Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more concise. Begin with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar (agreement, verb forms), and avoid redundancy. Use one or two linking words to show contrast and give a brief specific example of when you felt unsure.

例: Yes, I think I'm good at giving gifts. I usually spend time learning the recipient's interests and needs, so I can pick something suitable; however, I sometimes feel unsure when buying for acquaintances because I do not know their preferences well.

提案: Make the answer more natural by using correct nouns and plural forms, and limit to three sentences. Use linking words to contrast planned and spontaneous giving, and give one specific example of a spontaneous gift.

例: I usually give gifts on important occasions such as birthdays, anniversaries or holidays. However, I also enjoy spontaneous giving; for example, I sometimes bring a small bouquet to a friend recovering from illness to cheer them up.

提案: Improve vocabulary accuracy and sentence clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, then list two specific criteria using linking words (for example, 'first' and 'second'), and give a concrete example of a suitable practical gift.

例: When choosing a gift, I consider the recipient's interests and personality. First, I prefer something thoughtful rather than expensive; second, I check if the gift would be practical—for instance, a quality travel mug for a friend who commutes daily.

提案: Focus on grammatical accuracy and coherence. Use past tense consistently, correct awkward phrases, and avoid unclear cultural references unless explained. Keep it to two or three sentences and describe what you made and why it was meaningful.

例: Yes, I made a handmade birthday card for a close friend last year. Although it was simple, I wrote a personal message and decorated it by hand, which made it feel more heartfelt than a store-bought card.

提案: Clarify your opinion with correct grammar and coherent linking. Begin with a clear topic sentence stating your stance, then give one or two reasons with a brief example. Correct noun-verb agreement and word choice.

例: Not necessarily. Although luxury items can be impressive, I believe emotional meaning comes from effort and thought; for example, a thoughtfully chosen book with a handwritten note can mean more than an expensive but impersonal present.

× I usually put a lot of effort into understanding what the person truly needs or enjoy, which helped me choose something suitable so.

✓ I usually put a lot of effort into understanding what the person truly needs or enjoys, which helps me choose something suitable.

The verb after 'person' must match the third-person singular subject, so 'enjoy' should be 'enjoys' (third person singular). Also comma clause requires present tense consistency: 'which helped' should be 'which helps' to match habitual present 'usually'. Use parallel present tense for clarity. Suggestion: Make verbs consistent in tense and ensure subject-verb agreement by using 'enjoys' and 'helps'.

× However there are times when a few a bit unsure, especially when buying gifts for people I don't know very well.

✓ However, there are times when I feel a bit unsure, especially when buying gifts for people I don't know very well.

The original sentence has missing subject and extra words ('a few a bit unsure') causing structure problems. Insert the subject 'I' and the correct verb phrase 'feel a bit unsure'. Also add a comma after 'However'. Suggestion: Ensure each clause has a clear subject and verb; read aloud to check clarity.

× So I mostly gift it on significant milestone like birthday, anniversaries or that holiday.

✓ So I mostly give gifts on significant milestones like birthdays, anniversaries, or holidays.

The sentence misuses 'gift it' and articles. Use the verb phrase 'give gifts' or 'gift' without 'it'. 'Significant milestone' needs plural 'milestones' and countable nouns like 'birthdays' and 'anniversaries' need plural form. 'that holiday' is incorrect; use 'holidays'. Suggestion: Use correct noun forms and natural collocations: 'give gifts on significant milestones like birthdays'.

× However, I also a fans of spontaneous gift giving.

✓ However, I am also a fan of spontaneous gift-giving.

The original mixes plural 'fans' with missing verb 'am' and incorrect article. Correct to singular 'a fan' with verb 'am'. Use hyphen in 'gift-giving' as a compound noun. Suggestion: Check subject-verb pairing and article use: 'I am a fan'.

× Sometime a small token of appreciation just to brighten someone's day is more meaningful.

✓ Sometimes a small token of appreciation just to brighten someone's day is more meaningful.

Spelling error: 'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes' when meaning 'occasionally'. The sentence structure is otherwise present-tense general statement, so present tense is fine. Suggestion: Use 'sometimes' for frequency adverb.

× So when choosing a gift, I usually take into account the recipients references and personality.

✓ So when choosing a gift, I usually take into account the recipient's preferences and personality.

Use singular possessive 'recipient's' and correct noun 'preferences' (not 'references'). Also 'preferences' fits context. Apostrophe required for possessive. Suggestion: Use correct possessive forms and intended vocabulary: 'recipient's preferences'.

× I try to pick something that is spot, thoughtful and meaningful rather than just expensive.

✓ I try to pick something that is thoughtful, meaningful, and spot-on rather than just expensive.

'spot' is incorrect here; the idiom is 'spot-on' meaning exactly right. Also add commas in a list and keep parallel adjectives. Suggestion: Use idiomatic adjective 'spot-on' and maintain parallel adjective structure.

× I also consider whether to give its practicals and useful in their daily life.

✓ I also consider whether it is practical and useful in their daily life.

Original mixes pronouns and plural forms incorrectly: 'its practicals' is wrong. Use 'it is practical' and 'useful'. Keep pronouns consistent: 'their' can remain for gender-neutral singular but pair with 'it' referring to the gift. Suggestion: Use 'whether it is practical and useful'.

× Thus ask that 10 to make it more appreciate.

✓ Thus I try to ask about their needs to make it more appreciated.

The original is garbled and lacks clear subject and verbs. Interpretive correction: include subject 'I' and verb 'try to ask' and correct adjective 'appreciated'. Suggestion: Ensure each sentence has clear subject, verb, and object; avoid unclear fragments.

× So yes I have I want make a handmade card for my close friend on their birthday.

✓ So yes, I have. I wanted to make a handmade card for my close friend on their birthday.

Original mixes present and past incorrectly and misses punctuation. Use 'I have' as short answer then past 'wanted' to describe action completed in past. Also add punctuation. Suggestion: Use proper tense sequence and separate clauses with punctuation.

× Although it was quite simple, it was very Persian night Persian, no lies and heartfelt Is make it more special than the store valve gifts.

✓ Although it was quite simple, it was very personal, honest, and heartfelt, which made it more special than store-bought gifts.

The sentence contains many incorrect words: 'Persian' should be 'personal', 'no lies' should be 'honest', 'Is make' should be 'which made', and 'store valve' should be 'store-bought'. Correct grammar and word choice restore meaning. Suggestion: Choose correct adjectives and relative clause 'which made' to explain result.

× Not necessarily why luxury item are nice, I will leave the emotional resonance of the gift come from the effort and thought put into it.

✓ Not necessarily. While luxury items are nice, I believe the emotional resonance of a gift comes from the effort and thought put into it.

The original lacks connectors and subject-verb agreement: 'luxury item are' should be 'luxury items are'. 'I will leave the emotional resonance... come' is ungrammatical; use 'I believe the emotional resonance... comes'. Suggestion: Use clear connectors ('while') and ensure subject-verb agreement 'comes'.

× A simple, well chosen items can often convey far more thinnerly than an overpriced impersonal object.

✓ A simple, well-chosen item can often convey far more than an overpriced, impersonal object.

Subject-verb agreement: 'items' should be singular 'item' to match 'a'. Hyphenate 'well-chosen'. 'Thinnerly' is incorrect; remove it. Add comma for 'impersonal'. Suggestion: Ensure number agreement ('a ... item') and use correct adverb/adjective forms; avoid nonwords like 'thinnerly'.