide a brief example to illustrate your point.

例: No, expensive gifts do not necessarily express feelings better because thoughtfulness matters more than price. For instance, a heartfelt handwritten letter or a meaningful homemade present can show more care than an expensive item.

× Actually, I was good at giving gifts sometimes.

✓ Actually, I am good at giving gifts sometimes.

The original uses past tense 'was' but the meaning refers to a habitual ability or preference now. Use present tense 'am' for current habits. Suggestion: use present simple for general abilities or tendencies (I am good at ...).

× I often send some fashion gifts to my friends when their birthday party and I always send some delicate gift to my girlfriend as a bit of indulgence.

✓ I often send fashionable gifts to my friends on their birthdays, and I always give my girlfriend a delicate gift as a treat.

Multiple issues: 'send' is not the best collocation for gifts (use 'give'). 'Fashion gifts' should be 'fashionable gifts' (adjective form). 'When their birthday party' should be 'on their birthdays' (preposition and plural). 'Some delicate gift' should be 'a delicate gift' (article). 'As a bit of indulgence' is unnatural; 'as a treat' is clearer. Use present simple for habitual actions. Suggestion: prefer 'give' for gifts and correct adjective and preposition use.

× Actually, I always give gifts to my friends when their birthday party and some traditional festivals.

✓ Actually, I always give gifts to my friends on their birthdays and during some traditional festivals.

Use 'on' with 'birthday' and plural 'birthdays' for habitual events. 'When their birthday party' is incorrect. Use 'during' or 'at' for festivals. Suggestion: use 'on their birthdays' and 'during festivals.'

× Well, in my opinion you should consider what type your friend like and what type fit your friends.

✓ Well, in my opinion you should consider what type your friend likes and what type fits your friends.

Subject-verb agreement with third person singular: 'friend' requires 'likes' and 'type' requires 'fits' or rephrase to 'what suits your friends.' Suggestion: ensure verbs agree with their subjects and consider using 'suits' for natural phrasing.

× You should choose a lot of kinds of gift in some present shop.

✓ You should choose from many kinds of gifts in a gift shop.

'A lot of kinds of gift' is unidiomatic. Use 'many kinds of gifts' or 'a lot of different gifts.' 'Some present shop' should be 'a gift shop.' Suggestion: use 'many' with countable plural nouns and 'in a gift shop' or 'from a gift shop.'

× Actually I gives others a handmade gifts not too often because it's need to spend a lot of time and not in I have not enough.

✓ Actually, I give handmade gifts to others not too often because they need a lot of time and I do not have enough.

'Gives' is wrong for first person; use 'give.' 'A handmade gifts' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'handmade gifts' or 'a handmade gift.' 'It's need to spend' is ungrammatical; correctly 'they need a lot of time.' 'I have not enough' should be 'I do not have enough time.' Suggestion: match subject and verb, fix article/noun number, and rephrase awkward clauses.

× Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

✓ Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

This sentence is a question from the examiner and is grammatically acceptable. No correction necessary.

× In my opinion, expensive gift cannot better express my feelings because I think the gifts was not decided to.

✓ In my opinion, expensive gifts cannot better express my feelings because I think the gifts do not determine feelings.

Use plural 'gifts' to match context. 'Cannot better express' is acceptable but 'cannot better express my feelings' is clearer. 'The gifts was' has wrong verb form; use 'do not determine' or 'do not decide' with plural subject. Suggestion: use correct subject-verb agreement and clearer verb choice.

× Their price is designed to their emotion.

✓ Their price does not reflect the giver's emotions.

Original 'designed to their emotion' is ungrammatical and unclear. Use 'does not reflect' to convey meaning that price does not indicate emotion. Also clarify whose emotions are meant (giver). Suggestion: rephrase with 'reflect' or 'indicate.'

× You give your friends.

✓ You do not have to give expensive gifts to show how you feel to your friends.

Original fragment 'You give your friends.' is incomplete and unclear. It seems intended to suggest how one gives to friends; rephrase to complete the idea. Suggestion: ensure sentences are complete and explicitly state the intended meaning.