Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then provide one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Correct small grammar errors (e.g., 'persons' -> 'person', 'that match' -> 'which match' or 'that match').

例: Yes, I’m good at choosing gifts because I try to match the present to the recipient’s personality. For example, for a friend who loves cooking I usually buy a high-quality cookbook or a unique kitchen gadget.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence and avoid filler words. Fix incorrect words ('done','chair') and use a linking phrase to add one clear supporting detail. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: I usually give gifts on special occasions such as weddings, birthdays and anniversaries. I do this because it’s a simple way to show appreciation, and often I choose personalized presents that reflect the recipient’s interests.

提案: Reduce hesitation and correct grammar: use clear subject-verb agreements and smoother clauses. Begin with a topic sentence: state the main consideration, then give one concise example with relevant details. Avoid vague endings.

例: I consider how useful the gift will be and whether it matches the recipient’s personality or needs. For example, last week I gave a friend a fashionable scarf because she often wears elegant accessories.

提案: Remove filler sounds and repeat phrases. Give one clear example with a linking word and concise detail about the effort involved. Maintain natural phrasing and correct small repetitions.

例: Yes, I prefer handmade gifts because they show I care. For example, I often bake a cake for friends’ birthdays and bring it to the party so they know I invested time and effort.

提案: Clarify opinion with a topic sentence and correct grammar (singular/plural, comparative forms). Use a linking word to support your view with a specific example. Keep sentences concise and natural.

例: No, I don’t think expensive gifts express feelings better. Instead, handmade or personalized presents are more meaningful because they show the giver invested time; for instance, a carefully chosen book can be more touching for a book lover than an expensive gadget.

× I enjoy picking a thoughtful persons that match their personality or needs for example, for example.

✓ I enjoy picking a thoughtful present that matches the recipient's personality or needs, for example.

The sentence used 'persons' (plural noun) incorrectly with 'a' and 'thoughtful' as an adjective; the meaning calls for a singular noun like 'present' or 'gift'. Also subject-verb agreement: 'that match' should be 'that matches' to agree with the singular 'present'. Use 'recipient's' instead of 'their' when referring back to a singular noun to be more precise. Remove the repeated phrase 'for example'. Suggestion: Say 'I enjoy picking a thoughtful present that matches the recipient's personality or needs, for example.'

× I usually give gifts on special occasions done such as weddings, birthdays and anniversaries.

✓ I usually give gifts on special occasions such as weddings, birthdays, and anniversaries.

The word 'done' is unnecessary and incorrect in this context. The correct preposition phrase is 'on special occasions such as...'. Also add a comma before the final item in a list for clarity. Suggestion: Remove 'done' and use 'on special occasions such as...'.

× I enjoy doing this because it's a simple way to show my chair and appreciation for the recipients and for example, I like to choose personalized presents that reflect their interests.

✓ I enjoy doing this because it's a simple way to show my care and appreciation for the recipients. For example, I like to choose personalized presents that reflect their interests.

The word 'chair' is a wrong word here; the intended word is 'care' (a noun showing concern). The sentence was long and awkward; split into two sentences and remove the redundant phrase 'for example' within the same sentence. Also 'recipients' is fine in plural. Suggestion: Use 'care' and split into two sentences for clarity.

× I always try to buy something is useful for gift, uh, something is based on umm, the recipients personality or meet their needs.

✓ I always try to buy something useful as a gift, based on the recipient's personality or to meet their needs.

The original has missing and misordered verbs ('something is useful for gift') and unclear structure. Correct structure uses adjective 'useful' before noun 'gift' or the phrase 'as a gift'. 'The recipients personality' needs an apostrophe for possessive singular 'recipient's'. 'Meet their needs' should be linked with 'to' or rephrased. Suggestion: 'I always try to buy something useful as a gift, based on the recipient's personality or to meet their needs.'

× For example, last week I gifted my one of a friend, uh, really fashionable.

✓ For example, last week I gave a really fashionable item to one of my friends.

The verb 'gifted' is acceptable but awkward here; 'gave' is more natural. The phrase 'my one of a friend' is incorrect word order; correct form is 'one of my friends'. Also 'really fashionable' needs a noun ('item' or 'piece') after it. Suggestion: 'Last week I gave a really fashionable item to one of my friends.'

× I prefer to give handmade gifts, uh, because they show I care.

✓ I prefer to give handmade gifts because they show that I care.

The sentence is mostly correct but missing the conjunction 'that' after 'show' makes it slightly informal; include 'that' for clarity. Also remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: 'I prefer to give handmade gifts because they show that I care.'

× For example, for birthdays I often, uh, bake a cake and make cake and bring it into the party so the recipient knows I put time and effort into the present.

✓ For example, for birthdays I often bake a cake and bring it to the party so the recipient knows I put time and effort into the present.

The phrase 'make cake and bring it into the party' is redundant and awkward. Use 'bake a cake and bring it to the party.' Remove filler 'uh' and ensure correct preposition 'to' for attending an event. Suggestion: 'I often bake a cake and bring it to the party.'

× Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

✓ Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

This question is grammatically acceptable. No correction needed. Note: left here to show it's correct; no change required.

× I don't think so. A special handmade gifts shows my feeling better than an expensive one.

✓ I don't think so. A special handmade gift shows my feelings better than an expensive one.

Subject-verb agreement and article/noun number: 'A special handmade gifts' mixes singular article 'A' with plural 'gifts'; change to singular 'gift'. 'Feels' should be plural 'feelings' to match common usage. Also 'shows' agrees with singular 'gift'. Suggestion: 'A special handmade gift shows my feelings better than an expensive one.'

× Personalized presents show than the gift giver put more efforts or time into it.

✓ Personalized presents show that the gift giver put more effort or time into it.

The phrase 'show than' is incorrect; should be 'show that'. 'Put' should be 'puts' to agree with singular 'gift giver', or keep 'gift giver' plural. Also 'efforts' should be uncountable 'effort' in this context. Suggestion: 'Personalized presents show that the gift giver puts more effort or time into it.'

× For example, a book can be more meaningful gift for a bookish person than an expensive item.

✓ For example, a book can be a more meaningful gift for a bookish person than an expensive item.

Missing article 'a' before 'more meaningful gift'. Include 'a' to form 'a more meaningful gift'. The rest is fine. Suggestion: 'A book can be a more meaningful gift for a bookish person than an expensive item.'