Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms (use 'find out' or 'find') and articles/plurals ('a gift'/'gifts').

例: Yes, I think I'm good at giving gifts. I always try to learn the recipient’s personality and needs, and then choose a present that matches their tastes. For example, I once bought a custom notebook for a friend who loves writing, which she appreciated.

提案: Avoid repetition and reduce length. Begin with a direct answer, then add one specific example. Fix tense consistency ('found' -> 'find' or 'find something' -> 'finds'). Use linking words like 'however' or 'also' for coherence.

例: I usually give gifts on birthdays, but I also buy presents occasionally when I see something special. For instance, last month I found a book I knew my sister would like and bought it for her immediately.

提案: Make the answer clearer and more grammatical. Use a topic sentence then list two or three specific factors, linked with connectors like 'for example' or 'and also'. Remove redundancies and correct verb tenses.

例: I mainly consider the person’s likes, needs, and interests when choosing a gift. For example, if someone enjoys cooking, I might buy a useful kitchen tool that fits both their hobby and current needs.

提案: Reduce hesitation words ('umm', 'uh') and improve fluency by using a clear structure: topic sentence, brief detail, and result. Correct awkward phrases ('handy made' -> 'handmade', 'in the spend a lot of time' -> 'I spent a lot of time').

例: Yes, I learned to crochet a year ago and I made bracelets for friends. Although they took a long time to make, they were handmade and my friends really appreciated the effort.

提案: Answer directly and support with a clear reason and example. Fix small grammatical errors and remove repetition ('as as', 'their likes'). Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example'.

例: Not necessarily, because the value of a gift is more about meaning than price. For example, a thoughtful handwritten letter or a small item that matches someone’s hobby can show more feeling than an expensive but impersonal present.

× I try to actually found out their needs and give them gift accordingly.

✓ I try to actually find out their needs and give them gifts accordingly.

'Found' is the past tense of 'find' and is incorrect after 'try to'. After 'try to' we need the base verb form 'find'. Also 'gift' should be plural 'gifts' to match general meaning. Suggestion: use 'try to find out' and pluralize countable nouns when speaking generally.

× I always study the personality of the person that I'm giving gifts to and I try to actually found out their needs and give them gift accordingly.

✓ I always study the personality of the person I'm giving gifts to, and I try to actually find out their needs and give them gifts accordingly.

The original has an unnecessary 'that' which is not incorrect but makes the sentence wordy; more importantly, punctuation and flow improve with a comma and removing redundancy. Also 'to' at end is acceptable in spoken English; keep it. Suggestion: remove extra words and add a comma for clarity.

× but I sometimes give gift occasionally to people that I love or when I found something in the market that I thought that they might actually love, then I bought it for them.

✓ but I sometimes give gifts occasionally to people I love, or when I find something in the market that I think they might actually love, I buy it for them.

'Give gift' should be 'give gifts' (plural) when speaking generally. Tenses were inconsistent: use present simple 'find' and 'think' to match habitual action, and 'buy' instead of past 'bought'. Also remove redundant 'that'. Suggestion: keep present simple for repeated actions and pluralize countable nouns.

× So it's mainly for birthdays, but I do love to give them occasionally too.

✓ So it's mainly for birthdays, but I do love to give them occasionally too.

This sentence is acceptable grammatically. No correction needed. (No change required.)

× I consider so much what the person likes and dislikes and what their what the things they want or the things they need and also their interest.

✓ I consider carefully what the person likes and dislikes, what they want or need, and also their interests.

Original repeats phrases and mixes possessives. Use 'they' as a gender-neutral singular pronoun consistently. 'What their what the things they want' is redundant. 'Interest' should be plural 'interests' to match listing. Suggestion: simplify and use 'carefully' instead of 'so much'.

× So I bought all these things into perspective when I buy them gift because I like my gift to to be the best possible.

✓ So I take all these things into perspective when I buy them gifts because I like my gifts to be the best possible.

'Bought' is past tense and should be 'take' or 'keep' in present habitual context. 'Buy them gift' is incorrect: use 'buy them gifts' (plural). Duplicate 'to to' is an error. 'Gift' should be plural. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions and correct noun forms.

× Yes, I learned crochet umm, a year ago and I started making bracelets for the people around me and uh, it took me a lot of time to finish, but it was worth it and I hope they like it it.

✓ Yes, I learned to crochet a year ago and I started making bracelets for the people around me; it took me a lot of time to finish, but it was worth it and I hope they liked them.

Use 'learned to crochet' not 'learned crochet'. Also 'it took' is fine, but 'I hope they like it it' has repetition and pronoun mismatch: 'bracelets' plural so 'them' and if event in past 'hope they liked them' or present 'hope they like them'. Both are acceptable; use 'liked' to match 'it took' past. Suggestion: use correct verb pattern 'learned to V' and match pronouns to plural nouns.

× It's not the most amazing bracelet you can ever find, but it was handy made in the spend a lot of time for that and they appreciated that a lot.

✓ It's not the most amazing bracelet you can ever find, but it was handmade and I spent a lot of time on it, and they appreciated that a lot.

'Handy made in the spend a lot of time for that' is ungrammatical. Use adjective 'handmade' (one word) and correct verb phrase 'I spent a lot of time on it.' Suggestion: break into clearer clauses and use standard collocations 'spend time on something' and 'they appreciated it.'

× Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

✓ Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

Question is grammatical; no article change needed. (No correction required.)

× Not necessarily. As long as the gift is meaningful, fits to their personalities and interest, you're fine.

✓ Not necessarily. As long as the gift is meaningful, fits their personalities and interests, you're fine.

'Fits to' is incorrect; use 'fits' directly with the object. 'Interest' should be plural 'interests' to match 'personalities.' Suggestion: drop 'to' and pluralize nouns in lists.

× Even if it's as as a cheap as $1.00, it doesn't matter as long as they will like it and it fits with their interest and their likes.

✓ Even if it's as cheap as $1.00, it doesn't matter as long as they like it and it fits their interests and preferences.

Remove duplicate 'as'. Use 'they like it' (present simple) instead of 'they will like it' for general statements. 'Fits with' can be 'fits' and 'interest and their likes' is repetitive; use 'interests and preferences.' Suggestion: simplify and use present simple for general truths and standard collocations.