Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and avoid unclear phrases (e.g. "it's mean" and "I really know the meal"). Add one specific example and a linking phrase to support your statement.

例: Yes, I think I'm good at giving gifts. I usually choose something that matches the recipient's hobbies or needs, for example a cookbook for my friend who loves cooking. Because I pay attention to their interests, my presents are usually well received.

提案: Give a clear direct answer, correct vocabulary and reduce repetition. Use linking words to add a brief reason and an example. Replace unclear words like "specialist" with "special" and avoid fragmented sentences.

例: I usually give gifts on someone's birthday because it is a special occasion. For instance, I send a small present and card to close friends to celebrate their day and show I care.

提案: Open with a topic sentence, then support with specific reasons and one example. Correct grammar (drop unnecessary prepositions) and avoid informal fillers. Use a linking word to connect idea and example.

例: I usually choose practical gifts because I want them to be useful. For example, I once gave my sister a high-quality travel mug so she could use it daily; whenever she uses it, she'll think of me.

提案: Answer directly, then give a concise description and one specific detail about materials or process. Use linking words to make it coherent and correct minor grammar issues.

例: Yes, I often make handmade gifts such as painted postcards or birthday cards. For example, I paint small illustrations of the recipient's favorite things and assemble them into a decorated card.

提案: Give a clear direct opinion sentence, then briefly explain with a reason and an example. Fix grammar and avoid repeating the same idea. Use linking words like "because" or "for example."

例: No, expensive gifts are not necessary to show feelings because thoughtfulness matters more than price. For example, a meaningful handwritten letter with a small useful present can be more touching than an expensive item.

× I always find a gift that the person who get it will really like and enjoy my gift because if I wanna give the gift to someone, it's mean.

✓ I always find a gift that the person who gets it will really like and enjoy, because if I want to give a gift to someone, it means I know them well.

Pronoun and verb agreement: 'person who get' needs third person singular verb 'gets' (subject-verb agreement). 'Wanna' is informal; use 'want to'. 'It's mean' is incorrect collocation; use 'it means' and complete the clause. Use commas to separate clauses. Suggestion: Use standard forms and check subject-verb agreement and idiomatic expressions.

× I really know the meal so I know what they want.

✓ I really know them well, so I know what they want.

Pronoun and word choice: 'know the meal' is incorrect; likely meant 'know them well'. Replace with correct pronoun phrase. Ensure clarity by specifying object 'them'. Suggestion: Use clear pronouns and verify lexical choices.

× I always give the gift in their birthday because for me birthday is the specialist day.

✓ I always give gifts on their birthday, because to me a birthday is a special day.

Preposition: use 'on' for days/events ('on their birthday'). Article and adjective: 'specialist' is wrong; use 'special'. Include indefinite article 'a' before 'birthday'. Also pluralize where appropriate and use 'gifts' consistently. Suggestion: Use 'on' for occasions and correct adjective forms.

× Because I think it's everyone need to have own space.

✓ Because I think everyone needs to have their own space.

Pronoun and verb agreement: 'it's everyone need' is ungrammatical. Use 'everyone needs' (singular agreement) and possessive 'their own' for gender-neutral reference. Remove unnecessary 'it's'. Suggestion: With 'everyone' use singular verb and 'their' for possession.

× I consider about the practical gift because I really want them to use my gift, not just like show in the room.

✓ I consider practical gifts because I really want them to use my gift, not just display it in the room.

Verb+preposition: 'consider about' is incorrect; use 'consider' without 'about'. Word choice: 'show' should be 'display' and add object 'it'. Make nouns plural for general statements ('practical gifts'). Suggestion: Use correct verb patterns (consider + noun) and appropriate verbs for actions.

× And I thought every time that they used my gift, they're gonna like they're gonna miss me.

✓ And I think that every time they use my gift, they're going to like it and miss me.

Tense and informal contractions: 'thought' should be 'think' for habitual present. 'Used' should be 'use' (present tense). Replace slang 'gonna' with 'going to' and add object 'it'. Suggestion: Match tense to habitual action and avoid informal contractions in formal speech.

× The gift that I make by myself is like the postcard or the birthday card.

✓ The gifts that I make myself are postcards or birthday cards.

Subject-verb agreement and form: 'The gift that I make by myself is like the postcard' is awkward. Use plural 'gifts' and plural noun forms. Also 'make by myself' is better as 'make myself'. Suggestion: Use natural phrasing and ensure subject-verb agreement and pluralization.

× I always do like I paint everything that they like in the small piece and put them together.

✓ I usually paint everything they like on small pieces and put them together.

Prepositions and article use: 'do like I paint' is unnatural; use 'usually paint'. Use 'on small pieces' not 'in the small piece'. Use plural 'pieces' and 'put them together' matches plural. Suggestion: Use adverbs of frequency and correct prepositions ('on') with 'paint'.

× No, it's don't For me, the gift that will express my feeling is don't need to be expensive, but need to be something that I can use and it's practical.

✓ No, it doesn't. For me, a gift that expresses my feelings does not need to be expensive, but needs to be something useful and practical.

Auxiliary and subject-verb agreement: 'it's don't' is wrong; 'it doesn't' or 'no' alone works. Use 'a gift that expresses' (present tense agreement). Use 'does not need' and 'needs to be' to match singular subject. 'I can use' changed to 'useful' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: Ensure correct auxiliary verbs and maintain subject-verb agreement.

× Something like that for me don't need to be expensive.

✓ For me, something like that does not need to be expensive.

Subject-verb agreement and word order: 'for me don't need' is incorrect. Use 'does not need' for singular 'something' and place 'for me' at start or end. Avoid double negatives and informal contractions. Suggestion: Use correct auxiliary 'does not' with singular subjects and arrange adverbial phrases clearly.