Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response slightly more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with a linking word. Avoid redundant phrases like “do something” and minor grammar slips.

例: Yes, I think I'm good at giving gifts. I always consider the person's preferences and hobbies, so I choose items or experiences they will actually enjoy; for example, I once gave a friend a pottery class because she loves crafting and we had a memorable day together.

提案: Clarify and correct awkward phrases and be direct. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct word choice (e.g., not “authors”), and provide a short, specific list using linking words such as “for example” or “such as.”

例: I usually give gifts on special occasions. For example, I give presents for birthdays, anniversaries, graduations, and other important milestones because I see gift-giving as my way of showing affection.

提案: Make the answer more natural and avoid capitalization errors. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide a concrete example of a sentimental vs functional gift.

例: I mainly consider the recipient's personality and memories we share. I prefer personal, sentimental gifts rather than purely functional ones; for instance, I might give a framed photo from a trip we took together so they can keep it and remember me.

提案: Streamline the grammar and keep it within three sentences. Use past tense consistently and give a specific example of a handmade gift and the reaction it received.

例: Yes, I used to make handmade gifts in high school. I often wrote letters for close friends and family, and they appreciated having a personal keepsake—one friend told me she still keeps that letter in a box.

提案: Correct vocabulary mistakes (e.g., “hand meat” is incorrect) and avoid repetition. State your opinion clearly, give a reason, and provide a specific example of a meaningful inexpensive or handmade gift.

例: No, I don't think expensive gifts express feelings better. I prefer handmade or thoughtful presents because they show effort; for example, I once made a scrapbook for a friend that meant more to her than any costly item would have.

× I'm actually quite good at giving gifts because I always take time to do something that suits the person, for example, their preferences, their hobbies and something that's a memorable event with us.

✓ I'm actually quite good at giving gifts because I always take time to do something that suits the person, for example, their preferences, hobbies, and something that will be a memorable event for us.

Original mixes pronoun references and has awkward phrase 'something that's a memorable event with us.' Replace 'their hobbies and something that's a memorable event with us' with 'hobbies, and something that will be a memorable event for us' to clarify reference and correct phrasing. Use parallel list structure (preferences, hobbies) and change 'with' to 'for' to show who experiences the memory.

× It is actually a love language, so I usually give gifts to authors when it's their birthdays, anniversary, graduation, or anything special with that person.

✓ Giving gifts is actually a love language, so I usually give gifts to others on their birthdays, anniversaries, graduations, or any other special occasions for that person.

'It is actually a love language' is grammatically possible but unnatural; use 'Giving gifts is...' to match the activity. 'authors' is likely incorrect contextually; changed to 'others.' Also pluralize events ('birthdays, anniversaries, graduations') and use 'on' for dates and 'occasions for that person' to correct preposition use and noun forms.

× Of course I consider the person himself. I want it to be personal and sentimental. It's not just functional, but something that they can keep forever. And when they look at it, they will Remember Me.

✓ Of course I consider the person. I want the gift to be personal and sentimental. It's not just functional, but something that they can keep forever. When they look at it, it will remind them of me.

'Himself' is gender-specific and awkward; use 'the person' or 'them.' 'I want it to be' is vague—specify 'the gift.' 'They will Remember Me' is incorrect verb form and capitalization; use 'it will remind them of me' for correct subject-pronoun and natural phrasing.

× Of course, when I was in high school, I really love writing letters and I gave it to everyone that is special to me, to my friends, to my family, something that they could keep it.

✓ Of course, when I was in high school, I really loved writing letters, and I gave them to everyone who was special to me: my friends and my family — something they could keep.

Tense inconsistency: 'when I was in high school' requires past tense 'loved' not 'love.' Pronouns: 'I gave it' should be 'I gave them' because letters are plural. Relative clause: use 'who was special to me' instead of 'that is special.' Remove redundant 'it' after 'something they could keep.' Ensure consistent past tense throughout.

× No, actually no. I'm not good at choosing expensive gifts, so I prefer keeping hand meat that is made from love.

✓ No. I'm not good at choosing expensive gifts, so I prefer giving handmade gifts that are made with love.

'Hand meat' is a mispronunciation/mistyping of 'handmade' and is semantically incorrect. 'Prefer keeping' is wrong collocation; use 'prefer giving' or 'prefer handmade gifts.' Also replace 'made from love' with the idiomatic 'made with love.' Simplify double 'No' to a single 'No.'